DC: Becoming the Nemesis from the Start

There is a problem with what I have written so far. You came to Earth to live a free life, but Waller plotted against you. Now you still listen to the arrangements of the Justice League, bring a monitor, and go to the Justice League to study and be an instructor. People who meet the Justice League immediately become good girls. They will only obey any arrangement and have no opinions of their own. You might as well be free as Deathstroke. Deathstroke kills people every day as a mercenary and has never been so timid against the Justice League.

The protagonist has separated from the Nemesis in just a few chapters. I feel that if he spends more time on Apokolips, he will be more influenced by the environment of Apokolips and make the protagonist more violent, which will make it more interesting. At present, I feel that the background of the protagonist's Nemesis is still too thin.

The Nemesis of Apokolips doesn't feel very impressive. In the final analysis, she is essentially an elite soldier. Everything else is Kryptonian, Scarlet Witch, etc. It feels a bit strange that the protagonist is an elite soldier.

Now this book has entered a very strange situation I don't know what I am reading, and I don't know what the author is writing It makes no sense. It is normal to be under surveillance from Apokolips, and Waller is indeed disgusting The modification is a bit aggrieved, but the impact is not It's very big, and then it's easy to quickly switch to the plot, events, and the main plot. It's easy to turn around and do something to deepen the relationship. It's easy to join the Zhenglian or go out independently. Beat Waller or kill him. But it's very weird after the change. It can be seen that it is plot-driven, and it is similar to the three giants. First interact, and then take the lead of Zhenglian to follow the plot After the change, it was like boiled water. It used to be fast, but now it is ridiculously slow, even aimless The novel is after all fast food literature, a simple and crude mental stimulation. You can either hurry up and get into the plot and follow the big events. Either write more delicately and emotionally Or write about artifacts, race, etc., Show it quickly and improve your strength Now Chunchun is a three-no novel. After leaving Apokolips, there is no plot, no setting, and no purpose What are you reading? Are you just going to hang out in the police station with dozens of photos? The Big Three were replaced by Zatanna, so it was natural for him to come into contact with magic, but then he turned around and disappeared. Shouldn't we dig deeper into our race, life experience, and the source of our abilities? There is an Apokolips hanging in space, so why not write in ambush? The original environmental conflicts between aliens and earthlings on the earth, the contradictions caused by the adaptation process, and the strangeness of the different world combined with the travelers, are all gone after the modification I am very curious, what are you writing about? Gives me the feeling of finding only hot water in convenience stores and milk tea shops in the summer

Being as plain as water is not fun enough. The most important thing about online writing is that it is fun. It still feels like there is no main line.

I don't see any main plot. It's a bit tasteless. Do you think I can read it? Yes, I can read it. But after reading a few chapters, it's a bit boring. And it's already forty or fifty chapters. When will the protagonist be strengthened? The story of American comics: Whoever's home is the boss. The dark tricks of the Lucifer family, the God of Manhattan. They all have to make way for the "protagonist".

Let me politely ask As the Nemesis of Apokolips, has the protagonist ever learned how to please a man? Never been played by Darkseid?

It's well written, but the main character is too weak.

I finally got into the plot. "Goldfinger" has also come out. It feels like a disciple. But it is too complicated to become a disciple. Just make it more powerful. If you are confident, just follow the protagonist's own main line. If you are not confident, just forget about the plot. Don't overwhelm it. The number of words is not too small at the moment. Let's release it as soon as possible to make it more exciting. Otherwise, it will be difficult to grow the data.

In the previous chapters, we were able to kill drug dealers and so on. In this latest chapter, we started to play hide-and-seek. Why can't the paparazzi beat him and cripple him? Is he someone to the protagonist?