Just After Ascending, You Sent Me to Huaguo Mountain to Suppress Demons?

1. The style is a bit too platinum star and a bit annoying. 2. The content has a bit of institutional flavor, which will make people familiar with it smile. 3. Reading is very smooth

The content of Officialdom is well written, but why do you suddenly start downloading dungeons to fight monsters and upgrade?

Have you ever been a heavenly soldier? Some things are written randomly, taking it for granted

Evaluation: The first ten chapters are good, but not so much after that. The first ten chapters are food + grass, and then poisonous weeds. First of all, let's be cool. In this kind of serious fighting story, the protagonist is a pawn who is pushed out by various forces and can only find a way out by playing both ways. Where do you come from? The answer is your hang, rely on hang to grab a way out. It's good to pull Wukong first at the beginning, but after pulling Wukong, you can run away. Slowly steal development and then make a blockbuster, instead of jumping into the pit yourself as a pawn. Then when it comes to fighting, the review is bad. The fight is purely about throwing skills on both sides and then ending. There is no description at all, just two skill names and then it's over. The visuals are not as good as a turn-based game like Sword of Sword One, and the combat description is almost as good as the tree-cutting pig. Finally, let's talk about the plot arrangement. It's basically a mess. I just don't understand why you want to write the plot of Shushan? The part about protecting the stock market is purely written, which makes me feel happy and unhappy at the same time. Whether it's the financial part or the combat part, I feel like I'm being beaten like a dog. Why did you write about it? Isn't it better to delete it? You know, everyone reads books just to have fun. The fun points of a serious fighting article like this are the following: it is fun to strategize, it is fun to solve problems, and it is fun to steal development and finally crush the game. Playing both sides is a method, but solving the problem is the best part, and you can't put the cart before the horse. And what about your cool moments? There is only one solution to the Huaguoshan problem. I'll give you a summary of the plot: I came up to solve the problem in Huaguo Mountain, which was a bit of fun; then I went to Heaven to get both sides, which was a means, not a bit of fun or poison; after the game, a plot that could be considered a bit of fun, but you wrote it was boring; after the game, I found out that I had been plotted, and I didn't react at all. Yes, I grit my teeth and admit it, this is not a poisonous point, after all, I can't beat it, but it's a bit unpleasant to not even hold a grudge; and then there is the plot of Shushan behind the lower world. It's not that my friend, this Shushan is purely a negative asset. You have to worry about it. It's more comfortable to be a white man in Heaven than to be a high disciple in Shushan. In short, after solving the Huaguoshan problem, I didn't see any relief. No, buddy, I also want to read more interesting stories. Otherwise, wouldn't it be faster for me to reflect on my own life? What about the protagonist's hang-up? Help! Seriously, this is the beginning for nothing. Give me a pen and I will help you write the plot: After helping Tianpeng, the fox fakes the power of the tiger and directly joins Erlang Shen. He finds a good place to grow by cheating, recruits a few younger brothers with high potential and background, and cultivates to 37 points to become a Xuanxian. Isn't it better than entering the big pit of Huaguo Mountain? There are many conflicts if you want to write about them, but the difference is that if you enter the pit of Huaguo Mountain and don't steal the development, it won't be any better. If you go to another place and steal the development, wouldn't it be better? Also, the combat description is really bad. Not to mention how good the writing is, at least it should get away from the level of a tree-chopping pig. It is recommended that the author read more books such as "Speedway to Cultivation to Immortality" and "Gou Becomes a Talent in the First Saint Demon Sect" to learn more and learn from other people's plot arrangements.

To be honest, it's boring, the myth turns to interpersonal relationships, and it's like a fly doing a good job. Don't say that immortals are not scheming. If you really play with the old silver coins that have been scheming for hundreds of thousands of years, their cultivation level will be higher than yours. With your little experience, you are smarter than others.

If you read a novel and feel like a classmate, it's okay if you don't read this novel.

In reality, I act like a cow and a horse, but when reading novels, I still act like a cow and a horse. So, am I not reading novels in vain?

I said I was writing an official article, but it turns out that one card in Chapter 4 can offend the leader three times 😥, the protagonist twice, and the passerby once.

I can't watch this thing. I was already tired from work, but I ended up even more tired after watching this thing. It's so frustrating.

It has nothing to do with Journey to the West, but it's well written, but it's a pity that it's easy to block

I don't need to say more about the reason.

Brother, this guy is hot and smart.

As mentioned, I read your book during the live broadcast last year and it scored very high. I remember clearly that a few days ago I saw a book called Journey to the West: As soon as I ascended, I was asked to guard Huaguo Mountain and copied your idea.

What kind of monkey is that? 🥵

Maintaining stability may be better than suppressing monsters. Because Wei Wen is born with a sense of tension, just by looking at the title of the book, you can think of many plots, but Zhen Yao is limited.

The writing is very good, with a glimpse of the leopard in the tube, and the smell of a saber. Looking forward to putting it on the shelves

This is awesome. This cut and this way of writing are very interesting. I'm following it.

Where did the Bull Demon King come from in Huaguo Mountain?

This will only write the beginning? ? ? ? ?

Welcome to collect and read, another account

Come on

I have read a few excellent books recently. There are plenty of traces of human refinement of AI-assisted writing. It's a bit disgusting to watch. The author at least did it entirely by hand. Just the first dozen chapters. This is valuable in an era when war AI is rampant.

You can't be so cool, that's all Chapter 104 said

It's an Internet article that hasn't been written in recent years. After the river crab crawled over, there was finally a glimmer of light.

The first chapter is really good, I think it will cost at least 5,000, but the follow-up is hard to say. The title, introduction, and subject matter of the book are obviously Le Ziwen, but it is written as an official novel or a prehistoric novel. In my opinion, it is really a failure. If you want to be a soldier, you can't really work hard, write about intrigues, and be obsessed with the world. It's really not worthy of the introduction and the first chapter. The demolition plot that begins in Chapter 2 not only progresses slowly, but is also not interesting. It takes several chapters just to give out tasks, form a team, and how to demolish the demolition. The plot is incoherent, and it fails to let go of the hook that binds Wukong at the end of the first chapter, and it fails to live up to the readers' expectations. It might be much better if Chapter 2 takes office directly, and then the Monkey King is born and bound?

Use this idea again, change the beginning and repost it. The same is true for the science fiction book Heaven. The data is very good, but it is difficult to stick to it without subscribing.

The beginning of Wan Ding, the end of fighting on the street