Being a Problem Child in Hakoba, I Just Want to Lie Down

First of all, the plot deviation is a bit big. There is no black rabbit on the test paper. That thing is very precious and was given by Shiroyasha. Secondly, the protagonist made a very annoying mistake, that is, he talked about salted fish, but in fact he did not understand the meaning of lying down. He only knew how to sleep, thinking that this meant lying down, but in fact he did more things than anyone else.

I've only read the first few chapters, and the plot is actually quite interesting. But the portrayal of the protagonist is still a bit unnatural. There are a lot of inner dramas in the first chapter. This cannot be said to be bad. If used properly, it can be used to supplement some settings. But it is best to make a clear distinction between what the character says, otherwise it will be easy to confuse what the character says with his inner jokes. . There is also a good reason for the protagonist's bad behavior, such as being sleepy all the time because of recharged abilities, or having a lazy personality. Finally, the bad-ass protagonist is suitable for being accidentally mentioned, noticed by accident, and squatting in the corner to fish in a corner without being noticed. And if you put him under the spotlight and click on him from time to time to show off, it will look very label-like and deliberate. You only need to say what he is doing. For example, everyone is so busy that they accidentally see the protagonist lying under the shade of a tree, basking in the sun with a peaceful face.

How should I put it, it's very awkward If you really want to lie down, shouldn't you leave Wuming? This feels a bit like an archway

You have to be tough for once, at least highlight your personality, and don't just go to work when called upon. Occasionally it's okay, but it's too destructive to just go to work when called from the beginning to the end. I hope it can be improved.

I've read it several times and clicked in to read the first five chapters. It feels like the protagonist's character is based on Zhang Chulan? And the main character is a bit too loud, so just lie down and watch the show quietly. Then play a role at important times to change the plot. I saw the protagonist being carried away by Izayoi at the beginning, and then the protagonist yelled. He's a bit of a clown, and already shows a strong ability. If you have to explain it forcefully, just let it take its course and say that it is indeed quite powerful. And according to the author, the protagonist should have a certain tsundere attribute and hope to get others' attention. But you don't have to write to the screaming clown.

There are too many adjectives, and I keep emphasizing that I want to lie down, which affects the perception.

Let's lay some armor first (I haven't read all the information on the Little Garden, so I don't understand many things very well.) First of all, Leticia was lost to (nameless) by Shiroyasha in a gift game. It doesn't matter whether Shiroyasha has the right to hold Leticia, but since he can lose to Wuming as a bet, then it is a legitimate way to win. (I vaguely remember that Shiroyasha in the original novel couldn't help Wuming for some reason. She is Wuming's friend?) Then the protagonist won Leticia, and Perseus came to rob this place. Returning Izayoi's strength, the speed of the third universe (it seems to be) and then crushing the gift of the gift, simulating the star creation map, etc... Even with her initial strength, it would be impossible for Leticia to be trapped in a chain by that kind of bastard. The eldest lady in the back has the ability to control the water tree species. (I seem to remember that it was a gift given by Bai Yaksha to the White Snake God (the gift of the water snake at the beginning)) Didn't the protagonist Fang want it? There's no explanation at all. It only takes up so much time, and I feel that those who have never read Problem Children will not be able to understand this novel. The pace is too fast, and many things have no real sense.

The most important point is that anyone who has watched the anime will know that no name's initial residence was not that dilapidated. At least the environment where the children lived was very good. It was a serious foreign hotel... And no name also has such a big library. Don't forget

