Become a God from a Mortal Killer

I don't see any problems, which is really good. But if you don't sign a contract, you still have to think about what the problem is. If you don't sign a contract, it's useless. Maybe the plot is too cliche.

Sir, I have roughly read three chapters, and I highly recommend revising it (my personal suggestion is that if someone complains, it is you) Problem 1: There are many words to describe the environment in the opening chapter, so it is best to go over it in one sentence, because dialogue is one of the fastest ways to empathize with words and point out conflicts [Using the first chapter as an example, it evokes The reader is curious about why the protagonist killed this person, whether it was a mission or a personal relationship] Question 2: The protagonist's image is portrayed in the opening chapter, whether it is front or side, there is less space, but there are more passers-by [Take the protagonist and Hua Yuqing's conversation as an example. The protagonist's image is indifferent. Generally speaking, a few words should be chatted before acquaintances are made. It's good, but between strangers, and because he is a young killer (recommended by fans of Silent Killer to imitate), would it be more appropriate to be vigilant rather than polite? Nod a little, depending on your age. If Hua Yuqing is a positive character, he is generous. If he is a negative character, the protagonist will do nothing.] Question 3: Keep updating daily (hehehehe) Question 4 (If you feel like you are talking too much, I will delete the post immediately) It is not recommended to spend a chapter on the protagonist's life experience, but let the readers dissect it bit by bit, just like dissecting a corpse to get the hang of it. Remarks: I am a little obsessed with the characters at the moment, and I am curious about what the master wants for the protagonist. Indifference seems not enough. The beginning of the third chapter contains a bit too much, so I recommend deleting it. If I can recommend it, I hope it will be a different villain. Whether the whole family goes crazy because of death, or whether it is killing and numbing, it is particularly important for the main character to be vivid and make people sympathize (CP: I must have written a female channel, thinking that if the master has a female protagonist in the future, she can have multiple personalities. I just watched a series about cultivating immortals, and I hope the female protagonist is non-human, such as a seahorse) Last and most important, I wish the master who sees this a lot of literary thoughts and all the best!

The heroine's article is really cool. It has been collected. I hope you can learn from each other's works. Thank you 🙂

The beginning is okay, meet the boss, support 😁

👍Look at mine.

How can I put it this way? The writing is not bad. I hope you can stick with it.

Added a bookshelf 👍

I'm following up on it, it's pretty good, I hope someone will come up with it

Meet the boss!