The Church of the Holy Hall Begins with Blessings

Some of the previous comments are right. It is indeed one of the few novels about religion (religion, belief, God) that is not a pure scam, but: 1. Focus of writing Can you write more about religion? Recently, I feel that there are too many secular (basically referring to aristocrats), not as much as the religious aspects written at the beginning. Secularity is one aspect, but the focus of the article should be religion. In fact, I'm not averse to reading about the secular world. After all, most Qidian novels focus on the secular world. Your good secular writing is a plus point, but don't you feel that there are too many aristocratic stories recently, and there is no sense of religion or belief? Where is the religious component of recent articles? 2. Introduction to the world Of course the world is very important, but I feel that the writing is not very good. It is isolated and unsystematic, rare, and too biased towards an aristocratic society. Can the introduction be deeper or broader? Can you introduce the world in a more concentrated manner or write about other aspects of the world, such as civilian life, folklore, customs, astronomy and geography, etc. This can make the world view more vivid and three-dimensional. Of course, we can't take over the main topic, but mainly talk about religion. Anyway, I mainly read this novel to read about religion. I personally support the emphasis on characters and plot, and not too much on the world. However, the current introduction to the world is really sparse and aristocratic. I wonder what other readers think. 3. Character words and deeds Does the protagonist have no character card? 3.1 Dislike That magician is so condescending. I hope he will have higher moral standards and believe in the Lord in the future. Believe in the power of the protagonist. Yara (female noble). Believe in the Lord in the future. There are too many transactions and it is quite worldly. At least his brother should trust him and look forward to his brother's plot. Putting aside the dislike, having feelings about them also shows that these two characters are well written. 3.2 Like Personally, I like the protagonist and George (Paladin) the most. Their words and deeds are good. First of all, the dialogue between them is good and reminds me of some biblical stories. It's good to promote God and religion to outsiders. And then the good things they do are also good. But recently, the protagonist, in terms of speech: only speaks to a few people, only to nobles; in terms of behavior: does not do any good things, does not preach, does not communicate with believers, does not communicate with common people, does not communicate with people who may believe. Paladin: Some of his words and deeds in the early and mid-term were very good. He not only preached well, but also did many good things. But there hasn't been much of his performance lately. He didn't say anything nice, and he didn't do anything good. Especially in the latest chapter "Miracles and Lies", the level of dialogue between the protagonist and George is not as good as before. There is no religious content, no sense of religion or holiness, and the protagonist thinks he is lying. 3.5. Protagonist's Belief The protagonist is dishonest, the protagonist has no divinity, the protagonist is not moral enough, the protagonist is not portrayed enough, and the protagonist does not abide by the precepts. I hope that the protagonist can grow up well, and must set a good commandment for himself. The protagonist must have extremely high moral standards. He does not seek to be like the most benevolent God, but also needs to be a great good person. The protagonist is currently wandering between great good and small good. Sometimes, mental thoughts feel neither good nor evil. Taking a step back, at least it is great externally. But if he's good on the outside, hopefully he's good on the inside too. The protagonist wants to be a saint. In the latest chapter, what other lies does the protagonist say? Has the protagonist not successfully lied to himself yet? Haven't believed in the Lord yet? The protagonist can clearly believe that the words and deeds of the magician are all because of the Lord, and all these are indeed gifts from the Lord. Please don't let me know the protagonist's disgusting psychology. The protagonist must be good on the outside. If the protagonist is not good on the inside, can there be less of his inner thoughts? And didn't the protagonist already believe in the existence of God? This is how he explains his coming to this world and the light group. Aren't light groups related to God? The protagonist must believe in the Lord. Where is the faith! ! ! In addition, the dialogue between the protagonist and the magician feels a bit inferior, has no sense of sacredness, and has no style. Can't you introduce the Lord properly? Equality is important, and humility is good, but the protagonist is a bit lowly, and his words and deeds have the feeling that he himself does not believe in the Lord, especially in his exchanges with the magician and the nobleman related to him. Sometimes it does not feel like preaching, but just not a very good rational explanation of God and religion. Of course, there are times when I feel like the writing is very good. There is indeed a distinction between rationality and intuition in the understanding of faith, but the protagonist does not feel that he believes in the Lord even rationally. The protagonist clearly had many good descriptions of faith and good teachings before, but the dialogue between them was really unbelieving, especially with the magician. I