Heavens: Simmel, the Return Journey from Earth

Bush, buddy, author, have you read the original comics? Simmel can cut down an entire forest with a single sword, and slaying a dragon is not too difficult. Simmel is a strong warrior, at least much stronger than Shutark in the anime. The anime does not describe it in detail, but since you are writing a second creation, you need to read the original work carefully, what do you think?

How can I put it, when writing the original work about Simmel, one must respect the original settings and fill in his own plot based on the original settings. This way it looks very comfortable. The author is a little confused by the chaos of various combat powers. Simmel's strength is also the top of the top. When he was a few years old, he could kill a monster as big as a house with a sword without any damage. According to the combat power of the land, he was LV3 or LV4, let alone later. This combat power is almost the same as when Simmel was a child.

How did Simmel use a model of the Sword of the Brave to defeat the Demon King? After all the battles, this model sword was still intact until the end, sleeping with Simmel. People in their own world complained that the real sword of the brave was fake.

If you can't even grasp the character traits of the characters in the original work when writing a fanfic, why are you writing a piece of shit? This is the passing line for writing fan fiction! Everything that cannot be reached is stone

Are you sure you wrote about the hero "Simmel" and not the hero of the south?

The new girl has weird numbers, why is she so weak?

Ah, why does it start at LV1? I'm still waiting to shock them with LV45 at the beginning. Upgrading Dicuo's favor requires great deeds. Simmel is a brave man who defeated the devil and saved the world. No matter how little this great deed is, he must have at least LV45.

It feels very strange Simmel should have at least a physical value of lv5 at the beginning Although everyone starts at lv1 in the favor system But can lv5 really increase the four attributes of lv1 by 200 each by playing on floors 1-12 for an afternoon, which is equivalent to dozens of points at lv5? The favor system is not Suqing's kind of accumulated experience It is a system that can be improved after being exercised, tempered, challenged and survived It is equivalent to a summary of the possibility of personal improvement And a strong man of Simmel's level Only the twelfth floor It is hard to say whether he can sweat But you told me that such a small amount of exercise adds 800 attributes It's weird, it doesn't look like it's turned on, it just doesn't matter

There is no heroic demeanor to clear the Demon King's Castle.

Chapter 16: The Awakening of Magic has gone on for more than 50 chapters without mentioning the effects. Your awakening is a piece of cake. What he wrote is not like Kimmel at all.

Is your setting wrong? I remember that the Loki Familia are basically built and maintained by Gubenyu. It has nothing to do with Hephaestus.

It's a very cookie-cutter upgrade story, with little combat power and a slightly mismatched character design. The rest is just like other stories about time-traveling and wrong upgrades. It has no special features (or I have read too many). The only thing that attracted me was the writing of Simmel. Take a look at other Shennong views.

The combat power is suppressed too hard, and there are no other bad points exposed so far, but combat power is suppressed only if the story technique is not good enough. It's a good idea, I'm looking forward to it, but I'm not too optimistic about the follow-up.

The author is a bit different, not quite like Simmel. I always feel like he is a different person with the same name.

Take a look at the skill description of this sword in the original article: "When you want to protect someone... You can block an attack" "When a teammate is injured, you touch him with the sword to relieve the pain, but don't expect to heal the injury" "Temporarily transfer part of the attributes of the person holding the sword to another person" To summarize these three skills, are they to help teammates block the knife, relieve the pain of teammates, and temporarily transfer attributes to teammates? A sword with growth and indestructible attributes is all used to assist teammates 😅. Simmel is a warrior and you want to turn him into a support?

When I saw that the magic that Simmel awakened was the flower field magic, I was speechless. 😂 I felt that this magic was useless, but after thinking about it, I felt that it was quite consistent with the character of Simmel in the original work. As for the magic effects, I suggest you don't just create a field of flowers, at least have some special effects. The following are my ideas, which can be given to the author for reference: 1: Warm people's hearts, feel happy, comfort, eliminate fear, encourage, in general it is debuff + Inspiring skills 2: Legion-level large-scale continuous treatment, continuous treatment in a sea of flowers I don't know what the author's original flower field magic will be, but if it really just generates a sea of flowers, it will be quite speechless, and it feels like a waste of magic books

I was really drunk. Faced with an ordinary Warcraft boar, Simmel was even pushed back a step! It took some effort to knock it down! ! What the hell are you, Simmel? ! ! Not to mention anything else, Shutart killed a dragon in 30 seconds. Simmel's strength should be higher than him. Even if you write about it, you will feel that your strength has become much weaker after you wake up. It's okay. I don't mind your word count, but you ended up writing it in a mess! ! ! ! !

I've read a few erroneous novels recently, all of which involve members of the Loki Familia. Instead, the Hestia Familia who were the protagonists in the original novels have become supporting characters. It's not that I have any objections. The main reason is that with the subsequent development of the Dicuo light novel, the prequel stories of various supporting characters have been supplemented and improved, which has led to loopholes in the characters' behavior in the fan novels, and they have been stabbed in the back by the original work. And to be honest, there is no difference in favor. No matter whether it is a large family or a small family, the effect of the favor is the same. In this case, it is better to join the Hestia Familia. First, it is easy to join and you can become the leader of the Familia. Second, there are few members in the Familia and you will not be stabbed in the back. Third, there are few characters and it is easier for the author to write. The more characters there are, the harder it is to control the plot. For example, there are more than ten main characters in the Loki Familia. The author must consider the arrangement of these characters when writing the plot. When the protagonist has a large-scale action, the whole family must not join together. How to write it? So I really can't figure out why those authors like to write about joining the Loki Familia. Is it for the sake of plot conflict? Design highlight? If so, wouldn't it be more convenient to join the Hestia Familia?

Fulilian, do it My Phantom will never be OOC

The character's personality is wrong, and the battle system of traveling through the wrong land is of no use to Simmel. If someone else kills him with a sword, a large forest will be gone! The combat system in it is really thoughtful. If you have seen the anime, just catch that bird. The speed of that bird is the speed of sound! The fighting spirit and magic inside are as strong as ghosts! The ground bugs in it need to be upgraded, but not in Fulian! The little golden retriever Lolita can be decapitated even if she has accumulated the largest magic value in history. The lv9 empress in your land is nothing here!

Xinmeier is the single promoter of King Lotus who has an unrequited love for King Lotus 🥵. After discovering that he could time travel, shouldn't he try to find a way to gain immortality and then travel back to pursue King Lotus? 😳

When has this plot not been written wrong? You write something else, author. It's so boring to watch this. One person is the Hokage Dragon Clan. I'm tired of looking at it. It's better if you find an old mistake now, but you don't have the motivation to update it.

It should be a single female protagonist, right? If you don't reply, it will be a trap by default.