I remember when I was just writing a novel, we just discussed it. Let's take Chapter 1 as an example. First of all, the title of the novel is Lying flat + Hakoba, right? Then the readers who come in must come in because of these two points. The small garden is a large background, so it is necessary to maximize the display at the first time. If I were to write Lying Down, the protagonist's performance in the first chapter might be as follows: standing at an altitude of 10,000 meters, looking at the three troubled children around him, the protagonist realizes that this is a small garden... Forget it, a small garden will be a small garden. I found a comfortable position in the air. Then after everyone used their magical powers, they found the protagonist like this and thought there was some back-up plan. However, they found that the boy fell into the water while still lying down. Black Rabbit was stunned for a while before he thought of saving people. No matter what anyone says from now on, the main message is "It doesn't matter, you have the final say." It makes people lose their temper at all. This plot is not necessarily exciting, but the purpose is to strengthen the concept of "lying flat" at the first glance. Later chapters can expand into various genres that are tied to lying flat, such as "In order to lie flat, I wiped out the whole place", "In order to lie flat, I filled up my health" and so on. Looking back at your first chapter, the protagonist in the first chapter behaves as a completely normal person, and it is probably an early otaku-style protagonist, focusing on a person with no personality. The non-stop thoughts in the second chapter continued the feeling of the otaku protagonist in the first chapter (the previous chapter was all kinds of frightened and dared not speak), etc., And immediately turned into telling all the secrets. Then he forced Izayoi to praise the protagonist and define a flat character. The protagonist's previous performance is not flat, and then letting a character with high IQ, high combat power and charm define the protagonist is flat, which creates a sense of division.

There aren't many fans of Hakoba, so I'd better support it. God knows when I watched Hakoba, the protagonist wasn't the kind of squealing idiot who felt redeemed.

This book feels so weird, what kind of new genre is this? Some people really like it 🐴

The plot of Summoning the Dragon was well written before. However, when fighting the enemy, the cheating permission was not enough and was blocked. As a result, the protagonist group was temporarily killed and disappeared. Although I know it is not an invincible story, I felt an awkward feeling when I read it. This is a feeling of being blocked due to lack of permissions and the like, which is clearly powerful, rather than the awkward feeling of powerlessness when the strength is not as good as the enemy. It feels like the protagonist group was deliberately defeated and then the protagonist's cheating was improved and reasonable. I don't know if there will be another plot like this in the future. The writing is a bit nondescript.

Defeated by gunfire! Pocket watch, then gunfire rout!

When did Leticia have dragon blood? Isn't she a vampire? And later on, the protagonist is given the dragon's bloodline, and becoming the owner of the dragon's bloodline has the meaning of forcibly binding the relationship between the two of them. Is it useful to add the dragon's bloodline to the protagonist? The protagonist in the previous article was a good person. But here comes a story where the protagonist actually has the blood of a dragon. I have read many novels. Each time the protagonist is of human blood, and then becomes the blood of a dragon. In other novels, the protagonist is not strong, and the setting of dragon blood can be added. In this novel, the protagonist's plug-in is already strong enough, so there is no need to add more dragon blood, right? Moreover, dragon nature is inherently obscene. I have read eight out of ten novels in which the protagonist has dragon blood. They are all novels about harems with no brains and stallions.

The more I look at the back, I always feel that there is a conflict in the logic behind it.

The second battle at the beginning felt like a second-best self-pleasure.

Can Izayoi Izayoi be set as a girl? Isn't the original work a girl anyway?😁

I'm here to study. The recent trial push is about to end, so can this novel be read by more people? I still need your help. Although I know that there are many problems with novels at the moment (please allow me to use novice authors as a shield) The problem with the protagonist of the novel (most of the comments are about the concept of lying down, I can only say that the protagonist is a wolf in sheep's clothing, it is impossible to really lie down.), I don't want to mention it anymore, you can also see it from the comment area (but there is only one request. Normal complaints, criticism and suggestions are fine, but The language should not be too harsh, or some people directly scolded or cursed before the personal attack. If it was very dirty, I would delete it or make it transparent. It is better for everyone on the Internet to be more civilized and clean. ) Regarding the plot, I cannot meet the needs of most people. If the details can be changed, I will try to change them to reduce the poisonous points, but the plot deviation is large. I think most fans will have this problem, and it can be divided into fan creations and secondary creations, so it varies from person to person. Old rule, beautiful pictures can make people relax.

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I would like to ask if the Lu Fan who is lazy and lazy is portrayed by the author as a character who doesn't care about the danger to his companions, right?

Didn't you tell me it was over?

I was still thinking about whether I would throw Lu Fan into another world for fun again.

Wow, it's actually finished. I wanted to say that I've been raising it for a while, but it's gone today.

Let me ask you, have you ever seen Problem Children, does it affect reading?

What's the name of the new book that the author has opened?