feel that the magician is superior to others. I cannot feel the greatness of the Lord. 4. Missionary Communication The communication between the protagonist and other characters mainly refers to the teachings and is well written. The missionary writing is also very good, but it doesn't appear except at the beginning. At the beginning, I gave blessings to those soldiers. What I said was really nice, and it had a sense of sanctity and faith. But recently I only talk to nobles. The protagonist clearly knows that it is easier for civilians to get closer to the church, but there has been little communication and little help recently. The protagonist does not preach well and does not actively preach the Lord. If the novel develops like this, it will become a religious novel again. The protagonist must really preach well. 5. Power (Light Group and Discipline) Can you write more about the Light Group and Discipline? It feels a little lacking, a little weak. 5.1 Light Group The introduction of Light Group is indeed too little, let me introduce it well first. Please give some more information about the light group and introduce what happened between the protagonist and the light group. Let me introduce the situation of the light group. 5.2 Precepts Personally, I think your article on precepts and precepts is very good, but I feel that the combination with the characters and plot is not good enough. For example, can you think of good commandments for the protagonist? Can you write more about discipline? There must be various disciplines. The current number, depth, and breadth of the precepts are not very good, they are few, shallow, and narrow. There are also few people who have precepts. And I feel like your writing on light groups and disciplines is a bit weak. (1) The production is slow and few; At least produce more, too few, just three. It can also be written as rare and precious. (2) Only one; Generally, those who observe religious precepts have several precepts. The light group should be stronger, meet some conditions, and keep more disciplines . But it's okay to just focus on writing. (3) I don't know the name, but I don't have a good name; Can't we let those who keep the precepts know the names of the precepts? The name of the first commandment, "Xiang Sheng", is very good. Although the other names resemble "Paladin", they don't sound like commandments, which is unpleasant. However, this allows those who keep the precepts to naturally know the name of the precepts and have a sense of inner strength and to be with God after they have observed the precepts for a long time. (4) Change the ring at will; The protagonist is changed at will, and the ringkeepers don't know, which gives a sense of inferiority. Why should the protagonist be able to change commandments at will? This would lose the sense of ritual. The protagonist is not a light group. What is a light group? The light group was not introduced either. (5) Weak strength. The map is not big yet, George already believes so, and as a result, his strength is only at the level of a knight. How will the church develop in the future? I hope I can keep it all my life, keep many precepts, and know the name of the precepts. The protagonist can have the ability to change rings, but don't change rings, just produce a few more rings. Just let the people who keep the commandments naturally believe in the Lord again and be on the side of the protagonist. Believe in the protagonist's management abilities. Although the precepts are good, except for the first one, the effect introduction is not idealistic enough, not sacred enough, not noble enough, and has no sense of faith. It even feels like some systematic articles, with a sense of cheapness. It is written word for word to add so-and-so, what degree of words are added, and only "physical enhancement" and the like are written. Isn't it good? Of course, the "physical enhancement" I wrote here is not meaningful enough. However, as the author, you have written very good teachings and precepts so far. I believe you can also write with more sense in terms of effect. The first "Xiang Sheng" has a good name, good prose, and a good introduction. Especially the latter one, theoretical immortality. There is that sense of conceptual god, that sense of holiness. The names of the last two don't feel like commandments, but like a profession or a "paladin". As for the name of the precepts, I hope you: Or combine them both organically. Write both professions and commandments. For example, write that certain professions are related to certain precepts, and certain precepts are related to certain professions. Either change the power of this light group to include both professions and disciplines, so that they can be separated to a certain extent. However, discipline is indeed good, and professions are indeed bad. Professions are too common and have no feeling. I feel it would be best to simply delete the professional-sounding commandment names. It is best to concentrate on writing the commandments. Haven't you already written some related religious commandments, such as "honesty"? Just add some rhythm and effect introduction to them. It is good to have a sense of discipline like the first "Xiang Sheng". As long as you have the feeling, you don't have to be as strict as "honesty". 5.3 Protagonist I hope the protagonist can keep all the commandments, I hope the protagonist can be strong, I hope the protagonist can have great faith, I hope the protagonist can believe in the Lord. 6. Religion Too weak. It's developing now, author, come on. The above is the result of more than four hours of writing. I hope the author can take a look.

