Mortal: Take Han Li as Your Disciple at the Beginning

Nine out of ten books about mortals are about old slaves. I really can't understand why people like to read this kind of thing nowadays 😅😅

This book is also given to Nangong Wan. It seems to be a work of Lao Nu Liu 🙂 Author, without Nangong Wan, you would have no readers of Harem Liu. You can only write about the dog-licking genre, so that only a small number of readers will read it.

Can the author please stop messing with Han Li? Zi Ling Yuanyao is also Han Li's wife. If you accept this, aren't you cuckolding Han Li? We read this book just to see the interaction between the protagonist and Han Li's master and apprentice. We really can't stand it like this. It's not like there are no female nuns for the protagonist. Just choose one of the types like Hong Fu and Zhou Nichang. There is really no need to use Han Li.

This comment section is so fucking picky. The harem is about choosing the one you like, not a woman or someone with a bit of fame. It's ok. This is a stallion.

Deliberately not taking Zhuyan Dan, you look middle-aged? I don't like reading novels like this. Even though Zhu Yan Dan was on my lips, I felt like I had a grudge against my handsome face, so I just stopped eating it, and ended up looking like a middle-aged person.

I've finished reading the current one, and the nanny story is good enough. If you change some things randomly and find it hard to read the anime, you might like it, but I can't make a final decision on the other things. I've also written two chapter reviews. My current feeling is that it's neither good nor bad. People who like nanny old slaves might like it, so I'll give it a thumbs-up. I'm a harem-type reader, and it doesn't sit well with me, so it's just that the eunuch-style readers won't like it.

I'm glad that the popularity of anime has made fan fiction more popular, but my IQ hardly allows me not to run away after reading the first four chapters. I can only say that I hope this wave of heat will settle down again. After reading fan fiction for many years, I can probably summarize some rules, taking Douluo as an example. The first stage: group flow, which is what many people call Lao Nu flow, which is basically a fine-tuned version of the original work. Either he takes advantage of the protagonist's opportunity and replaces the protagonist, or he imitates the protagonist and makes up his own cheat, or he becomes an old slave and becomes a cheat himself. The second stage: defamation. But Douluo is a bit special, and I don't know if this is a stage that should exist, but in those few years there was indeed a wave of anti-protagonists of considerable scope. From Dou 1 to Dou 2, Dou 3, and even the next door fight... It has a certain impact on all current fans, and it can be regarded as a review of morality. The third stage: innovation, adding humanistic care and other depth to the original work. It can be regarded as a replica of the first stage, but it will be more profound than the first stage and not as extreme as the second stage. Having separated from the original work, the author at this stage can be said to be on the borderline of originality. It can be said that he is writing his own book with the help of the framework of the original work. It is not entirely a secondary creation, but he has already had his own thinking. The characteristic is "letting go" of the protagonist of the original work, but not being too obsessed with what the original work is, because this type of work has already turned the specific original work into a simple framework. To put it bluntly - just with the help of a mature shell. This book can be regarded as the most basic nanny flow in the first stage. The logic in the first four chapters is too weak, and it is simply an anti-brain plot. Maybe the back part is good, but for readers like me, I won't see the back part at all.

It seems that it may be the nanny old slave style. I hope it is not written as an old slave. A nanny is fine.

Read a few chapters. I'm curious if the author wouldn't blush? Foundation Establishment Ancestor, you made me laugh so hard. You, the protagonist, have a face that looks like a fish.

The harem is either closed or fully open, otherwise not many readers will read it.

The main character just hangs up and follows the plot. In the final analysis, the author has no own ideas about the world view of mortals and just makes up the original plot. Why do you need to be a fan?

Qi Yunxiao can be accepted as his disciple Invincible 👍🏻 I went to read the paid chapters later and ran away first

Alas, I really don't understand if some people are idiots, since you think you don't like reading this fan series. Then you call me Dan. They say it's a fan series, and of course the original protagonist's role is required. I really don't understand that some people write fanfics and they don't want the original protagonist to appear in the plot, so what's the point of writing this fanfic series? There are really some old fools, don't read the novels, just because they gave Han Li a chance and say he is an old slave, then can't you just read other fanfic series? Dogs bark here all the time

Since Qi Yunxiao is awesome, a person who is not even a supporting role can only be regarded as a passerby at most, and is not worthy of carrying Yan Ruyan's shoes.

Some of the subscription chapters directly copy the dialogues in the anime, and the writing is indeed average If you are not a mortal fan, you will give up when you see it on the shelves. The only cool thing about this article is that you can improve your realm quickly and use the advantage of foresight to obtain resources There are too few mortal novels. This is the first time I've seen a mortal accepting a disciple. It's a bit new, but the writing style needs to be strengthened. Some places are a bit awkward to read. You really can't write too much about the apprentice setting. Just write mainly around the protagonist's disciples. If you write too much, you can't contain it, and it's easy to collapse. Those who can write are all great masters, so do what you can.

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I didn't read it yet, so I flipped through the table of contents. When I saw Chapter 70 of Conceiving a Baby, I???

Take her as your concubine! She is very popular in anime

Most of them are stallions. The protagonist transforms into a stallion machine. In the last chapter, the female character had no feelings for the protagonist. After a few chapters, she went straight to bed. It's really outrageous. It feels like the protagonist does not use his brain to cultivate immortality, but uses his second brother to cultivate immortality. Also, he can't cultivate immortality without the little green bottle. The Lian Lian Ying can't survive the inner demon tribulation, and his style is incompatible with the world view of mortals. People are very cautious, but what about the fan protagonist? The Peerless Spiritual Root was tested in public, and the Genius Earth Treasure Mask was not sold for fear that others would not be able to recognize it. No one treated Han Li well. They were all diodes, and they were either killed or licked. What I want to see is what kind of chemical reaction you can have with the protagonist and what kind of sexy tricks you can do. I am not here to see you writing about diodes, but still, how can a good author write fan fiction? So I dare to say that there is no fairy grass for mortal fanfics now. I just have to wait and see. When the IP of mortal anime develops again, see if there are good authors to write fanfics. Anyway, none of them can stand it now.

This is the trend of recruiting disciples. Why is there no big guy writing a book about prostitutes? For example: "Mortal: Three Thousand Royal Women, Ranked in the Immortal Class". Open a harem like crazy and gain cultivation. It's similar to this way of writing about recruiting disciples. Get them all, including Mo Caihuan, Nangong Wan, and Yuan Yao!

There are more and more, I don't know when I will finish them

Well, just like that, the more you look at the back, the less interesting it becomes. Apart from Han Li, all the women were accepted as disciples. Qi Yunxiao was still a registered disciple and then disappeared directly after returning to Tiannan. The main character scenes became more like a harem group, which is the same as watching the high-profile version of the original work.

I like this book very much! It suits my taste very well. The protagonist did not blindly open a harem for Ji Bo, but also helped Han Li improve his cultivation. It was really cool!

I have read so many Mortal fanfics, and this one suits my taste the best. I have six monthly votes left to vote for you. Keep it up, and I will vote for you next month as well 😆😆😆

Are you mistaken? This beginning of the spiritual world is too poisonous.

The protagonist first goes to the spiritual world to open a map, and then comes down to pick up his apprentice?

I felt like it was no longer interesting after becoming a god, and it had the same problem as the original. The protagonist's realm rises too quickly, and it feels like he has soared directly before the 100th chapter.

Come on author, thank you

I asked the author if he could write a million words

There is also a Mahayana monk who is hiding from a thunderstorm. If he is not rescued, Qing Yuanzi, the human race will be a little stronger.