Supreme Destiny

Bite the bullet and read part of your first and second chapters I can only say that it is inevitable that I will not sign up I am also a loyal user of Qidian, and I have voted for many chapters in this monthly ticket It can be seen that the author really wants to eat this bowl of rice Then I will be more vicious 1. The description is redundant and I have no desire to read. An old man in the book review area said it very well, you are writing a novel, not an essay. The first chapter is very uncomfortable to read. It writes about cows, scenery, other animals, scenery, and the protagonist's shock at the scenery. Finally, the first sentence of the book appears, "Have I come to the world of immortality?" 🤤🤤🤤🤤 Why are everyone imitating Dou Po Cang's "Strength of Dou, Stage 3!"? , Because such a sentence can make readers want to read! (What is the power of fighting?) (Is the third paragraph high or low?) (What does this represent?) This allows people to continue reading! The first 200 words of your chapter are all about scenery, cows, and flying sky. By the time the protagonist is shocked, the day lilies have become cold. My suggestion is to do more research. This aspect is very important. If the story is not good, well, I wish you good luck 😠 2. The title, introduction, and title of the book are all problems. Brother, you are a newcomer. The first thing you have to do is not to come up with a lofty "book title" like a great writer, but to show your highlights! ! ! Is there any problem with a title like "The Supreme Destiny"? I can't tell, but I know the problem lies with the author! ! If it were a great author like "Zhai Zhu", "Go Away", and "Xingchen LL", then I would think this is completely correct. But given this name by a newcomer, do you think a casual reader would want to click in and take a look? Let's talk about the introduction, can it show the highlights? (Decisive Killing + Harem + Invincible Style) Write something like this! , Don't think it is vulgar! Many authors rely on this label to attract people. Also, don't make the introduction content so "masterpiece"-y, as they have a readership base! Make it fun! Have fun! It makes people feel like there is life in it, I want to take a look! Let's talk about the title of the first chapter, the disaster of death, where is the disaster? They are all descriptions of scenery, and the second half is even more of a disaster. The protagonist just lets go of his inner monologue and then travels through time in a messy way. Okay, the first chapter is over. What's wrong? ? ? Now I feel better writing a short paragraph than that fatal disaster! ———————— Chapter 1 The Temptation of Black Lions "My toothbrush is so black!" In the distance, a group of black lions on the plain are running towards Bai Yunxian. Bai Yunxian ran away. A second ago he was playing a game, but a tingling sensation made him travel through time? ? He looked at the surrounding environment. Fifty-meter-high slender trees, stones flying in the sky, the squirming grassland... Bai Yunxian ran quickly with his legs: "Ah, ah, oh, what the hell!" Ding~, ding~, ding~ Suddenly, a crisp ringing sound spread throughout the grassland. … ———————— Not to mention how well written it is, at least it's on point! How many words did I use? I'm not even the author! 3. The big problem with the basic story of the novel The above is cool, but here I will be gentler. The most important thing in a novel is the storyline. It can be devoid of writing and the characters are abstract, but it cannot be devoid of story. I went back and read the second chapter, and it turned into fantasy again... Well, doesn't this mean that all the scenery and shock in the first chapter are useless? You can even directly summarize the content of the first chapter in one sentence, and turn the second chapter into the first chapter. These three (conflict, dialogue, characters) need to be grasped again. I don't want to go back and search for your conflicts now... ———————————————————————— Although I have been thinking of ways to suggest that you reopen, there is still a glimmer of hope. I hope you can change it and settle down. Maybe a great writer will be born in the future? At the starting point, more people would read a typical work if it had 300,000 words. People like me who are willing to pay for a monthly vote will not read a book with less than a million words, because I will finish reading it in a while. This is the online literature market. It is cruel and realistic. If you want to be popular, you can either write impressive knives and favorite characters and become famous in one battle like "Xuan Jian Xian Clan"; If you can read everything I said above, then I really think you can give this bowl of rice a try, and then, come on, I hope I can order it all for you one day in the future. (As a side note, editors are actually very good readers of history. If the editor can't eat it, then the readers will be even less able to eat it) April 28, 2025

Brother, you are writing a novel, not an essay.

Brother, listen to me. Go to Douyin and search Qidian Editor to see what the editor wants.

Buy a cheap DJI, take some pictures of Dragon Palace, massage and wash your hair, have a meal for the disabled, have a girlfriend for a day, upload it to Douyin, or YouTube, it is much better than writing a novel 😁

Copy books. You must have read a lot of good books. Copy the ones you think you like best. Just change the name, location, exercises, gender, etc. Don't be afraid of what others will say. Just make money. Another thing is that there must be a main line, whether seeking immortality or something, this should run through the whole, and the branch lines should also revolve around this, so that people don't feel that they don't know what the protagonist is doing.

No one can succeed casually. Come on, keep at it. Even if you don't gain money, you will gain experience.

Are you Chinese? Why are you in Vietnam?

Coming from other book review sections, your word count is too few.

In the introduction, write out the golden fingers, or describe the world view, cut out the complex content and simplify it, and write it in vernacular.

There's something wrong with your introduction. Don't you think it's strange that Bai Yunxian came to this world by chance? People who read it were confused.

After reading the first two chapters, let me share my personal feelings ① There are too many scenes, and you are in a fantasy world, not an animal world. The writing was too sloppy at first. Go watch "Shading the Sky" where Ye Fan has just arrived in the ancient forbidden land. Although it has been a long time, I still remember that the author wrote a scene in which a condor takes away a giant elephant. The protagonist should be more mature and write more about the process of exploration ③ New authors should not have cnm, damn these words, and don't complain too much. You can see that there are many great masters writing books on Qidian. There are basically no such things ④ If the first three chapters cannot attract readers, most readers will just leave. You can think about it again

Dear bosses, the contract signing has not been approved, can you comment on the content of the book? What exactly is the problem? Thank you very much.

I suggest you copy one first and get used to it. I don't like the introduction.

Does the author usually read novels? Logically speaking, if he reads them often, even if he can't write them, he can still tell that there are problems with his writings.

This introduction is really pointless. Highlighted content, you may want to take a look if you are interested.

If you really work hard and try your best, I hope the result won't be too bad. 😎😎😎

We are destined to meet each other, so I'll give you a consolation vote.

After looking at it twice, it feels like writing an essay 😅

Author, were you kidnapped by the Vietnamese?

I already lost interest after reading the introduction.

We are waiting patiently for the author's works to be available on the shelves as soon as possible. Namo Amitabha 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

Author, if you were kidnapped, let the Vietnamese lock you in a dark room

I also give you three consolation votes, come on, I have also tried to write a book 🙂, I have to bite the bullet and write the first book, even if I am a eunuch in the end, I will write as much as possible, come on, come on

The introduction and title of the book don't make any sense, and you're not a master 🤭

Too little, I don't want to see it. . . . I'll probably only read it if it's 200,000-300,000 words.

The heartbreak can be endured again and again, my heart is trembling with tears and my heart is trembling. There are many wrinkles under the skin, I have worked so hard and have no regrets. I sincerely hope that this humble poem can encourage the author of this book, what he says is auspicious, and what he does is perfect. Namo Amitabha 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

Hi! Hello, The author is great. I still hope that one day, your works will prosper. Waiting patiently. Namo Amitabha 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻

After reading some of them, I feel that the writing is very good. If there is a good plot, it should be popular.

Dear friends, the reading volume of new books is very important. Don't keep books. Thank you very much 🙏