The author is too extreme, killing those who are inhumane

The vaguer the belief, the harder it is to deepen it The narrower the omnipotence, the harder it is to obtain a broad group of believers It is better to worship a Lord who is set to be omniscient and omnipotent The Lord's power is boundless, but the Lord is both just and evil, and He is good at the same time. It is cruel again Believers need to take the initiative to contact and pray for some aspects of Him (Commandments) For example, the "Xiang Sheng" at the beginning has a special Lord representing life, longing for immortality, and eternal life Specially collecting those aspects of life. People who are extremely eager for the morbid pursuit of immortality The refinement of the internal atmosphere of this small group will produce psychological effects and promote faith. According to the setting of the book, a higher degree of faith will give obvious feedback to the power, thus forming a cycle In other words, from a simple monotheism to a monotheism\Pantheon All gods that can be worshiped are an aspect of the true Lord Segment out countless lower-level churches to help shepherd sheep, harvest and spread faith

The subject matter is good, but the writing is lacking. In addition, the protagonist has been made out of character by you.

From now on, the protagonist and Yara already have an inseparable hatred. On a large scale, it is a dispute over ideas. On a small scale, the chapel was burned down and a large number of the protagonist's followers were killed. I hope that the protagonist will be strong in the future, and that his family will be the first to be defeated. After all, during the Crusades, they really didn't leave any chickens or dogs behind.

I originally thought it was a low-magic world view, but since the emergence of the magician, something felt wrong. Judging from the expressiveness of the article, The power of the magician is much higher than that of the knights, and the knights do not say that there is any concept of hierarchy. I feel that the power in this world is not balanced. Why do magicians still serve the nobles? Moreover, they have discovered the power of the protagonist, and it involves the ancient gods. There will not be another plot in the future where a high-ranking mage protects the protagonist and silently opens the way. Scholars restrict magicians, how can they be restricted? Tell the lord how the lord can suppress a magician who is more powerful than himself.

There are two obvious problems with this work. The first is the improper handling of the protagonist's growth curve. The leap in ability lacks necessary process description and reasonable foreshadowing. It is difficult for readers to feel the protagonist's transformation trajectory from weak to strong. The sudden strength seems blunt and unconvincing. The second is the shift in narrative focus. The mysterious words at the beginning of the work really catch people's attention and create a good sense of atmosphere. However, as the story progressed, the author tried to develop a group portrait narrative, but was limited by his own writing control and failed to balance the rhythm and depth of the multi-threaded narrative well, resulting in a compromised overall effect. These two structural flaws are likely to be the key factors affecting the spread of the work. The readers' expectations for the protagonist's growth are not fulfilled, and the focus of the narrative is dispersed in the later period, which will naturally affect the reading experience and word-of-mouth communication.

After it was released, too much was written about the nobles' affairs, but too little was written about the changes in the strength of the church and the battles on the mysterious side. It felt less attractive than before it was released.

By the middle stage, the protagonist is basically an inhuman god. That's not how you write group portrait books. I've never seen a group portrait book where the main character goes offline directly in the later stages, and all the supporting characters are described. There's no sense of immersion.

There is a comment upstairs that I think is right. The author wanted both. The rise of grassroots in the Middle Ages and the suppression of gods in the multiverse are completely different styles. As a result, the author wanted both and wanted to write it in the early stage.