Wrong System, Pretending to Be an Immortal in the City

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The progress of cultivating immortals is a bit slow. I hope it can be faster. At least I have some sword skills and can take some videos showing myself to be a saint in front of people.

The author is currently in kindergarten, but has no choice but to awaken to the literary system 30 years later. In order to become a top student, he stepped on the milk dragon and punched the small robot, and was finally forced to perform as an artist and write books. But the reward system is too sloppy, and all the classics given have been published by seniors. My ability is limited and I cannot cut out a copy of "Listening to the Fireworks at the Red Dust Inn Outside Qingming Mountain at Night", so I can only translate it manually... Regarding the widely circulated comments about middle school students writing books in the comment area, I would like to declare that they are pure fiction! [This author clearly has not graduated from elementary school...] [Don't praise me, I really think I am at the middle school level~]

It's so cliche. The embarrassment of pretending to be slapped in the face in the garbage dump to make the Return of the Dragon King still hasn't dissipated, and soon another 18-year-old girl comes to live with her from the sky.

The intention is good, but the writing is too flashy. After reading more than ten chapters, I couldn't stand it anymore.

I feel like I just write whatever comes to mind, the main plot is not prominent enough, the copy is mediocre, and it feels too tiring to read.

After reading a few chapters, I can conclude that it was not written by AI. AI is not that abstract. It can be seen that AI cannot completely replace humans 😅

I saw the latest chapter, what can I say, it's actually pretty good and the setting is very novel. But I'm thinking about whether this is an urban novel or a fairy tale? It is not impossible to say that it is impossible to cultivate immortality in the city, but the main character's skills have always been emphasized in the front, and the setting is not like a pure urban cultivation novel. And the heroine also felt uncomfortable watching it. It's okay to love a heroine purely, and it's okay to have a harem or be single. However, the pure love between the two heroines has several meanings, and I feel a bit awkward to watch it anyway. There is also a protagonist who is a sword-wielding immortal cultivator. You said that there is nothing wrong with the cosplay animation, the Chinese comics are also very good, and even the fairy-tale games are also good. If you come up with the soul collapse, I really can't stand it. Plus, if you don't like this element or don't understand it, I can only say that these paragraphs are skipped and read, and silently turn off the automatic subscription.

The subject matter is good, the writing is acceptable, and the content is okay, but it is too draggy and slow, and it is always full of water, no passion, and no fun. Leave a mark so we can get together and part ways

I don't know why, but it's a good idea. If I insist on it, the whole fat guy will be bragging and spanking with the protagonist.

Has the author ever thought that by the time more than 100 chapters have passed, the protagonist will be able to overwhelm ordinary people with basic attribute points instead of relying on fairy power, and he will need to overdraw his fairy power during the competition? Is this reasonable? Also, the main character's energy and blood are already in three digits. If he doesn't rely on immortal power, I don't feel that he is any different from ordinary people.

To be honest, I have read more than 20 chapters. Regardless of the setting, it is okay. The author is like Changshu Arnold, whose left and right brains are fighting each other. So let me ask you, how do you solve the problem of the heroine's lifespan with a single fairy and two heroines? How do you give readers the confidence to keep reading? You are the only immortal but you don't choose the cultivation option. What kind of immortal are you?

It is very tiring to read, the sentence style is very messy, and the cohesion is even worse.

It would be more than half better if the brother of the protagonist is gone.

I feel like there are too many risqué words and too frequent transitions, which blur the main line of the story.

There's a lot of chirping, and I haven't gotten to the topic for a long time. It was very boring to watch.

If you don't know, I think there are two protagonists

Most of the chapter is filled with dialogue between characters, is it chatty?

It's like a primary school student's composition, full of nonsense, how about trying to make up the word count?

Which recommendations for new books can be obtained? Reading data is the only data indicator. Readers who think this book is good, please read it more during the free period (especially Monday and Tuesday), and then keep it on the shelves. The new book issue is only a dozen or two hundred thousand words, not a lot, thank you all!

I followed a game up owner. The first time he dressed up as a woman was coerced by his fans. The second, third, and countless times after that were all voluntary. Once during a live broadcast, he told the audience about how old the brothers were, and then he was sanctioned by the supervisor 🤓

This one is not very good, I think the new book is much better

So what, how much advertising money was spent! Recommended every day

The protagonist's pressure is a bit harsh! No sense of pleasure at all!

The author quickly made the protagonist make false claims come true, acquire powerful magic powers, and stir up troubles in the urban world by pretending to be cool.

It feels like there is a generation gap 🙂 It's hard to comment

I haven't watched it yet, but I'd like to ask if it's a harem stud?

Chapter 4: Vision Strikes "Golden Eyes", which is a bit too strong... Personally, I feel that the whole thing is not sexy enough, a bit greasy, and many settings are awkward... It's a little worse than "The system is very abstract, but luckily so am I", but the problem with the latter is that the plot is too dense.

So, is it going to be unfinished if it is written like this?

I have read more than 70 chapters so far. To be honest, I almost stopped reading at about 40 chapters, but it got a bit more interesting later on.