As a Sword Fairy, I Work as a Summoner in the Paradise.

It is recommended to delete the first few pictures and start writing directly from the paradise or restart the book. The main problem is that the protagonist is too high at the beginning. It is the prehistoric era and the Taiyi Golden Immortal. The author obviously cannot grasp a lot of poisonous points in the writing. Anyway, it is a cool article. It is not as good as starting with the Orphan stream at the starting point and starting from scratch with a Taiwu plug-in. The Paradise panel career and the Taiwu plug-in panel are independent of each other. The return of a fully-leveled boss is always more difficult to write about, and it is more acceptable to novice readers who are starting to level up from scratch.

Author, have you been to the prehistoric world? Some things are written randomly 😅

Good people only care about their own interests, bad people don't take advantage of others, half-hearted people are good but not good, bad people are not bad yet

When writing about the Sword Immortal of the Ancient World, it is the Sword Immortal of the Ancient World, and when writing about the two-dimensional summoning, it is the two-dimensional summoning. It is difficult for you to write such a long story if you mix it up like this.

The plot is too draggy. More than 50 chapters were written in one copy

I know you like One Piece and have done a lot of research on One Piece. You want to write more, but that's not how you write it. More than 100 chapters have been put on the shelves, and the first copy has not been finished yet. How many copies can you write after finishing the book? Readers can't stand it either. If you write too many chapters in one world, they will get tired of it.

If there is a gun in the scene of a good novel, then she will fire it in the second act; this one is probably an arsenal, and picking and choosing is not enough. Finally I lifted a big sniper, and after a test sight, I decided to buy a pistol; because the load was not enough to equip two weapons at the same time, the big sniper was lost. Finally killed a goose with a bayonet in his pocket!

Um, I don't understand the introduction. What do you mean by limited summoning of someone older than the protagonist? The protagonist is over 300 years old, and then he says he can summon a 17-year-old? ? ?

I admit that Taiyi Jinxian is very cool, but it can't be done before reaching Daluo. The boss can do whatever he wants.

The prehistoric world only exists as a background, mainly explaining the origin of the protagonist Goldfinger. This book is mainly based on two-dimensional content. The prehistoric setting only refers to some game settings and does not adopt the settings of some well-known novels. Please forgive me if it conflicts with the prehistoric setting known by the reader's grandfather. If you want to see a prehistoric system in which anyone can explode the universe with one punch and create galaxies with a single thought, please don't click. I would like to thank all the readers who can read this book among thousands of books!

That little point is disgusting to 99 readers. You can change the A-level and below skills to strip the protagonist so that you can not strip the protagonist and copy it to the summoned object.

It's okay, but don't repeat the words at the end of the chapter at the beginning of the next chapter. It will make the listener uncomfortable.