Killing Evil 1

Brother, please write the main text of the introduction. Shouldn't a summary be an introduction?

Re-edit it and tidy it up, brother 👍

I listened to the newly updated chapters and it was quite smooth.

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Looking forward to a return visit First, you can try a more attractive or novel name Second, the first three chapters are very important

I'll give you an opinion. I'm not very good at writing dryly. You can try to integrate into the battle to make it more memorable.

Brother, you can't stop updating. If you stop, the book will be almost useless.

The language seems to be very immature, and the storyline feels almost like a fairy tale. If you want to write fire at the starting point, first find a benchmark book. What is the purpose of the bidding document? It is your material, your example, and your future. How can you make progress if you don't even look at these? Go to Douyin more and watch the editor's live broadcast, Qinghu, Xinghe, Mingyue, etc. Xinghe will say that signing you will harm you. Qinghu will ask you what your benchmark is and torture it. So, the bidding book is very important, please find the bidding book. Then, talk about the content. 1. If you are not a great person, please do not give a title of five words or less. 2. If you are not a great person, please do not write group portrait articles. 3. If you are not a great god, please do not write about aborigines. 4. If you are not a master, please join in time travel, system, and all elements that can bring you more traffic. I don't want to watch a team that has already assembled to eliminate evil. I want to watch a protagonist, such as your Xiao Lun. I want to watch a protagonist who has not yet grown up, or has grown into a complete body. This point can be seen in the junior high school protagonist who asks his classmates to slay demons. The writing is particularly good. Ah, then tell me what kind of Ji Xiaolun I want to see. Ji Xiaolun, who grew up in a mountain village, has always been kind to others. Suddenly one day, the village suffered a disaster or something changed. His former kindness to others has all turned into empty words. In the face of great disasters and great sorrows, can he still be kind to others? In times of crisis, he awakens to a certain golden finger, or he realizes that all evil must be eradicated. By eliminating evil, you can obtain resources, magic weapons, etc. This is the core plot of your story of eradicating evil. Then he will kill the bandits and demons who massacred his mountain village step by step, make friends step by step, organize an evil-eating team, and finally reveal what kind of ending it will be.

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(I have read about half of it, and I have to catch up on my homework. The rest can only wait for the National Day.) The author's plot is very tense, with ups and downs, and the narrative rhythm is also well controlled. Judging from the plot written by the author, it seems that he really loves writing novels. I suggest that the author polish his writing style at this stage and read more essay collections. Writing style determines the lower limit and upper limit of a book. (Appropriate addition of some environmental descriptions and characterizations of characters will help enrich the characters and make them more three-dimensional) In terms of plot, the author can read more in-depth online articles, such as The Secret Sword, to make the plot more colorful. Looking forward to the day when the author becomes popular.

Is the author about to take the high school entrance examination? Come on, the novel can be put aside for the time being. I wish you good results, a title on the gold list, and a championship in Toad Palace!

When I first wrote it, I updated your introduction. After reading the introduction, I didn't want to read it anymore.

The introduction and the first chapter are very unattractive. The introduction is very confusing. You can briefly explain the plot of the story and briefly write down some of the attractive points behind it without going into too much detail. The setting in the first chapter was written too dryly, and now readers have zero acceptance of the setting description, especially since the first chapter begins with a long explanation. The setting must be written in line with the development of the story, otherwise readers will be bored. Also, your story feels like you should consider children's literature or something. Every character in this book has a childlike feel. It reminds me of when I was a child when I read Charles IX. The starting point is actually not suitable for your book.