Douluo: the Peerless Eternal Sky

So far, overall it's okay. However, the interaction with the Xuanming Sect [suspected passerby] at the beginning takes up nearly ten chapters, and readers have to wait for five days for updates. If there is no corresponding [foreshadowing recycling or plot echo] in the follow-up, such redundant descriptions are placed at the beginning, which seems to be too much in terms of narrative rhythm and structural arrangement. Appropriately simplifying this part of the content, compressing it to about one-third of the length, may make the opening more attractive. Especially considering that the plot of the Four Nations Competition will be officially launched in the follow-up, if each opponent's appearance, interaction and battle are described with similar density, and considering the frequency of updates, it will easily lead to the focus of the narrative being scattered and the rhythm to be delayed, affecting the compactness and coherence of the main plot. I hope that in the future, the words and inks will be allocated appropriately in the description of group portraits to highlight [key scenes and key roles]. In addition, regarding multi-female protagonist settings, if the character cannot make a substantial contribution to the protagonist's [career growth, ability improvement, or plot advancement], lacks independent personality and existence value, and only appears as a vassal or "trophy" of the protagonist, which does not contribute to the advancement of the main plot and the growth of the protagonist, it is recommended to [include it carefully, downplay it, or discard it decisively]. [Of course, if the focus of the design of this work is to collect stamps and make them pornographic, then let's talk about it...] Especially those characters who belong to hostile camps, have major conflicts (such as the Holy Spirit Cult, Shrek, the Tang family, Soul Beast) or have certain controversies (such as the two Holy Spirit Cult saints, the orange who borrows seeds to give birth to children, and the Tang Princess with a divided personality), and Or being included in the harem can easily lead to logical contradictions in the plot and the collapse of the character's image (the protagonist kills his close relative Ditian, but Ruiju falls in love with the enemy who killed his father, causing ethical discomfort). This kind of blunt "betrayal" or "love brain"-style betrayal will only weaken the persuasiveness of the plot and the charm of the character, and the necessity and narrative function of its existence need to be strictly grasped.

No matter how it is written, the author put his heart into it. Basically every chapter will be explained and compared with the original text of Peerless Tang Sect, which is very detailed. Unlike other authors who just don't have enough money, they don't even understand the original work. But when I think of the author studying the peerless Tang Sect in detail and eating it over and over again, I want to laugh.

The writing is very good, but I want to laugh when I think of the author reading the original work over and over again💩

I don't know why people keep washing Emperor Tian. Emperor Tian was a pure beast and pure joy. He was trained by the Dragon God 😅 All the things he did were funny. It would be better to give the auspicious beast the reverse scale to Huo Yuhao as early as possible, so as to guard the auspicious beast. When Gu Yuena was resurrected, she knew she would first take control of the Spirit Transferring Tower, and then discover that the ten-thousand-year-old soul could completely control human beings. With Di Tian having a seat in the Spirit Transferring Tower, he kept the soul beast on the verge of extinction. And the finale of Legend of the Dragon King is even more funny. Gu Yuena is in love with her head, as long as she completes the purpose of reviving the soul beast. Tang Wulin and Gu Yuena are equally powerful, and the Tang Sect, Shrek, and the Spirit Transferring Pagoda are all under control. Even the federal council member is Tang Wulin's sister. The entire Douluo Star is Tang Wulin and Gu Yuena's one word. It is no different from reunification. The revival of the soul beast is an irreversible event. In the end, Gu Yuena was forced to synthesize the Dragon God (according to the setting of Dou Si, it was impossible for Gu Yuena to synthesize the Dragon God. At most, she would get an out-of-control monster on the verge of exploding). In the end, Gu Yuena was forced to death, and then Tang Wulin was gone. What was the difference between the soul beast being in Dou Si and being kept in captivity? Dou San Di Tian: I want Tang Wulin to die! Fighting the Four Emperors: Still remembering the burial of dragons for a thousand days, I admire Mr. Lin🙂

It's well written, but it's a pity that the anti-piracy version is on.

Let's start with a few super spirit goalkeepers who are neither above nor below: Holy Dragon of Light, Holy Dragon of Darkness, Purple Heaven-Destroying Dragon, Xuanwu (there is no essential difference in strength between Golden Xuanwu and Xuanwu), Blood Soul Demon Puppet (doubtful), Taotie Divine Bull, Dark Gold Three-Headed Bat King (doubtful)

It stands to reason that in a story with multiple female protagonists, the male protagonist will get more likes than all the female protagonists, and the writing is generally not bad.

