From Goblin Labor to the Magical Industrial Revolution

The pace of your story is slow, and there is no clear main line. The protagonist's motivations for doing things are often insufficient, which leads to some inexplicable plots. For example, Owlbear appeared at the beginning and joined the protagonist's camp. She was obviously an important role or an important combat force, but she did not participate in the next dozens of chapters. Instead, she wrote a lot of help to find food and buy sheep. Then why did you let this character appear? If she does not participate in the adventures of the protagonist group and does not play an important role, then why should you pay the price to feed her. Moreover, it was mentioned right after the appearance that she had an important plot "looking for her brother", but it was not mentioned for a long time later. Either write her as an NPC who gives out tasks and leave when she encounters the protagonist giving out tasks, or let her participate in the protagonist's adventure. Now, if she is in the protagonist camp and does not participate in the adventure, then this role will only have negative effects. The protagonist group spends so much energy to help her find food and will not see any positive benefits in the short term. This kind of plot will make the book seem draggy, with no positive emotional feedback and no growth of the protagonist. In any novel, the protagonist must gain something after completing something. The protagonist can be bad or holy, but he must not do things slowly and aimlessly.

Starting from the tax officer, the plot is very slow. The arrogant tax officer and the quarrel with the security officer are really boring.

It is a traditional Western fantasy novel, that is, the world of medieval productivity, swords and magic. There are super powerful mages but they are rare Very rigorous. From taxation to currency to food to maps to plans, inferences are based on evidence Effective communication. There is an idealistic romance and a sense of epicness because the story will be regarded as a legend or poetry. He also did some good things Take my favorite plot as an example The following involves spoilers: The confrontation between the high elf mage and Tahoe, from transaction to punishment. The collision of the concepts of long-lived species and short-lived species is well displayed I have always thought that the long-lived species in the Western fantasy world is an interesting idea. Their long lifespan makes it difficult for them to be interested in everything. They are born pessimists. Even a nihilist Given that only one elf appeared at the end of 100, the transaction was initiated easily. Maybe he was sure to win. Maybe he won or lost. His indifference to life is not only for other species, but also for himself It is very delicious to be angered by the attitude of indifference to life In this plot, the attitude of elves towards responsibility is also very interesting. Responsibility is punishment, which can give a glimpse of the shadow of elf society The creation of short-lived species is very distinctive. This is a fantasy world with racial conflicts. There is prejudice and discrimination, but there are also common interests and the pursuit of a better life Jiejiejiejiejie This feeling of having to fight together is so wonderful Finally, it is an epic feeling. It is a spectacle - the mountain through train, the flow of people from different areas, potatoes, small progress, etc. Their efforts will not be in vain, at least they survived this winter safely

This crappy title always makes me think that the Celestial Silkworm Potatoes are traveling across the Seven Kingdoms...

I live in Bengbu. I have read Chapter 41 so far, and the protagonist has been threatened by others.

One chapter, weird names and titles, I have no interest in reading further.

There are too many characters appearing right from the beginning.

It is well written. It is a traditional Western fantasy novel. The protagonist and supporting characters have their own strengths. The story is also very interesting. The most important thing is that the protagonist has the brilliance of humanity. It is a very good novel. I will give you the monthly pass.

It's a little white text. The new author doesn't have enough writing skills and it's a bit confusing. I suggest you read more and imitate writing books.

While others are hoarding guns and you are growing food, you are just a granary.

Is there something seriously wrong with your book? . . . At least what the protagonist is doing at the beginning is advancing the plot, but what about the plot after the elf mage comes out? ? ?

It seems that the title of the book focuses on farming now, but in retrospect after reading the latest chapter, the farming part is very small and there are no details. It rarely reflects the role of the protagonist in research and improvement, but only plays the role of the protagonist borrowing power in the game. Just like the introduction, there is more intrigue, that is, the game between all parties in order to survive in the cracks, but the demands of each party and the change of mentality under the protagonist's words are somewhat lacking in sufficient writing. Even so, some people still feel that some of the quibbling chapters are too many for several chapters. It feels like they are not written enough to grab people's attention, so they are not interested in the content that has been written with great effort. In terms of technological development, Chapter 124 has only shown a little bit, and the manifestations of the industrial revolution have been delayed. In this way, when the situation in the town is slightly stable, the protagonist has more control, there are people to invest in development, and the results are seen, there will be more chapters. Of course, the narrative adjustment and plot development are still relatively clear. Compared with most If the author can persevere, he will probably be able to slowly develop a good work in the future.

God-man villagers and God-man bureaucrats. Respecting mages but not respecting alchemists is also a god. How could you write such a damn thing?

It can be seen that the author is still relatively immature. The main line is a bit off. In other words, his outline is not detailed. And there are some deviations from modern people's tastes. Maybe my wild boars can't eat fine bran. But generally speaking, these are the only fantasy novels that are being updated now, so I will support it with 6 monthly votes.

The names are so messed up that I have no desire to read them.

It's a good book, and I'll give it to you with your monthly pass, so stick to it. As a dnd story, it has that flavor. Asking for refinement

The tonic is gone😭Where can I look for the wooden cabinet and grapefruit kitchen😭

Not bad, not bad, very interestinghead

Come on, keep it up, it looks great

The difference in combat power in the early stage was too great. The unarmored militiamen on the protagonist's side were unable to fight against the fully armored knights. They were directly crushed. It was not surprising that they collapsed. The protagonist also put three big daddies on the territory. If you don't treat this as a battlefield, there will be ghosts. Development is unnecessary, unless the author is a deus ex machina.

No, why did you just cut it? I haven't started watching it yet! ! !