On the Self-Cultivation of an Evil God Doll

I feel like the doll might as well be changed to a genderless one, with a male body and female appearance, without any genitals, similar to the Christian asexual angels from abroad (the final form can be traced back to the multi-eyed angel type). It just becomes a female doll, and the layout is still too small.

Emmmmm First of all, let me say that I haven't read many transformation stories. From the perspective of ordinary online stories, the setting at the beginning is too much, or to put it bluntly, it is not interesting. The title and introduction are quite attractive. I flipped through the new books in the library and clicked in as it seemed very interesting. Then let me tell you a little bit about my own opinions. If the author doesn't like it, just delete it. I feel that the identity and background of the protagonist has been mentioned quite a lot in the introduction. The first three chapters of the game take up a lot of space (for example, I basically skipped while reading that section). Then there is the section about belief in gods, which feels dry. Since the protagonist saw what the priest did, why not use those things as the beginning? The priest is halfway through doing bad things, and the protagonist jumps out, guesses his beliefs, and then talks about the differences between gods. It feels like it can be written more exciting... If the author doesn't like it, just think of it as the sleep talk of a late-night emo person...

The transformation of the protagonist into a defeated person is too abrupt and will send a lot of people away.

After thinking for a while, I suddenly realized☝🏻️ This is the mysterious fanfic of the mysterious waiter!

Just write randomly and take it for granted🙂🙂🙂

Does the protagonist have a raised mouth? Keep writing that the corners of the mouth are raised.

Brothers, where are you doing this? Is this a female video? Is the author a girl?

It can be seen that at present, the main attraction is the setting. One of the author's mistakes was that when facing the reformer, he wanted to make the protagonist grow by learning through hardships, but it was too blunt, and the subsequent reflection was also sudden. By the way, since others think the protagonist is a faceless person, why is there any need to pretend to be a superior person? The ever-changing attributes can be completely understood as the current character settings are like this. Isn't the possibility that a mortal can change the character and behavior of a god much lower than that of a god himself changing at will?