Kong Tianxu The first martial soul Silver Dragon: Innate ability element control, elemental vision, super elemental resonance The first soul ring thousand-year super bloodline Thousand Thunder Demon Eagle, the soul skill Crazy Demon Thunder Flash, the advanced use of Crazy Demon Thunder Lightning Strike; the second soul ring five The thousand-year-old top bloodline mutated wind and fire dual-attribute sun bug, the soul skill Solar Storm Domain; the third soul ring nine-thousand-year-old Snow Girl, the soul skill Cold Sky Snow Seal; the fourth soul ring thirty-thousand-year fairy grass, the soul skill Saint Yuan Ling Gathering; the fifth soul ring fifty-thousand-year-old Golden Lion King, the soul skill golden violent blood. Second Martial Spirit Supreme Body: Innate ability: eye clairvoyance, hearing enhancement, innate ten thousand beginnings return to the original domain, innate gold level second awakening, combat skills commandment of the sky Equipment: Gold of Life

I didn't expect that Tang San's boy 😁 would read this book, but I couldn't explain it, so I blocked him. He has double standards for Tang San and the protagonist of the same novel. I really learned the essence by imitating Tang San. I can only say that Tang San's boy did have some influence, and he was a substitute for Tang San.

The author wants to follow the sun and moon line, will he accept the world of mortals? 🙂

He must have robbed Huo Gou of all his opportunities. Seeing this dog makes me sick🤢

These days, I see some people are controversial about the role of Huo Yuhao. Let me briefly talk about my views on this character. First of all, let's make it clear that Huo Yuhao is undoubtedly a tragic character. He was born in a humble background, lost his mother when he was young, lost his master twice when he was young (Mu En and Elex), and his emotional experience is even more messy. Tang San used the test to imprison Huo Fengyu's experience, and he was manipulated in various ways from beginning to end. Among the four protagonists in the Douluo series, he is one of the most miserable. This kind of experience shaped Huo Yuhao's character. He was impulsive, cruel and reckless because of his lack of self-love, and he was weak because of his lack of love. In his early days, Huo Yuhao was extremely ruthless in his actions, and he was ruthless towards his enemies and himself. As he grew up, he did not show it on the outside but remained the same on the inside, often taking risks with his own life. But when he was about to die, the priorities of the people from the Sea of ​​Spirits were always ahead of him. It can't be said that he didn't worry about the high expectations placed on him because he had a family with him, but he really didn't worry much. There is no need to go into details as to how much Nuo Huo Nuo was when he was in prison. The prince had stolen the child and still insisted on going back to return the child. He was so weak that there was no limit to his weakness. Let's talk about a few more black points that I think are unreasonable. One is cheating in the first game. There is nothing to say about the first game. Purebred Shrek's Glory is amazing. In the second game, cheating is a trivial matter. Leaving aside glory and other things, someone really needs to send it away with the intensity of the second game. The second is the bombing of Mingdu. This is of course a black spot, regardless of subjective wishes, but objectively speaking, this matter has indeed greatly slowed down the speed of the Sun and Moon invasion. The Sun and Moon Empire, which has not installed linked soul guides, will inevitably rely more on the Holy Spirit Cult to start the war in advance. The third is the short story about sesame cakes. If you read this one again, you will know that it is about saving food. It feels not as pure as the short story about Laolin's soul. Finally, let's talk about the biggest tragedy of this character. As we all know, tjss has always been a set of feudal values ​​​​of kings, ministers, fathers, and sons. The tragedy of a character like Lao Huo whose initial goal is to kill his father is doomed from the beginning. Lao Huo's goal has always been revenge, but Huo Yun'er's last words have always been there, and he never wanted him to take revenge (see Fusion Ice Emperor for details). The withdrawal of the character of Dai Hao was carried out in the middle and late stages of Dou Er (I don't think it is a whitewash, this character has never been very dark). At least from the sentence "I am also a hot child with a father's back", you should have guessed what kind of medicine tjss sells. Dai Hao's image of caring for everyone and his mother's forgiveness directly dispelled the legitimacy of revenge. For a character whose lifelong goal was to do this, it even directly killed him. The character's life stopped when he changed his surname, and he was just Dai Yuhao from then on. However, although many people criticize the ending of Dou 2, I think for him, this ending is really a HE. Being able to marry the Stitch Monster and Huo Yun'er's resurrection is an unexpected joy. This is more important to him than anything else. After all, if he just changes his surname, he can resurrect his biological mother, which most people will do. What's more, in the future, Lao Huo will also be a talker in the circle of great gods, and his family will be happy. There is no need to be angry for him. Dai Yuhao is living a good life. What is not worth it is the readers who ate such a big mess when they were young. In fact, he is only one sequel to Douluo Dalu, which he has to train himself. For fans, the evaluation of the original character basically depends on the character's reputation. For example, nowadays they are all anti-Sanwen, and there are not many fans who are anti-t50, except for the bad salted fish, Dou Si is completely cool. Dou Er Lao Huo has a mixed reputation today. The glory of the sun and the moon is too great, the angle is too spiritual and noble, and the peerless light is not a favorite of Nianghua. As far as I am concerned, when watching Dou Er, I still hope that he will end up killing his father, which can be regarded as satisfying his childhood regrets. But this one is not the protagonist after all, so it makes sense. Finally, I'll post a few comics I've seen before, and wish the author a smooth launch in advance!

