Tomb Raiding: I'm Really Not a Zongzi

The protagonist you wrote is too unrealistic. To give him motivation, you added a lifespan limit to him, but his behavior doesn't reflect his lifespan. There are a lot of monsters to fight in the Heavenly Palace, but he doesn't have time to go back and fight them. Instead, he runs around aimlessly following the plot, and his excuse for getting close to the trio doesn't hold water.

It feels very much like the original Tomb Raider Chronicles. And the writing style is smooth too. 👍👍

Nowadays, elementary school students, middle school students, and even those who have no hope of passing the college entrance exam are all writing books. Their writing is immature, incoherent, and their ideas are extremely naive.

Your writing and ideas are immature. Stop adding so many naive thoughts and reasons. Be more mature.

The writing and plot are fine, I'm just worried about not updating anymore. Keep it up, bro! 👍👍👍

Seeing the protagonist vying for the Yangshi Lei style with Old Lady Huo, I don't know how I managed to keep reading. The protagonist is weak, has little presence, it's a nanny story, and there are no women. I don't know how I even managed to finish it. No wonder so few people are reading it. The author is immersed in their own world; it's just so boring. The protagonist's strength is suppressed too much; he's far too weak.

Chapter Two is a total turn-off; it's mindless.

The writing is alright. I'll give the author two monthly tickets to encourage them. Also, I hope the protagonist will be more cautious, and some things don't need explanation, like the centipedes escaping or the human-faced birds running away instead of attacking. The protagonist doesn't need to explain these things. Also, the protagonist could be a little greedy, because readers are all ordinary people, and seeing a protagonist who is without desires will reduce their sense of identification.

I watched it a long time ago, and now I've finished it all in one go. It's definitely good, but the ending just doesn't quite capture the feeling.

It's very well written. I've read a lot of Tomb Raider fanfiction, but very few are truly well-written; I usually can't even finish reading halfway through. The lifespan limit at the beginning was a bit discouraging, but it got much better in the middle and later stages. The book's stats were really bad, so the author must be a tough guy to stick with it!