In 1840, Taoism Came to America

The protagonist is Superman. He creates a three-meter-deep hole with one move. Bro is more powerful than Maozi's flying egg.

The practice of the Golden Light Mantra is a method that can strengthen your life. The golden light is just an offensive and defensive method brought by the strong life, and the golden light is white.

How to put it? Just looking at the title of the book, for me, I didn't want to read it. Why, it didn't match, Taoist priests and North America (it seems that the starting point also has this type, but there is no achievement) Then, I briefly read part of the first chapter, and felt that some of the words used in the dialogue were not accurate. Then, my opinion on this book: If you continue to write this book, the results will not be very good, but for the author, if you can finish it, there is a high probability that there will be progress. In addition, a supplement to the above-mentioned Taoist priests' incompatibility with North America: Of course, it can also be said to be novel, which is more attractive to a certain group of readers.

I would like to suggest that when writing about North American supernaturals, don't use the names of domestic monsters. The man at the beginning is obviously a ghoul, which is very different from vampires and domestic zombies. There is no need to be rigid. It is recommended to understand what Western monsters are being written. You can watch some Western fantasy dramas to learn more, such as Supernatural, The Original Vampire, Mayfair Witch, Teen Wolf, etc.

It is a fantasy novel with a Taoist skin. It is more reasonable to say that the protagonist is a person who has traveled through time. If you want to write about orthodox Taoism, just check the information. The golden light curse is written as a thunder method, and a 10-meter light beam appears

The article is full of cliched words and ancient sayings. This is not in line with the current reading habits of online fast food literature. Who do you think the people reading your book are? They are all here for leisure, not for archeology. If you write like this, I boldly predict that this book will be popular. The category of novels is already niche enough, and the writing method is still so niche. You are writing it for the public.

It's really boring to watch. A particularly naughty person, contradictory to himself. You are creating difficulty for the protagonist. The protagonist Cowherd is particularly awkward.

It's a novel that I can't muster the desire to read anymore.

The rhythm is too uncomfortable... In the part where you fight the vampire, it's okay to have a different tone, but the problem is that it's not smooth at all.

Can I eat beef? I don't know what to write, it's aimless, sometimes I say I'm conservative and I don't want to preach, and sometimes I'm preaching about what I really want to do. After reading so many pictures, I feel like they're just watery. Can you please stop writing this kind of novels all the time and plagiarize other people's stories? I'm just writing nonsense.

The protagonist's character is inconsistent and twisted. He doesn't want what he should, and he doesn't take what he should take. Some of them fail, and he is still timid. Really, it's okay to tie a pig's head and get on a pig.

A bunch of witticisms, interesting?

There are no big problems with the plot or writing, but the character and behavior of the protagonist need to be clearly set. After these few chapters, it feels very contradictory, both serious and independent.

You are really good at bb, one chapter is all strokes

I feel that evil cultivators or demonic cultivators are more suitable for North America.

Chapter 9: Why is the protagonist so arrogant? "Consider any means that can help you achieve immortality to be in accordance with heavenly principles." "No one can stop Jiang Shi from practicing. Except for death, which can stop Jiang Shi, not even the enshrined Yuanshi God comes out." The protagonist is too crazy! The protagonist's background is that he was raised by an experienced Taoist and studied in a Taoist college. Such thoughts should not occur at all, and it completely violates the character design. If the old Taoist priest knew that the children he raised had such thoughts, he would probably be so angry that he would clean up his family. "Any means" means including evil means. Is this still a Taoist priest? "Not even the original God", this sentence does not contain the slightest awe of the Taoist immortals. Is the protagonist still a Taoist priest? Maybe the protagonist's golden finger was given to him by the Primordial God and asked him to preach. However, the idea of ​​the protagonist, even if the original God turns the protagonist into ashes with a backhand, I think it is very normal.

I have a huge amount of e-books, including American folklore, Chinese folklore, American history, weapons, military, martial arts, and Taoism. If there is a group, I will pass it on to the group, which saves the author from having to find the information himself.