Briefly describe the advantages and disadvantages. The advantage of this book is its rigorous setting and smooth writing. The author is good at researching evidence, and each setting has a clear source, and can provide screenshots of the original work to prove it. Although the writing style is not that amazing, in an environment where the original writing style is average and the writing style of most fans is poor, this level is enough to crush most Douluo fans on the market. As for the shortcomings, one is the serious lack of psychological description of the protagonist. Without the support of psychological description, even if the narration explains the protagonist's purpose, it will still give people the feeling that the protagonist lacks purpose and is just following the crowd. In addition, the author's plan for the protagonist's soul skills is different from the current mainstream direction of fandom, which has led to a lot of doubts in the comment area, and the author has to explain his thoughts in lengthy articles over and over again. In fact, the author can completely use the inner drama of "the protagonist sorting out his own development path in his mind" to clearly explain the logic and supporting settings of the soul skill planning in the book. This will not only save the trouble of repeated explanations, but also establish the protagonist as a person with a long-term vision. Some people may think that psychological description is just a small number of words, but showing character motivations, portraying characters, explaining settings, and outputting creative ideas... Are all inseparable from psychological description. It is strongly recommended that the author appropriately increase this part of the content. The second is the naming of soul skills. This is not a big problem, because the soul skill names I have seen so far are not ugly, mediocre, or plain, but none of the soul skill names are very memorable. At least I didn't feel anything when I read them, and I didn't have any impression after reading them. I hope the author can put more thought into naming the soul skills. Catchy, easy-to-remember skill names can add a lot of immersion to the readers.

Destruction and Life privately call each other, Little Purple and Little Green, not Azi Alu, Destruction calls Tang San, Poseidon, not Shura, to inherit the Destruction God's position, there should be Destruction Nine Tests. In the novel, there are only divine seeds, Destruction Nine Tests, and the peerless period of the God Realm. Although the center of the God Realm is controlled by Tang San, no one is dominant.

The protagonist's martial spirit is a silver dragon. Will Gu Yuena be killed to make a spirit ring later?

I'm quite curious. I've read so many Douluo fanfics, either fighting one, two, or three. Why don't any of them write about fighting four? I really want to see the protagonist torture Lan Xuanyu's cs, but Tang San doesn't have such a cs😥

When I think about the fact that the author has redacted the original work over and over again for the sake of research,

When I think of the author having to read the original work over and over again in order to write a book, I want to laugh.

Why does the heroine have a sow named Ma Xiaotao?

Does the author think too highly of Shrek and Tang San? During the Dou Er period, Tang San would be seriously injured if he dared to take the ultimate move of destruction, and even Dou San could not beat him. The legend of the divine world is a complete joke. If time and space hadn't taken turns, and the two twin spirits you originally created, Shrek would have five twin spirits in total. And Destruction, is he a dragon? I don't understand. I see that his methods are all long-range. I thought he was a mage. Please explain to me. I

A wave of calculations killed everyone in Ditian 666, Star Fighting Beasts Gift Pack

Author, you turn on anti-theft. What am i looking at

Is there any mistake? I went in less than half of the time 😠😡😡

This is the first time I've seen such a serious fan author. I'm afraid the author has read Dou Er more than ten times.

Many settings of Douluo are self-contradictory, but the author has also rounded them up a lot. Although there are imperfections, I think the Douluo novel can be called a masterpiece 😊

Not updated yet😡😡

I still don't understand what the male protagonist Zhang Lexuan and Ma Xiaotao of Sun Moon Line are doing. Picture 160 is still pictures 95 is Tupolev.

This is really not my own creation.

The writing is really good, and it's very comfortable to read. I'll give it a monthly vote.

Can the author put it on QQ for reading?😭😭😭