Journey of Sword and Wine

It's fine that Goldfinger is extremely against the sky, but the writing is not exciting, the wits and battles are so-so, the emotional background story cannot be written at all, and the battles are basically just flying bricks, so why not further educate yourself? In the previous games of Chosen Gods, the dialogue between the gods was out of place in the dnd background. It was purely abstract and had no characteristics. It used dnd numerical spells and monsters, and the battle was still the same as that of Western fantasy, where you slash and throw spells to hit people. The relationship between the elf siblings is too superficial and poorly written. Dragon Bone Port could have been slowed down and dug into a large dungeon, but written like this, I can't understand the ambition and emotional struggle of the Eight-clawed Leader at all. The so-called city lord, shadow shuttle and even card repair are all needed by the plot, and readers can't understand any deeper things. I told you a kind of background story. This feeling makes me cry, it is very fragmented! The communication between gods and mortals is too common. It doesn't matter if there is no force, the pattern has not been opened, and the layout is not far-reaching. The quasi-gods and ancient gods we have seen so far are not as awesome as the illithids, and the gods are too cheap! So far, it is a failing work!

Wait, doesn't the troll regenerate quickly? Isn't it impossible to completely curb its regeneration except with fire and strong acid?

The social aspects of the DND background can be more carefully studied. The content of the story itself has that flavor! It is recommended that the paragraphs be more detailed. There are two lines of text on the computer version, but it is easy to rush to five or six lines on the mobile phone version. We are both writing dnd stories and hope we can go on together!

No, defeating the troll will directly encourage you to add 10 points of charm points? The charm value of the main body is only 11 points, right? Don't follow the pseudo-DND western fantasy that no one cares about and just kill monsters to reward divinity points.

Especially when the game is set very high, you can level up by killing monsters, but you feel aggrieved all the time. You are either being threatened or being chased. Everyone's emotions are very sudden, and there is no improvement. I think that except for killing monsters, the protagonist's other things are not upgraded. All skills are upgraded as the level increases. Many things are involved inexplicably.

There are very few children who follow up on reading. The purpose of following up reading is to stay on the last chapter for 30 seconds. Don't keep books, you big guys 😭😭

The genre is good, and the writing is good, but it does have fatal problems. The first point is that the pace is too fast, or too strange. It is not slow where it should be slow, and not so fast where it should be fast. Especially the first few pictures gave me the feeling that I ran out of prison in two or three days to fight goblins and then joined the adventure group. The next day is the creation of the protagonist, especially the relationship between the gods and the protagonist. It looks very awkward. A god who has lived for countless years will be easily manipulated by the protagonist.... We can directly write about this god. It is actually very good. Isn't it more logical? The third point is updating. To be honest, as a new author, you have no inherent readers. You have to rely on updating, but your updating is indeed too slow. If the author does not intend to give up, read the next book or continue writing (it is not recommended to continue writing, because you have given up) The next book must have a good rhythm. It can be fast where it should be fast, and it must be slow where it should be slow. It does not mean that pushing the main line quickly will bring a sense of slowness to the readers. As long as you write well, someone will read it, especially in the early stage. Then keep updating, and make him have the desire to chase. Don't update one chapter in a day or a few days, otherwise people will only support you, and they will support you to death. Then the logic must be normal, and don't let everyone look at unhappy ideas. For example, the relationship between the gods and the protagonist, so many people argue and don't change it. This kind of big controversy will definitely cause the decline of fans, so be sure to pay attention

I deeply remember the sword and wine. Looking forward to the author's next work.

I really can't stand it when I see the good news and bad news in the introduction.

The author can refer to PF. PF's career is fun, but dnd is meaningless without expansion.

Did the gods and the like come out too early, and the upgrade is slow? But the writing style is good, but the rhythm is messed up.

