Elf Girl Heaven

There is a problem with the pacing of this book. The protagonist himself is an elf with slow development. This is a very reasonable way to suppress the combat power that makes people unable to make mistakes. The problem is that the plot rhythm of your book is very problematic. Suppressing combat power is not a problem. The problem is to coordinate the plot rhythm to reasonably arrange the development of the protagonist's combat power. Generally speaking, if a good-looking novel has a depressing plot, the plot should be arranged in such a way that it suppresses first and then expands, and the length and rhythm between depression and expansion should be reasonably arranged and should not exceed the reader's tolerance limit and psychological threshold. As for this book, the beginning is as dull as clear water, which makes people sleepy. After a while, the plot finally gets a little ups and downs, and the result is that it keeps suppressing... Until the latest plot, it has been suppressed all the way to the end. There is no promotion or soothing transitional plot in the middle. It has been putting pressure on the protagonist layer by layer, but the protagonist's hangup is as if it does not exist. I don't know whether the protagonist can stand it or not. Anyway, I was so out of breath that I nearly suffocated to death. It can be seen from the chapter reviews of each chapter. Author, haven't you noticed that there are fewer and fewer chapter reviews?

I feel like the writing is not right. I originally thought it was about the development of elves, but it turns out that all the elves have fled to another world. So why does the protagonist still fight the devil? Does the devil have anything to do with him?

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It feels like the author is immersed in the art of defeating the devil and cannot extricate himself.

I feel like things in the main world should just be used as a background. According to the rhythm you wrote, the Demon King is so strong that he will return in a few years and kill the brave. At that time, the protagonist Goldfinger can't even earn a single point, and the journey to another world cannot take advantage of the longevity of the protagonist Elf. Then the battle with the Demon King will still depend on the brave. As a result, you can't tell whether the protagonist of your book is a hero or an elf. The result is that the protagonist has been suppressed for such a long time. The golden finger is completely useless. It is better to patch the main world, allowing the brave to continue to weaken the power of the devil, delay the time when the devil is unblocked, and allow the protagonist to have enough time to fully develop. In this way, it does not matter if the time in the different world is longer. The protagonist also has pressure to become stronger quickly, and the golden finger can also play a role.

When you see Chapter 34, what does the author want to write? What does this have to do with the protagonist? I feel like I have no idea at all.

This book is very good, and the free chapters are okay. If it is paid, I think it is a bit unnecessary. For example, other books may end up with 1 million words, but this book may have 1.5 Million words or 2 million words.

After reading your remarks on the launch, it seems that you feel that there is no problem with the front-end of your current "Zhutian"... Then you are really good. I don't know how much you have read at this stage recently. I hope you are satisfied with it Zhutian officially begins with the next volume, and then you finish this volume even faster. In other words, you can't even click on the topic after it is put on the shelf, and there is a long list of foot wraps. I don't know how you dare, and you don't care about the data of your works. Do you not care about the comments of the work or even the editor's suggestions? If you really don't care, why put it on the shelf? If you care about why there is no sign of change or explanation, you are currently publishing chapters on a stand-alone machine emmmmm.... Personally, I will not delete the book for the time being. After I find out from this book catalog that you have started the next volume, I will see how the preview of the corresponding chapter is and then consider whether to subscribe. Anyway, I will not subscribe to this volume

It feels like there is a clear flavor of a new author In other words, setting is laid out, setting is laid out, setting is laid out, setting is laid out, and the setting of blockbusters is placed upwards. If you look carefully, there is no content at all. This kind of thing should be thrown into a separate work setting or split into the plot instead of throwing three chapters of setting up.

Combining the introduction and the current content, does the author want to write something like "the queen of elves, but the guardian of human civilization"? 🤔

It was so boring to watch and the plot went by so slowly.

Isn't it unlimited streaming? Don't sell yourself like a sheep.

Author: I read every single chapter of the last book, but I really can't stand this one. When you wrote a novel about the Sea Tiger type, I found the rhythm of your writing quite interesting. I felt that the protagonist's frustration and the protagonist's training were all okay. After all, the Sea Tiger and the training in the Yulinjitou Four Mental Hospitals are normal. But what you are writing now is not a Haihu novel. What you are writing now is a normal otherworld novel, but you still write it in the same way as Haihu. The protagonist somehow doesn't care about gender. The demon king container who seems to have a crush on the protagonist can obviously conquer the world with time. The invincible Golden Finger does not give the protagonist time to develop. It is suspected that the next second he will kill a passerby NPC (referring to the two potential heroes found by the Demon King's container). The plot direction (it feels like the flags are all full), please, this plot is very cliché, very cliché.

I feel that there is nothing wrong with the subject matter, but the plot and characterization are flawed, making it difficult for people to want to watch it.

I don't know how to remove the watermark, so I'll just take a look

I quite like the slow-paced plot of immortality, and both Fulian and Irena like it. As witnesses, it is good for elves to witness the changes of the years. It is also good to add the heavens to prevent the world from getting tired of seeing it. It is inevitable to be bored all the time. After a few days, a shocking battle can be used as a life node, a milestone or something, but the protagonist must be able to defeat it. Strength development can be dealt with casually. As long as the protagonist can defeat it, as elves grow slowly, either arrange for the protagonist to accelerate his growth, or arrange the plot so that the protagonist has almost grown up. After looking at it, it seems that the time is too short, the pace is too tight, and the protagonist cannot develop. It is unpleasant in the short term, and it is not possible to see the changes in the long term. It is a pity.

Immortal elves have no concept of the passage of time. For a habit or thing, if it is useful, keep using it. If it falls behind, add a patch and continue to use it, instead of completely replacing it with a new one. Have strength and time, and do not need to adapt to the rhythm of society. The feeling of being content with the situation, to put it bluntly, is wandering around It's not that you can't learn. Slow development is due to slow physical aging and the growth period is too long, but it's not that you can't learn. According to what you wrote, does it mean that the elves have to go to kindergarten for hundreds of years? Are those elves who are almost immortal? The civilization on the planet's surface has changed for several generations, and they haven't even graduated from the kindergarten class? You can refer to the immortal species written by Big Eyeball, including the miserable elves, evil sea monsters, cyber dragons, cyber fox fairies, cyber elves...

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It feels like the main character is the same as Fei Wu. Forcibly inserting a setting in which elves have poor creativity, modern history is driven by dozens of geniuses born among tens of billions of people within hundreds of years. Other people are ordinary people, and elves are the same. The sense of time is purely due to the environment. If you let any elf live in a human city for a hundred years, the concept of time will be assimilated. There is also the problem of the low creativity of the Shabi elf. The protagonist is a time traveler, can't he copy? Have you never watched an anime movie before Time Travel? Even if it's really bad, can't you just copy someone else's template? I always feel that the dozens of pictures at the beginning are all settings and explanations to explain why the protagonist is so weak, has poor creativity and lacks quality.

It sounded like I was drowsy, and I had a big penis just after I paid for the first two pictures.

It was actually updated 😭