1. The appearance of some plot/character emotions and behaviors cannot be said to be completely unreasonable, but there are indeed some unreasonable places and they are too hasty. For example, I forgot the name of the little noble, it seems to be Isabella. She said in one chapter that she treats the protagonist as a mother. I think it's not very reasonable. First of all, it's this emotion. It can be seen that this lady's character is not innocent. It was extremely mysterious to face an apostle of an alien god, but he had the basis to help her heal her legs. If she had positive emotions first, it would not be directly like the feeling of treating the protagonist as a mother in more than seventy chapters. It might be gratitude, and combined with her identity, she might also have awe and suspicion. If you want to write a character like a daughter, it is better for the protagonist to treat her as a daughter than for her to treat the protagonist as a mother. She continued to act, slowly adding emotions. But even if the story is slowly laid out, it is absolutely impossible (on a normal basis) to regard the protagonist as a mother-like existence, and to love and respect her as an elder. This is emotion or character. At the same time, what I said is that there is too little foreshadowing and it is too hasty. 2 Setting problem: Regarding the currently known setting of this book, I don't know if it is my misunderstanding. I also saw the Book of Blood, the Lord of Mysteries, and maybe a little bit of the Original God? Of course, I don't mean that you copied it, but that I have a strong sense of déjà vu, because I have dabbled in these things, and if I complain about my personal experience, it's just like I'm farting. This is serious talk: First of all, I can't say it's cliche, the real moon thing is, that is to say, um... Rotten. Although you may be trying your best to integrate it into your own settings and wash away its original settings. But this is a purely personal opinion. We are all human beings, and the scope of our thinking is not much different, especially now that the author is also a reader, and his thinking is not very different from that of ordinary readers. Even if the first thing that comes to mind is different due to different experiences, (for example, if I set up a setting here and say that there is a family called Alpin, if you have played the game ck3, your first reaction will be the Alba King family in 867, but after watching the third game of Lord of Mysteries, At first I thought it was Alger who changed the word. But when they thought about it later, they probably thought of both. The examples are for reference only. If you don't understand, it doesn't exist.) But after thinking about it, you only need to set a few keywords and everyone will guess the same. Secondly, it leaves the factory too fast. Various high-end settings are shipped out of the factory too quickly, and the later settings are no longer mysterious and curious. If you keep going like this, it's okay if you set up enough at the beginning, but after writing for a while, the setting is not enough, and the readers will know everything and there will be no motivation to continue reading. It is true that you can write it as a mystery novel or a pure plot, but well, you have to make sure you have such writing power first. Personal opinion: You can slowly spit out the settings one event at a time. Otherwise, your setting is too fast, unless you say that these righteous gods are all themselves, that outside the world is the crystal wall system, outside the crystal wall system is the giant universe, outside the giant universe is the World Tree, and beyond the World Tree is the entire Supreme God Realm, etc., And you have to write one or two million words in this novel. Finally, the naming issue: I think the style of the names in the novel is a bit fragmented. Some of them are like I made them up casually when I was editing the setting. It is admittedly smooth, but wouldn't it be awkward to put two countries with different naming styles like Pakistan and Romania together? Moreover, it is best to use words that have no common direct meaning in naming. For example, words such as water, shit, and dog should not be used if they have a common meaning and have a common meaning. 3 Foreshadowing question. Don't bury too many foreshadowings and dig too many pits. Don't have too little, but be moderate. I think if it were me, if I owed one dollar, I would just stop paying it back. If I owed 100 million, I would just go and pay it back. Only when I owe 1,800 yuan, I would be anxious and want to pay it back quickly. The novel is similar. There is too little foreshadowing and I'm too lazy to read it. There are too many things that make my head hurt. It's just like reading in English. I can't even put together a complete cause and effect from just a few words. The foreshadowing or pitfalls of this book that I still remember so far: 1. What does the pale emperor defeat? Questions derived from him: 1.1 What is the relationship between the Lord of Glory and him. 1.2 How did the Lord of Glory become a god. 1.3 How did this emperor die? 2 Ancient Moon God Questions derived from him: 2.1 How did he die? 2.2 What is her relationship with the God of Death? 2.3 What is her relationship with Luna? 3 Earth Mother Goddess 3.1 What is the status of the dragon in the world 3.2 What is the status of the Dragon King 3.3 What happened to the two dragon kings, and how did they die? 3.4 It's quite old for her to read novels. Why is it in the New World? 4Why did that continent sink? The three of them together have a big question that arouses suspicion: What happened in ancient times to kill this old man? 5 Why is Tang Lao Ya dripping? An apostle is so unbearable. 6 What happened to the noble lady? Is such a naughty thing like divinity a coincidence? 7 Others say there is a curse on the real moon, but the protagonist says there is no. Judging from the character of the protagonist, there shouldn't be one, so why can't normal people watch it? 8Who are the fellow time travelers? 8.1 How do you know so much about that revolutionary/mechanical thing? We all know when the protagonist arrives. What's the secret? 9 What other conspiracy does the Lancaster family have? The recovery of the small nobles is not taken seriously. 10 What's going on with the Dragon King underground in Ah What City? 11 Why did the God of War hesitate to descend to support that third-level emperor to become a god? This is what I remember. In my opinion, 1, 2, 3, and 8 can all be a big event of more than 100,000 words. Step by step, add small information and secret parts in the middle of a big event, let the protagonist reveal the secret as the storyline, and pull out the next thing at the end. Even if multiple events are closely related and the density can increase, it will not be as high-density attack as a group of black sports students falling in love with Ben. If you don't want the storyline to be too monotonous, you can also write the rest of the settings as 50,000 to 60,000 branch lines to fill in the gaps in the main line. I hope Benke's suggestions are useful. 💋💋🌹🌹💔💔❤️🌙🌙🌹🌹

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