Immortal Life Begins with Swordsman

The first part is barely readable, but the further it goes, the more insane it becomes, just like the original online fairy novels of ancient times. As a result, it is forced to dig holes in fan fiction. The key is that it is not an original fairy tale type novel. What kind of literary youth disease do you think a person who writes fan fiction is guilty of? Isn't this sick?

It was a good read before Chapter 100, and the writing was quite interesting. But I got sick at the beginning of Chapter 100, and a one-time technique fusion device was released. In order to collect the technique fusion, I made a boundary-traveling talisman and traveled to the original timeline 23 years later to collect the techniques. It was simply unreadable...

The fan who pimped the male partner did not get good grades. If the author feels that he is able, he can challenge it.

Don't resolve it, suppress it directly. Those who obey me will prosper and those who oppose me will perish. 😡 If you don't obey, you will be the remnant of the Sword Sect. If you obey, you will turn conflicts into friendship.

The introduction is so poisonous that you destroyed the Sword Sect. Are you cutting your own arms? Without the Sword Sect, there will definitely be various factions within the Air Sect. As long as you become bigger and stronger, when resources are not enough, a lot of factions will definitely appear. The essence is to compete for resources, which can be understood as a struggle for power and profit. The most important thing to do is to fight out. As long as there are enough chassis and enough resources, who in the Sword Sect will care about your Air Sect? Who among the airbenders cares about your swordsmanship? Isn't the spicy drink delicious? If you drive out all the people from Jian Zong, not only can you consolidate the territory you have conquered, but also the Jian Zong and Qi Zong will not be able to see the top, so there will be no struggle.

There is a question. This book assumes that the sword fight is staged. So how did Feng Qingyang get defrauded into marriage by a prostitute in the original book? Since the relationship is so good, even if you want to cheat, you wouldn't use a prostitute to cheat, right?

I can't see why my qualifications are so bad.

You're writing nonsense, you haven't figured out the relationship between the characters. There is a few words in Mr. Jin Yong's original work that mentioned that before the Sword Qi War, the leader of Huashan was from the Qing generation, and his name seemed to be Ning Qingyu or something. He was Ning Zhongze's father, not Yue Buqun's father, and Yue Buqun was not the senior brother. It was because all his disciples died in the Sword Qi Fight, and there was no way to make Lao Yue the leader.

I don't know who the author chose among these three?

It has been poisonous since it was put on the shelves. The more I look at it, the higher my blood pressure is. It must be that the author has changed.

It feels forced to watch. Before there is a fierce battle in Huashan, any cat or dog can challenge it. They openly pick the Huashan factory to kill the people of Huashan. Huashan has not responded yet. Just read the original Songshan sect and you will know. The previous Huashan was even more embarrassing than the original Songshan sect. You wrote it like this.

It's also weird. Before it was put on the shelves, the writing was okay, but after it was put on the shelves, it started to disgust people and the writing was bad.

I vomited blood in the first chapter. It is not clearly stated in the original work whether Ning Zhong is the daughter of the head of the Qi Sect, but Yue Buqunjue is definitely not the eldest disciple of the head of the Qi Sect, let alone his son.

The timeline is wrong, why should I write a fanfic? I asked the author, when Linghu Chong broke into the temple and fought off the man in black, was it before or after he was injured? According to the author's logic, Linghu Chong was wrong to save Huashan Manmen, right? Yes, it is indeed wrong. Because some people thought he was acting and thought that what he vomited in his mouth was not blood but the ketchup he drank beforehand! Is it possible that The Adventures of the Duck and The World of Swordsman merged? What did you get from saving the Huashan sect? Both Yue and Ning are white-eyed wolves. Why? The reason is simple. Because Linghu Chong blinded the man in black's eyes with swordsmanship, not qigong! When word spread to the world, the Huashan Qi Sect lost all face. So I must wear an acting hat! In Ning Zhongze's heart, the reputation of Qi Zong and Yue Buqun are the most important. Of course Linghu Chong can be abandoned! So you are acting against your conscience!

This novel looks okay. If you write it carefully, you should be able to make it a masterpiece.

What does the protagonist say? It's not enough compared to the previous one, but it's more than enough compared to the inferior one. He keeps boasting about how talented the protagonist is, and maybe it is indeed higher than his peers. But the author always has to write that if someone from the older generation is chosen, the protagonist will be beaten worse than a dog. It's really frustrating and not very satisfying. There is also the protagonist who plots and plots, but it is of no use. The last word is that martial arts have big fists.