The protagonist doesn't even understand the basic situation of this world, so he starts running rampant 😥

It is still difficult to draw pictures with AI, and the gray pupils cannot escape. This picture is more in line with my idea of ​​Alwin 😭

I have never understood the protagonist's inexplicable feelings for his temporary teammates. From my perspective, they just met and teamed up suddenly, and then went on two adventures, and then the protagonist actually had deep feelings for them. You can just say that he misses the things before time travel, and the change in personality is very sudden. A modern person suddenly lives a life of precarity, and he still misses this life. I really can't understand it.

If you like being a picky person, you can take a look. You can see it in the first 30 pictures. The supporting role in it. After 25 pictures it was disgusting.

Other problems are not big, but the pace is too fast, the time for everything to happen is too short, and it feels like a drama

I am several years older than you, so I take the liberty of calling you brother. What I want to say is the title. Don't give up! ! Brother! The stories you write, no matter how deep the feelings are, once you put them down, it will be very difficult to pick them up again. I read my brother's suspension notice and know that you are under a lot of pressure from your studies recently. I can't blindly advise you and only add pressure to you. After all, if there is too much pressure, people will collapse. But there are so many authors writing novels now. It is not easy to sign contracts and achieve some results. It is much more difficult than ten years ago~ If writing novels is just a spur of the moment, then it is okay to give up. If you want to continue writing in the future, then I suggest writing this book intermittently is better than giving up, really. Even if you update every two or three days, or even every four or five days, and more during the winter and summer vacations, your writing style will improve in the long run, and your control over structure, layout, and character will be enhanced. It is normal to have criticism nowadays. Feedback from book friends is a great motivation and reference for our progress. We should use book friends as a mirror~ If we didn't read the story carefully, who would waste time typing and posting to criticize the plot? Criticism is also a kind of love. (Except for negative comments that are purely to vent your emotions.) Moreover, there are so many book friends who encourage and praise you~ - I understand the truth that talking too much will lead to mistakes because you are only a few years older. So I wanted to send you a message yesterday, but I held back. But I couldn't hold it back today 😓 Look, book friends are posting posts saying they can't bear to leave you as a "eunuch". Maybe you feel very guilty now, sorry for your book friends, and suspect that your writing is too bad. Don't forget, although book lovers are picky, they are also tolerant~ Most of them are very lovely people. Just because they like it, book friends are not afraid of trouble to vote, encourage, and even reward! So, brother, if you really like writing novels and your schoolwork is not too tiring, you can update it slowly~ When I was young, I gave up a story with particularly good grades due to physical and psychological pressure. I was ashamed of the attention of many book friends. Every time I think about it, I regret it like jealousy. Seeing your update suspension notice seems like something from the past, so I took the liberty to advise. Sorry to bother you. - Everything should be based on your own situation, don't be too tired, your body comes first~ Everything should be done from the perspective of yourself and your family, don't be too stressed. I wish you success in your studies and happiness~

Please leave your comments. I hope to hear your thoughts so that we can better create works that everyone likes 😭😭😭

Come on, I look forward to your remake

Look at the author's homepage, there is a new book, a reprint of this one.

Warm up, the remake of Sword and Wine is coming soon! The internal investment has passed, and a single chapter will be released at that time to make it more popular! 🙂

To be honest, I don't care about numerical settings at all, it's so hard to find a fantasy novel these days. Of course the plot is a little too fast, but it's good to watch.

I hope to see a much better work from the author next time. Come on 🙂

It's okay, novices can't write their first book well.

Thank you to all those who have been following me for a long time. Today I am finally on the second round 😭 At the same time, I would also like to reply to the fast-paced problems reported by many readers. First of all, thank you for your willingness to point out problems to me. In fact, the main reason for this is because the author is a bad guy, and it is difficult to slow down the pace and look sloppy 😭. But I will definitely try to slow down the pace to give everyone a better reading experience. I hope everyone can continue to support us. 🙂

Don't break up, form a lifelong adventure group 😭😭😭😭😭