Water World: the Electric Eel Cloud at the Beginning Develops into the Nine Heavens Thunder God

That's okay, hay. There is a slight tendency to engage in self-pleasure, as can be seen from the later descriptions of women, and the author may not have talked about it much. It's the same as when the male protagonist met a girl in the past.

The world view is a bit broken. One moment his face is full of darkness and the next moment he is funny and funny. The contrast between the inside and outside of the wall is not strong enough. The writing about students seems a bit awkward. The writing of Dark Wind is a bit cliched. Hurry up and start writing. Or just skip a grade and quickly enter university and graduate. Conflicts between countries, or looking for treasures and taking risks. Or just show off to the extreme. Or write bigger enemies to increase motivation. Looking at it now, the whole thing looks a bit like early apocalyptic literature. The world is coming to an end, and infighting among countries seems not to be popular anymore.

Gu Tianyi, why does his grandma's look so much like childhood?

This book has a lot of cheats, but the writing is not satisfying at all. The protagonist spends all day fighting against enemies who are several levels above him. This kind of writing can only be a suicide attempt. He only writes in a dull manner without looking up at the overall environment. It is strange that he can achieve good results.

I came to see the strange beasts, not to see you practice.

The protagonist's family's family education is really a failure. Her daughter is not well educated at home, and she has no one to stand up for when she is bullied outside. You can only imagine what kind of character she will become when she grows up.

This is too complicated, and it wipes out the little sense of pleasure. Then there is no need for any acupuncture points to exist, so why write a setting where martial arts and martial arts conflict? There is also a world view. The global rise in water is quite interesting, but haven't those small countries already turned into archipelagos? How dare they challenge the big countries?

I suggest contracting a turtle. If the world floods later, you can live on the back of the turtle.

You have to write ten chapters for a high school monthly exam, but after more than 70 chapters, the protagonist is still a little trash. If you are writing daily articles, don't design the world background to be so dangerous. Cut it off as early as possible. The positioning is not clear yet.

The setting is too unnatural, and the protagonist is a top-notch person who sacrifices his basics and pursues the end ① When you open acupuncture points through spiritual training and martial arts, you cannot increase your cultivation level, you can only use multiple moves, and you cannot upgrade after practicing martial arts. I have never seen this kind of setting ② The difficulty of practicing martial arts later is more difficult than improving your cultivation level.

The author has written confusingly. Qin Fen only had eleven meridians when he took the college entrance examination. Later, he was in the middle of the third level when he first entered college. A year later, he was in the middle of the fourth level. He was almost the same as the protagonist. The protagonist was only in the middle of the second level when he entered school.

In a word, if you have parents, brothers and sisters, you don't have to read it. After all, 9 of the 10 authors are not good at writing, and one is extremely weak, water in water.

The most important reason why this type of writing is not long is that the earth is too small, and its power quickly swells to make it impossible to write.

I'll wipe it. You can hit a nuclear bomb after reading the introduction 😰 If you peel it off, won't there be inner wall materials for controllable nuclear fusion? 🙂🙂🙂 The Age of Endless Energy

Haven't you considered sharks and whales? ? ? Are there any special animals similar to lighthouse jellyfish that should not be considered? ? ? Starting from Xiaoyu, it is really convenient to write routines! ! But who would be willing to launch a counterattack if they could start from a strong position? If you could choose when you were born, would you rather choose to be tall, rich and handsome, or would you rather be an ordinary person and work hard! ! !

It's so miserable. I sympathize with the author. Don't suck. You're the only one who advertised.

I feel that the main problem is confusion between exercises and techniques, and artificial separation of acupoints and meridians!

The setting is okay, but the various stories are not good-looking and boring. The old-fashioned storyline from more than ten years ago is suitable for the author to be a skill planner, not for writing novels.

To be honest, the writing is not good and some of the small plots are so awkward that I gave me goosebumps.

Lou Jinyun

The monthly tickets are all gone, I will keep them for you in the future

Back, updated Come on, come on, you are the most receptive author I have ever seen.

Is it serious that the 100-meter megalodon bit the aircraft carrier in the introduction?

Half-dead, I stopped subscribing for a long time because I was afraid that the author would go to the palace to serve the emperor.

8 Monthly passes, 9 recommended! You know!

The pace is too slow, it's still a beginner's chapter after dozens of chapters

The pace is slow, and the overall world layout is superficial. It belongs to the author to write whatever he thinks of. The protagonist is also like an NPC, and there is basically no fighting plot. It is either embarrassing or funny. The title of this book should be called The Fish Farmer's Experiences

I gave you six more monthly votes. You must not be a eunuch anymore.

What about the author? There are no more books to update. Did you encounter some major changes?

It's okay to open both books, but don't stop updating old books.