Douluo Dragon of Time

The level-up system gives you an attribute point. If you don't focus on training talents, acceleration and strength in the early stage, you can't hunt soul beasts when you get promoted. You can only rely on the system to give you. It means that the system has locked you up. Just press the level to suppress the combat power. Obtaining the soul ring depends on gaining other people's favorability. It's okay if you write too many female protagonists. It's really difficult to judge if your protagonist is a female and you still follow the protagonist.

This punch is powerful and fast, can you catch it? The protagonist female, the author said she would not marry, but Shan Bai didn't know. There is a system that cannot speak. Every time the protagonist improves the soul power level, attribute points will be generated. You can choose durability, range, action precision, strength, speed, range, growth (suspected to be a jiojio setting?) To add points. The protagonist currently cannot obtain soul rings independently, and can only obtain soul rings by absorbing the emotions of others (the protagonist group). Overall, the writing is good, the writing is fluent, there are no typos, and there are no wrong sentences. In terms of plot, due to the appearance of the protagonist, there are some subtle differences in the plot, and there is not much inner drama for the protagonist (👍)

Not so good, the first three cards persuade me to quit.

It's quite an idea. Just consider revising it at the beginning, re-imagining the reasons for joining Shrek, or clarifying the plan to break away from Shrek later. Otherwise, it will be a pity that no one will see it because of the bad start.

First of all, the fact that the protagonist is a female has already screened out a lot of people in male videos. It doesn't matter if the writing is good, but if the writing is poor or average, most people will be screened out Then, the protagonist has a good impression of Shrek at the beginning. Is this a weirdo from a parallel universe? It is estimated that the only people who have a good impression of Shrek are when the comic comes out. Not many people will have a good impression of them when they understand the novel. This kind of setting is worse than the protagonist not knowing anything about Douluo Continent. Secondly, the protagonist gave me a feeling that she was very cheap. She was threatened by others, but she agreed to become a student even though she was not incapable of resistance. She completely put her own safety on the mercy of others. What if Flanders got a brain attack and thought that the protagonist might come back with revenge in the future, so he decided to kill the protagonist while hunting for martial arts? Finally, the protagonist also gives people the feeling that she is a dog raised by the system, and she can do anything for the system's tasks. The author might as well write a female channel. The kind of writing where the Immortal Emperor divorces her and divides her half of her cultivation may be more suitable for you

1. Why write a female protagonist in a male channel? Answer: Because I didn't say I couldn't write. 2. Is it necessary to join this Shrek Academy? Answer: I joined to beat people up and take advantage of others, and I know how to run away. 3. Single marriage? Answer: The current style is light, but the focus is on plot.

Since the author mentioned that the protagonist is Wushuang, the contrast in the first five chapters is quite big. The protagonist has no good feelings for Shrek and is forced to join Shrek. It is too frustrating. Do you really want to change?

I saw this book on the web version. The heroine and martial arts interests me more. The abilities involving time and space are generally incomprehensible and powerful. I have read more than a dozen chapters, and my personal opinion is that the protagonist is not very proactive, or the author does not know what to ask the protagonist to do, the desire is not strong, and the goal is unclear. The performance is a bit blunt conflict at the beginning, and then follow the plot, including the protagonist himself. He feels that it does not matter whether he can enter Shrek Academy or not. Later, he is forced to join and still wants to run away. This is definitely not possible. The protagonist himself has no goals, which makes it even harder for us to watch. Since the protagonist has a system, fighting and making friends can add points to make him stronger, so write it like this. Joining Shrek means beating up scum, making friends, torturing three people or joining a group. In the Spirit Hall, it should be Shrek or free agency. The attitude must be clear, or if I want to be the best in the world, I can kill all the way. In addition, the essence of online writing is to put it bluntly, it is to be fun, it is to pretend to be X, it is to be fun, and the protagonist cannot be deflated for no reason, otherwise it will be poisonous.

The idea of ​​this book is indeed there, and it is quite good, but I always feel that it is not right when written 😵 The subject matter is indeed too niche, and the author's writing style is not very good at attracting readers who don't care about the subject matter. Maybe the final result is difficult to be too good 😢 Personally, I will definitely leave when I need to subscribe. This is for reference only. If you have different opinions, please don't scold me 😭

It's not good. The previous part is too discouraging, and the setting where the protagonist cannot freely obtain soul rings is not good either.

It's not that there are typos in your introduction. How do you want me to click in and take a look? Time View → World View

The success of this book was delayed by the first few chapters.

It's okay. I've read more than 100 chapters so far. The first part is a bit discouraging, but the second part is pretty good. I personally think it's worth reading.

It's hard to see this Lily Douluo. I clicked on the first chapter. Damn it, it's so ugly.

The front part is too toxic, I haven't read the back part, maybe it's okay to read the comments? Please change the front part. I can't stand it any longer and have run away.