Going straight from Xiao Ao to Zhu Xian is really audacious! !

It was well written at the beginning, but if there was a sentence in the back that revealed the secrets, it would be counterattacked. Not to mention that the protagonist did not really reveal the secrets. It was based on what he had seen in his previous life. If there was such a thing as leaking secrets in a martial arts world, I knew it was another book. It was about the way of heaven and the consciousness of the world. It was dedicated to setting up rules related to human beings.

The first world, Swordsman, was honestly well written. It didn't start from Linghu Chong's time and seize opportunities, but the old routine was earlier, and the plot was also good. The second world, Zhu Xian, I didn't understand how short it was? Just to get a Qingyun Sect practice technique? And the Book of Heaven from the Treasure House of the Emperor of Heaven? Baguio, Lu Xueqi, and Xiaobai didn't have any explanations, so they just left them there? Run away after flirting? ? The biography of mortals cultivating immortals in the third world is even more outrageous. In the end, it will have to be re-edited. You might as well skip Zhu Xian and write it directly in the mortal sea of ​​chaotic stars, and then grab the Void Heaven Cauldron. This is still barely acceptable, but what do you mean by bringing a bunch of people from the world of Xiaoao Jianghu and the world of low martial arts into the dark world of mortals? Both of them are monastic geniuses, monks of all kinds of counterattacks. I can only say that Han Li is not as good as your Huashan sect, and his combat power has completely collapsed. In the Tiannan battle, Mulan let a person in the late stage of foundation building take command of the overall situation. You can actually imagine such a plot. No wonder the results are so difficult.

The writing is okay, but the author's knowledge of mathematical history and accounting is worrisome. This is the first time I've seen someone think that Arabic numerals are safer than traditional Chinese accounting.

All for you

Just don't accept female characters who are just passers-by. Try to keep them as few as possible or write them in a normal way. Don't write them in such a grand and outstanding way. The male protagonist is so awesome but he can't attract their love. If you can't accept them, then you, the male protagonist, are not very profitable.

The Spring Festival is over, why haven't you started writing yet? How long will it last?

Chapter 1: 1. Is Yue Buqun the senior brother? ? 2. Isn't the leader of Huashan right? ? 3. The ages don't match up either. In the midst of the smile, Lao Yue was probably in his 40s when he appeared, and his daughter-in-law was in her teens. If we push it forward, it would be reasonable for Yue Buqun to be in his teens during the civil war.

It was okay in the beginning, but after I got the boundary-breaking talisman, I started having inexplicable convulsions.

Xiaoao is a dead end, Ming Dynasty's firearms are very powerful. The Yuan Dynasty could be defeated and it was attacked from south to north. You have never thought about the reason. When talking about Huashan, it can be said that the people are rebelling against each other, and the swords and qi are in conflict. At least Shaolin, the official, Songshan, Hengshan, Beggar Clan, and Demonic Cult are working together. Wudang must have acquiesced. Have you ever thought about it, Guihua can fall into Huashan, and the sword, energy, and fire can merge. Then after several decades, the sword to ward off evil spirits was able to accurately land the bird in Huashan Mountain. He was also afraid that Yue Bujun would not take action and directly asked Yu Canghai to destroy the sect first, leaving only Lin Pingzhi, who would definitely join Yue Buqun's sect. Washing hands in the golden basin, Feng Qingyang, Six Immortals of Peach Valley, Bujie, Tian Boguang, this is a perfect dead end situation. After entering the game, Yue Buqun is pushed away step by step. Songshan does not have the ability to create such a big situation.

I'm so sick that I can't stand it anymore. From the fusion of skills to traveling through the timeline, and inexplicably accepting Ren Yingying 🙂🙂🙂, you have ruined the story of Swordsman. If the writing is not good, just follow the plot, and it's 2826 now. The funny and unreliable protagonist's character is no longer popular! I suggest writing a protagonist with a normal personality in the next book. In addition, this is a fantasy novel, not an urban drama. The protagonist is a waste of time from beginning to end, or the author is wasting time. If you're not good at water, the main character's strength is also the same as yours. Doing things all day long has nothing to do with improving your strength! What kind of pure water did you write about?

So short, how to vote?

Has the update been discontinued? What's going on?

The biography of a mortal cultivating immortality has already taken up half of it. Seeing as this situation is not finished yet, let's change the name.