Traveling as a Doctor and Cultivating Immortality, I Can Live Forever by Suffering from All Kinds of Diseases

The plot and setting are very novel. It is not a very traditional vulgar plot, but sometimes there are always inexplicable descriptions of emotional lines, which makes people frown and makes it difficult to watch. If you don't mind the description of emotional lines, I highly recommend watching it.

First, you need to practice the disease to gain supernatural powers. This is actually nothing, but it is a bit disgusting. Second, I rescued a woman and then became a nanny. The most important thing is that this woman hated his unborn brother, so she gave her brother to his uncle, who deceived his brother to death and almost cooked him. This kind of person has to be kept by her side, acting like a nanny. The protagonist is really hungry.

If you can't write about feelings well, don't write about women and feelings. It's useless for you to have Zhu Qingdong by your side now. Keeping such a burdensome and unkind woman by your side is of no use to your main plot.

This side effect is a bit serious. What's the point? Absorbing other people's illnesses and turning yourself into a patient, waste, this golden finger

Emm, harem novel. It would be nice if the plot could focus on the growth line of the protagonist who can simply cure illnesses and save people and become an immortal, instead of always writing vulgar emotional dramas related to female characters. The author may be good at writing, because I was really disgusted by the plots related to these female characters. The thing that disgusts me the most is that if Lin wants to take advantage of others, isn't that just a delusion? No matter whether a man or a woman does this kind of thing, it is absolutely disgusting, even if it fails. Then, the emotional line between Qiaodong and the male protagonist is also quite awkward, and it always feels awkward. The male protagonist is the heartthrob Jack Su. After reading this, these are my thoughts. 🙂 I hope the author will focus on improving the protagonist's medical skills, treating diseases and saving people. The plot of always saving a woman and then falling in love with it will make people tired. Overall, this is still a novel that can be read to the end. Come on 👍

After practicing Qi Twelve and Building Foundation, I thought I had found something good. As a result, changing the soup does not change the medicine!

From Zhihu, since you are asking for a rating for why this book failed, let me give you a suggestion (but it is already 450,000 words, so I am afraid it will be difficult to change): There are no other problems, and the overall tone is very clear, but the protagonist cannot follow this tone. In the first two pages, there is too little description of the male protagonist's inner activities, causing readers to be depressed throughout the whole process. Internet writing needs to suppress desire first. There is external suppression, but the upward part is never seen. The audience is too small. You must first know that web articles require readers to take on the role of the protagonist, and readers are here to experience happiness. They are here to take the role of the protagonist and experience happiness. Do you think your protagonist is happy? Can it bring people positive, hopeful, or expectant emotions? No, because you lack the portrayal of the protagonist's heart. Although you have solved the crises and conflicts one after another, there are no emotional ups and downs. Pay attention to the ups and downs. You conveyed the emotions, depression, depression, still depression, heavy, heavy, still heavy, but there are no or very few emotional ups and downs! The novel story is divided into passive scenes and active scenes. The passive scenes are simply summarized as reactions, dilemmas, and choices, while the active scenes are goals, conflicts, and frustrations. Under normal circumstances, a plot includes at least one active scene and one passive scene. Specifically, it is passive scene + active scene + passive scene + active... Until the end of the plot, for example: The protagonist's reaction when encountering an emergency, constantly trying to break the situation in the face of difficulties (there were several turns during the period but always failed), and then after thinking or finding a pattern to do it Making a key choice, this is a complete passive scene... Then it is connected to the active scene: after making the choice, the protagonist has a specific goal, and in the process of achieving the goal, a conflict occurs when the villain hinders the goal. The protagonist is temporarily frustrated (failed) due to lack of ability. This is a complete active scene, and this is alternately connected until the protagonist achieves the goal or solves the unexpected situation. But your stories (at least the first three chapters) are almost all passive scenes, and after resolving the dilemma or conflict, the readers are not allowed to see the improvement of the overall situation, or the trend of improvement - It is just one conflict after another. Even if you write that your abilities are improving, you still have to write about what the improved abilities will bring. What use does it have for you, others, and for changing this troubled world? Even if it doesn't have much effect now, at least there will be a day when you can see hope. This is a very important sense of excitement and expectation. As a result, you don't have it. After you upgrade, you move on to the next plot. It's so repetitive and so depressing. Which cool reader is willing to read it? You should remember one thing, the most exciting part of online novels is the change: the change of the characters, the change of the relationship between the characters, the change of the environment of the characters, and these changes are caused by the protagonist, and those who are close to the protagonist are getting better, and those who are hostile to the protagonist are getting worse. Remember, you must get better! And your changes are so slow that each chapter is almost invisible. Final suggestion: Write more about things that will get better, even if it's just a trend and paint a big pie... That's also a sense of expectation!

The writing is quite good, but it made me feel a little physically uncomfortable after reading it. I will give you a monthly pass. See you again when I have the chance.

Coming from Zhihu, it feels a bit like Taogui. Although it is painful and depressing, after all, readers, if you persist and write well, maybe you can actually make it 😁

Refining diseases, turning them into your own use, and going to the Ministry of Plague. You can also imitate the enemy of Hell in the Eight Tribes of Heaven and Dragon. Treating diseases does not cost money, but requires other people's unique skills.

I came here because of Zhihu's reputation. The writing is really good. I voted four recommendation votes to show my respect.

I don't understand why the main character suddenly has Tian Linggen. Is this going to be a genius? I feel that Golden Finger is more suitable for development in the mortal world.

The protagonist's Taoist heart has not yet been fully established, and he will inevitably endure hardships in the future. Maybe a plot can be devised where the magical power fails, so that the protagonist can truly return to the world as an ordinary person and heal the world.

I feel like I have talent, and the subject matter is relatively rare. Although it's hard, I think there are so many people writing about crazy people, and the reader's acceptance is also getting higher. If I can stick with Qing He Yu Zhen for a few years, I feel it still has great potential.

I remember Albert, the Ten Shadow King in Monster Master. His Monster Blade also has this ability, absorbing damage and then inverting it.

The logic of practice is very well written. The disease contacts the meridians through the physical body and then the practice. It is very interesting 👍 I hope that the core point of [epidemic] will not be abandoned in the future.

By the way, write less about women, it's weird to write about women in this subject

It's well written, well written, it has potential, don't be disturbed, there are bound to be negative reviews.

This reminds me of the Plague Immortal written by the old man from Montenegro, but it's a pity it's too short.

It feels ok so far, I look forward to the future and hurry up for updates.

The author's writing skills are quite good, I'm looking forward to the next one

Is it a short story? It has a very innovative theme.