I Can Travel Through the Heavens, but the System Is Chaotic

\Finally came to Naruto. You need to get some eye skills.

What's going on? It's broken? This update is unstable, I'm not sure.

He traveled to a world with supernatural abilities and became a handsome boy dressed in red. His dreamer failed to save all mankind, and he was almost killed by a canine gunman. A plug-in was immediately launched to fight the Ancient King. In the future, there may be other versions of himself that he could not deal with. Understood, I am Shirou Emiya, let's take a look at what the system tasks are first. Huh? Help Horus defeat the Emperor?

The first one I want to write about Xingyue is to write it directly. It is better for you to write random than to say that the protagonist dare not go to the ancient world and then leave Gao Wu who at least has order and can survive. Choose a weird protagonist? ? ? ? ? Aren't you afraid that it will be the same as Yang Jian's world? Look at this chapter and it will make you vomit.

The system is a huge Elucat

The writing and plot are both good, but the author is a little confused and writes that Director Ken's failure to bring mercury and the magic furnace were two ancestral mistakes.

The actual stupid cat is as big as meow

You are the author of Mao Lai, right? Unfortunately, this is the starting point. Unless you want to be enlightened, I don't recommend that you, an extraterrestrial demon, come to the starting point to write a book, because 🐧 🐈

The protagonist is staring at a certain sword with his bones drawn, right? ? The skills he drew are similar to those of Shirou. Let's switch to a few people and at least upgrade the Binding Magic Eye. The Binding Magic Eye can only be used after being drawn. . And in which world can you draw only the skills of that world? ? 😰😰😰

Although the protagonist is a fighting fanatic, the martial arts written by the author really have no tension 🥱

🙄 The character description of the protagonist is good, and the fatal reason takes people through time travel. The protagonist who is not suitable for romance should either end the world completely or leave the suspense to reunite again. If you take people through time travel, no one will really watch it. Suitable for cats to write when they go back

1. Don't study the market and create blindly Many novices only write according to personal preferences and ignore platform lists and reader preferences, resulting in works that cannot be signed or lack traffic. It is recommended to dismantle popular works on the target platform before writing, and analyze the subject matter, rhythm and character settings to improve the draft rate. 2. There are too many characters or unfamiliar names at the beginning A large number of character names at the beginning will confuse readers, especially the use of uncommon characters (such as "" and ""), which will increase reading difficulties. Features can be used instead of names (such as "crooked neck" and "twisted face") to enhance memory points. 3. Useless moaning and slow pace If the first few chapters are full of empty lyricism or lengthy background introduction, readers will easily abandon the article. The pace should be accelerated, specific events and actions should be used to advance the story, and "hydrology" should be avoided. 4. Failure to outline will lead to logical confusion or unfinished work Lack of an outline can easily cause the plot to deviate, the character to collapse, or even be forced to unfinished. It is recommended to use the "eight-step story method" (goal-obstacle-turn-climax) to build a framework to ensure a coherent plot. 5. The characters are flat or their words and deeds do not match the setting If the protagonist is written as a "decathlon" without corresponding description, or the villain is purely evil and has no depth, readers will be confused. Three-dimensional characters need to be created through details and growth arcs. 6. Abusing perspective switching or first-person perspective Frequently changing perspective (such as first-person, God perspective) can easily destroy the sense of substitution. Newcomers are advised to use the third person to maintain narrative stability. 7. Excessive pursuit of writing style and neglect of storytelling Piling up gorgeous words but weak plot will make readers feel hollow. The core of a good story is conception and resonance, not mere language modification. 8. Work behind closed doors, do not sweep the charts and do not demolish articles Refuse to study popular works and stick to niche themes, which may lead to no one paying attention to the work. Lists should be analyzed regularly to learn the routines of successful works. 9. Cut the book more frequently or cut it prematurely If the data is not good, just abandon it, or stop updating for more than 3 days, which will damage readers' trust and algorithm recommendation. It is recommended to save a manuscript of 30,000 to 50,000 words and keep it updated steadily. 10. Narcissistic description or childish dialogue Excessive exaggeration of appearance (such as "skin that can be broken by blows") or making the protagonist speak childishly (such as rambling throughout the story) will dissuade adult readers.

If you drag the rhythm hard, people will really run away.

Something is wrong, a feeling of an alien demon. Is he an accidental demon? Author? Brothers

I can't stand it at all, Meng Er's writing style is too strong. I don't feel like I'm the kind of person who usually adds the word "meow" after talking, but I can't control it.

I finally finished Naruto. I don't know why. I didn't feel much about it before, but now I feel that Naruto is too cool. The writing on Naruto is basically the same, and I don't see much new ideas.

I don't understand, there is still a talking system

The number of two-dimensional readers here is extremely limited, and they are basically concentrated in a few fixed books. There are also some readers who have higher vision and have requirements for writing. In short, it can be said that the upper limit is destined to be limited. For readers of Dian, the author, your book requires too high a concentration in the second dimension.

Is this a translation of a foreign novel?

Doesn't it mean that the protagonist doesn't have the habit of killing innocent people indiscriminately?

You'll know this flavor as soon as this system comes out

Of course, it's because of the intelligent system that can talk, even I can't handle it. The introduction is so toxic, I can only say that those who can watch it are all gods.

The character in the first world is not to kill innocent people indiscriminately. Cut to the second world and start eating buns directly. It's so funny.

The writing feels okay, but the updates are too unstable.

The protagonist wants to restart human civilization in his own world. How to solve the problem of communication between people from all worlds? Now that the protagonist can understand him and other worlds can understand him, it is a systematic solution. However, I don't seem to have seen how the text can be understood, but now there are only three worlds, two of which are Japanese, and the text part can also be understood. The text in the Naruto world seems to be a mixture of Japanese and English, and the language is Japanese by default. But if the world appears in the future, the background is a world with completely different languages ​​​​and characters. The migrating residents communicate with each other, whether it is directly and systematically instilling the protagonist's noon and Mandarin Chinese, or the residents learn each other's language and characters, and slowly the languages ​​​​and characters of the subsequent generations merge.