Bourne Warriors: My Vest Is All over the World

As a loyal reader who has been following "Bourne Warriors: My Vests All Over the World" to this day, I have always been deeply attracted by the spy world in 1933 in your writing - the setting of Kong Fanxing traveling through time with hyperamnesia is very innovative, the activation of the personality simulation system is even more tense, and the lurking story of Spark Team has the hard-core tension of a spy war, but also hides the warmth of ordinary people in troubled times. Especially the details in the opening chapter where Sachiko Oda uses the corpses of her companions to divert firepower. There is no unnecessary foreshadowing but it shows the cruel reality of the spy war. This precise rhythm control is admirable. While immersed in the story, I have some immature suggestions based on my own reading experience, hoping to contribute to your subsequent creation or improvement of your works: First, enhance the interactive sense of the system There is a system in the tags of the article. I believe this is one of the cool points of this article, but in the current more than 80 chapters, there are only a few words about the system. Maybe you want to create a feeling of being systematic but not completely dependent on the system. But in the writing of these eighty chapters, the existence of the system has indeed been infinitely weakened. As a reader, I don't feel the refreshing feeling of being in the system. It seems that many times the protagonist's ability needs some reasonable explanation, and the system is mentioned from the side. Recommendation: Increase the function introduction of the system, increase the interaction between the system and the protagonist, and focus on the improvement of the protagonist's own abilities with the help of the system, so that readers can witness this from the perspective of a person who has experienced it. I think this is the biggest joy of this article Ps: The appearance of the system in this article is rather abrupt, has no origin, and has no relevant introduction, like a buff that is forcibly added to the protagonist Second, the in-depth implementation of the vest setting: making identity switching more logical and tense. The core setting of "vests all over the world" created by you is very eye-catching, and the concept of different identities corresponding to different intelligence battlefields is very attractive. However, the appearance of some vests is a bit hasty at present. For example, when Kong Fanxing switches identities to perform tasks, it is difficult for readers to clearly perceive the boundary between "personality simulation" and "ontological consciousness", and occasionally the behavioral logic of different identities is confused. Suggestion: You can add some detailed descriptions when switching identities: for example, when switching to a specific identity, you will habitually rub the specific position of your sleeves (corresponding to the training habit of that identity), and the hyperamnesia characteristics of the ontology Kong Fanxing (such as unconsciously remembering details of the environment) are interspersed in a covert way; at the same time, add a brief profile of the identity background, such as For example, a certain vest lost his family due to the war, which became his secret motive for secretly transmitting information to "Xinghuo Xiao", making the vest not only a tool, but also a flesh-and-blood existence. Third, the two-way empowerment of the hyperamnesia setting: balancing the golden finger and character growth. As the core trait of Kong Fanxing, you have demonstrated hyperamnesia. It has advantages in intelligence analysis and skill learning, but there is still room for exploration in the "cost" of this setting - the original article mentioned that hyperamnesia makes it difficult to think deeply and relies on sleeping pills, but it rarely reflects the actual impact of this on espionage missions. Suggestion: Add relevant plots: such as the sudden influx of chaotic memory fragments during key negotiations. The film interfered with his judgment, and he needed to use the system to urgently sort out information to regain his composure; or when he was disguising his identity, he was almost exposed because he could not "forget" knowledge that did not fit the character. In the end, he overcame the difficulty by constructing a "memory partition", which not only made the setting of hyperamnesia more complete, but also made Kong Lingjun's growth arc clearer. Fourth, the supporting cast. The three-dimensional shaping of the image The Spark Team is the embodiment of countless revolutionary warriors of that era, and is the core team that runs through the whole situation. The completion of countless tasks is completed by the cooperation of the members of this team. As the protagonist of the entire story, in fact, each of them does not play many roles. Each one is good at what they are responsible for in each activity. What characters, how they cooperate with each other, how they are completed, and whether there are any interesting things happening in them have not been shown more. At present, more focus is on Kong Lingjun's leading role, and the images of other members are still thin. Suggestion: Further extend the story line of the supporting characters: such as designing exclusive ones for the team members. In the highlight moments, his own skills complement Kong's intelligence