My Forbidden Bonfire

Everything else is fine, but the author is obsessed with broken shoes, which is very problematic.

Author, I found a small problem, is your control of human nature not so good? As long as you write about the interaction between the protagonist and other characters, it will make people uncomfortable to read, but everything else is good, so I guess ~ you want to write about the evil of human nature, but the control is not good, which makes people uncomfortable ~ small suggestions, for reference only

Even though it was recommended in the eunuch book, I didn't realize it until halfway through, and I was speechless.

To be honest, the protagonist's fire was already very strong from the beginning, but the author just went the extra mile and added multiple weapon refiners to increase other abilities. The more abilities you have, the harder it is to write and the easier it is to forget. It is also easy to suppress and collapse. You must know that it can be milked and strengthened. It is already enough. You have to add other things. The key is to add so much in the early stage. This situation is the easiest to write down.

The plot is blunt, like a running account

You write a book like this and it is often recommended...

It's really ink. It's ten pictures. I haven't figured out the breaking power yet. And the protagonist's character is so bad. When you write about the apocalypse, you still go through this kind of character transformation process. Forget it. Even this, you did such ink. According to the comment section, the way of writing the apocalypse in 15 years is still that kind of ink.

Again and again, we entered the palace. Really

I don't quite understand why you don't just put the fire in the middle of the garbage pile and let it burn. Isn't it just setting it casually?

My personal opinion is to continue writing old works and move on to new ones. The old works already have more than 100,000 words. If you continue to work hard, the number of words will increase, and the number of updates every day will increase, the results will naturally be better. Look at the many rubbish works on the ranking list, which are more than 2 million words. If the number of words is more, it will not be bad. What's more, your writing is okay, far better than ordinary rubbish works. You just don't have the word count, and another thing is that you are very easy to break down and can't write long.