Dream World: the Hazy Beginning

"After death, the soul enters the dream world and is divided into two halves according to the good and evil during life. After a thousand-year journey, the good half turns into fragments and returns to reality—— "And the other half of the soul, full of resentment and ready to move, is colluding with each other, trying to invade the human world through the gap between reality and dream world. " I am a novice writer, please give me some advice!