analysis; or add details of the bonds between members, such as the weaknesses and perseverance exposed when members cover each other after an operation fails, making the comradeship of Spark Team more infectious and giving the "global lurking" setting a more solid team support. Fifth, strong team support. Streamline the description of the planning layout and activate the immersion of spy wars The most enjoyable thing about reading spy novels is following the protagonist in dismantling the layout in the fog - it is the subtle trembling of the secret agent in the fingertips when transmitting information, the ordinary conversation with hidden code words when dealing with the opponent, or the pause of the pen on the paper when making plans. These are hidden in the details. Traces of planning should be the most attractive soul of espionage stories, but unfortunately in the article, this soul is weaker. Whenever the key planning link comes, the protagonist is not seen repeatedly deducing risks, such as how to avoid the enemy's surveillance blind spots, and how to prepare contingency plans for companions; nor is it shown the psychological game during planning, such as whether to choose when facing uncertain intelligence sources. Choose to take risks or stay dormant for a while. The real-time layout that should make readers hold their breath is mostly replaced by the post-recollection review, which lacks the sense of tension and involvement in the process. Suggestions: 1. Use details instead of summary: let readers feel the emotions through actions and expressions instead of passively receiving conclusions. 2. Stay close to the protagonist's perspective. Corner: Describe the world from the protagonist's senses, allowing readers to experience the scene with the protagonist's eyes, ears, and feelings Focus: A character who has witnessed his own growth will be more worthy of readers investing more emotion and energy Sixth, add appropriate job descriptions and establish awareness of power levels. The characters that appear in the book so far are only the roles he plays, such as the owner of Mipu. In the latest chapter, Li Zhusheng and Sheng Zhongliang only know that they must hold important positions in the Shanghai Central Bureau, but their status in the Red Party is not introduced. Take Xun's novel as an example, Ning Cong is a student of the third squad of the infantry - captain of the third team of the Action Section - leader of the fourth group - Shanghai. The deputy director of the intelligence station (lieutenant colonel) - the director of the operations department of the military statistics bureau (colonel) - the director of the intelligence department of the Second Department of the Ministry of National Defense (major general), the ability is from weak to strong, and the position is from low to high. Readers witness it step by step. Of course, the sense of involvement is stronger and the emotions are deeper. Although the situations in the two novels are different, Kong Lingjun and the others will not have any military positions before him, but he has come into contact with them. The status and position of the relevant characters can be introduced as necessary. Suggestion: Add the character's position introduction to help readers quickly establish a sense of the power hierarchy. It can also intuitively reflect the character's background and abilities. What kind of person they play, what kind of responsibilities they bear, and pave the way for the rationality of the plot. Actually, one thing these articles have in common is that you seem to focus more on narrative and lack a sense of involvement, which naturally makes it less exciting. It seems that you focus more on whether the storyline is complete and logical. Of course, these points do not mean that you have not written them at all, but that there are not many memorable points and it is difficult to leave a deep impression on people. Impressions. The above suggestions are based on the cherishment of the story, and I hope to provide you with some reference. I sincerely hope that in the subsequent plots, Kong Lingjun's vest story will continue to be written. Finally, I hope that the author can break through himself as soon as possible, and the novel can be seen and recognized by more people.

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Away from Kong Lingjun, a male pig-footed man with hyperamnesia who accidentally traveled to 1933 due to an overdose of sleeping pills, and awakened the [Personality Simulation System], breaking the boundaries of the protagonist's abilities in traditional spy games. The setting of "It's easy to imitate others and create an identity at your fingertips" is refreshing. It not only shows the super strength of the protagonist "The Thousand-faced Spy King", but also makes the plot full of the charm of reversal~ In the level of spy war-themed works With endless adventures, I look forward to the author using his unique setting and rigorous logical thinking to bring us a hearty spy war feast~ I'm waiting for you in the latest chapter~

The lame old man ran quite fast. No matter how scheming Kuronuma Yaksha was, he was just like a stepping stone. He could not kill Kong Lingjun, but he would eventually make Kong Lingjun stronger.

No fast food, just some patience. After explaining the background and system, I felt that I started to get excited from Chapter 5.

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