Douluo: Did You Move the Sanctuary Here?

The thinking of a brat, in short, has never been beaten by society.

If you don't change the last three pictures, this book will be invalidated. Quick death and slow death are completely different concepts and natures. Besides, how can Guiju be loyal in this situation? The faces of all the worshipers including Wuhun Hall are being slapped crazily by Qiandaoliu. Qiandaoliu can still be killed and the Temple of Enshrinement will definitely not be able to suppress it. Bibi Dong must be abolished and imprisoned if she doesn't do it for others and for herself. Besides, she has not been sealed yet and her position is unstable. Hey, change it, this book is very good, don't scrap it...

Is Demon Bear Douluo a country bumpkin who came to the city from the countryside after becoming a Douluo? He didn't even recognize the geniuses who registered at the Enshrinement Hall? Does he have no family of his own or does his family have no intelligence network?

1. The setting of this book is very good, that is, the armor of the Golden Saint can be worn by others, to be honest. It just has the rhythm of a harem, but that doesn't matter, because the setting is good and fun, and the personalities of the original characters in Douluo are also written out. 2. But there are many poisonous points. If you tell the truth in Wuhun Palace, the conflict between the juniors can understand that young people are not convinced and want to fight for the first place, which is fine. But why did you write the Bear Demon Douluo like this and send people to assassinate him? I have read many good Douluo fan stories, and I have never seen anyone with a brain in the Spirit Hall who wants to kill his own titled Douluo. Have you forgotten who is in charge of the Wuhun Palace? Angel inheritance, who dares to raise his head under the pressure? If Bibi Dong hadn't been indebted to him by Qian Daoliu, do you think it would have been possible for him? Not because he is Qian Renxue's mother, do you think he can be the pope? The entire Wuhun Palace is centered around the Qian Family. The protagonist is so valued and yet there are still people who dare to kill him. You are too vicious. 3. There were too many original characters added in the early stage, and there were too many scenes. When you write fan fiction, you add so many original characters and give so many scenes. I come here to read the fan fiction. Well, if there are new characters, I have to react. Why do I look at your fan fiction? 4. There is no distinction between the priority of writing and the reason for the fanfic. Your focus should be on the characters in the original work or the characters that readers like more. In addition, there are too many irrelevant chapters. Some things can be transitioned. You write about them selecting soul masters. To be honest, there are no particularly famous characters in the original work. It's really annoying for the audience to watch. Even if you don't have a good word count, you're not in this area. 5. And he likes to force his wits down. Is there a disciple of the Qibao Glazed Sect in the Spirit Master Academy, or is it Ning Fengzhi's illegitimate daughter? You wrote that the reason is that his mother has no soul power and his daughter has awakened. Because of this, Ning Fengzhi refused to pick them up and directly took his daughter back instead of his mother, thus turning against him? You are really underestimating Ning Fengzhi of the Shangsan Sect. He can become the Shangsanzong's Ning Fengzhi as an assistant in the original work. Does he still need to care about his original wife? Isn't it normal for Ning Fengzhi to have three wives and four concubines? Isn't this kind of thing easy to solve for such a wise and demonic person? It must be written as a brainless, short-sighted person. 6. On the one hand, you make yourself very cautious, but on the other hand, you are brainless. Saying that Hu Lina is a love-minded wolf is something that will happen in the future. Since you want to save Wuhun Palace, shouldn't you guide her? You don't look impatient yet, you just reborn the protagonist, and you treat him like a child? Even if you really don't want to guide him, why do you write that Hu Lina is like a licking dog? The secret method of the small universe that I have delved into is given to the supporting role. To be honest, I really let him use his abilities without using the Golden Saint Cloth. What do you think? On the one hand, he is scheming, but on the other hand, he looks like an idiot anyway. 7. Although the writing before charging is a bit toxic, it is still acceptable. After charging, you are purely to reduce the word count, and there is no logic. You spend a lot of pen and ink on supporting characters and irrelevant plots. What are you going to describe? There are so many highlight moments in the whole novel. If you don't know how to write the plot of the original work, you have to create it yourself. If you can't write the novel, you will definitely write it down in one stroke. If you can't write down the key plots in the back, just mention it in one stroke 8. Fan fiction is about the plot of the original work, the characters of the original work, and the protagonist's participation and change. Because the highlight moment of the change when the protagonist comes, you write the plot yourself, and it is a nutritious plot without highlight moments.

No... Is this Qiandaoliu human? Be a fake! Bibi Dong killed your son! They didn't kill her, and they didn't punish her at all. They even promoted her to be the pope! !

The people who attacked the Wuhun Palace in Wuhun City are so powerful. What kind of genius writing is this?

The poison has been tested and the wallflower fell here and there throughout the whole process.

I feel like the concept is pretty good and the characters' reactions are appropriate. It's just that it's a bit frustrating to read, and it doesn't have the courage and determination of a saint to fight against all injustice. Although everyone in the Douluo world is shameless and likes to bully the small, it is very difficult for the protagonist to survive carefully. It can only be said that either the protagonist doesn't work hard, or the hang-up is not big enough. The seventh sense has been awakened. If a Galaxy star explodes and the Douluo star explodes, it may not be able to explode a martial soul city?

After awakening the martial spirit, shouldn't the stone statue appear? It should have appeared like an angel martial spirit. This is so cool, but there is also a problem with this setting in one link? There are eighty-eight Saints under Athena, twelve of them are gold, not to mention silver and bronze?

Funny! Plus Poseidon! !

Original characters are the biggest poisonous point among fandoms

It's hard to imagine what kind of mental state this person is in.

What are you writing about now? You can already practice cultivation, but you still crave motivation? I really don't understand…

The setting and plot of this book are still okay, but the sacred attribute has the effect of killing evil and can feed back soul power. Why not use this setting?

The idea at the beginning is pretty good, but the plot is just like playing house.

It is indeed very poisonous. If you really don't have any books to read, you can jump and read it.

As soon as I saw it was Saint Seiya, I knew I couldn't watch it. It started high and low, and it was infinitely deflated and couldn't stop. It was cool. If you can't grasp it, don't write.

There are still a lot of poison points. To be honest, Wuhundian treats the protagonist like this. He continues to lick Wuhundian.

I recommend a Douluo fanfic called "Douluo: The Martial Spirit's True Body, I Am the Master". The main character's true Martial Spirit is from the same era as Qian Renxue.

I kind of hate that my soul skills and holy armor can be used by others, or even understood.

No, Chapter 27, you charge?