Simultaneous Transmigration: None of Them Are Human!

There is also a bit of literary talent, and the setting is not written in the front. I was confused after reading the first three chapters. The origin of the protagonist is revealed in the fourth chapter, and others are the three golden chapters. I'm afraid these are not the three chapters to screen readers.

I have only written more than thirty chapters, which is not too much. I suggest you rewrite it and don't bother Wen Qingbing.

The author can throw away the setting, but you have to explain it clearly. Don't let the Riddler ramble on. Just use any thread. You actually mixed the setting story into the plot. This writing technique is really beyond the reach of ordinary people.

Written expression has great potential for growth

It's so abstract. It's a new work written by a young person. Readers, you are the challengers, come on, challenge this work.

The writing is too stream-of-consciousness. As a web article, you should introduce the characters and world view as quickly as possible, and by the way, clarify the protagonist's goal and describe the conflict.

You should write more directly. The first chapter gave me goosebumps.

It's weird that I can't read the author's brain waves. It feels a bit wordy. Why not be more simple and straightforward?

The author's world view in the first few chapters does not seem to be particularly clear and difficult to accept quickly.

Personally, I suggest you start reading directly from Chapter 4 and skip the previous Prologue and Chapter 123.