The Condor: Apprentice to Li Mochou at the Beginning

For the sake of the so-called eroticism that attracts readers, giving the protagonist a wit is the most obvious stagflation. You can see others and think that the other side can't see you. Even a fool would not think so. There is no cover, and it is still attracting attention from a high place. After changing the position for so long and watching it for two months, can't you write it so that the two parties understand each other tacitly. What's more, you know from your own perspective that there is a risk of skinning and weeding, but you still watch it every day, why? You risk your life just for the sake of being pornographic. You know in the plot that there is no danger to your life? But does the protagonist know? If he knows, why doesn't he? He doesn't want to think about it. It's just because he thinks the other party can't see him. What's more, we all know the story of the original work, and we almost got killed if we didn't take precautions against Zhao Zhijing's two Quanzhen sect guys in advance. Haha, I'm speechless. If you just write about him practicing swordsmanship on that slope and collecting some benefits to appear to be doing something serious, I assume you've tried your best. Where is the initiative of the protagonist? Author, what are you doing?

Wrong writing. What about running away to Shaolin and being valued by Shaolin as a lay disciple, and then having internal conflicts that limit your strength? What's more cliche, being knocked off a cliff and being rescued by a beautiful woman... It's not attractive even before it's on the shelves.

Run quickly, the protagonist washes the feet of two old women every day

If I don't unlock my inner strength, I'm going to run away. If you can't show off, why are you watching? It's too cruel.

These chapters are really boring. The way of promoting the plot is too old-fashioned and has been used by everyone before. Li Mochou made a start, and then disappeared again. The subsequent plot is nothing more than meeting - then separating - and meeting again.

The writing is quite good. It looks like the heroine should be Li Mochou. The author must not criticize Yang Guo and Xiao Longnu. I am their CP fan. Many Shendiao fans criticize them, which makes me unable to stand it. I hope the author will not write like this

The most annoying thing is raising a family, which is why many protagonists in novels have lost their parents. A messy family is not only useless, but also drags down the protagonist. Why write it? ? ? ?

I want to see Li Mochou. Where is Li Mochou? How long has it been since you last appeared?

Poison, the main character who is both important and established. He took the initiative to test his own heart by taking the poison of love flowers, thinking about Xiao Longnu and thinking about Li Mochou and wanted to try Gongsun Lu'e. Your early foreshadowing of the heroine was completely disappointing. Opening a stallion bar is really annoying. It sounds normal in the early stage, but then it starts when you meet a woman.

The first twenty or so chapters are pretty good, but they get worse and worse later on, especially the chapters closer to release.

There is a book called Rebirth of Zhao Zhijing. I don't know if the author has read it. Please relax, you always feel like you are almost something.

You don't have to accept the others, you must have these two! 😍

Have you seen The Condor Shooting? Just scribbling here, taking it for granted.

I think we will eventually follow the same meal replacement path of Yang Buhui and Yin Liting.

I only looked at the catalog and blindly guessed the master and the disciple.

Will you sleep with Mochou for your cheap daddy?

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After reading the introduction, is it Lu Buhui?

No, you are more like this when it comes to shelves?

How did you deal with the Nine Yang Divine Art? Just leave it and let Jue Yuan practice it, and then it was stolen?