The Return of the Condor Heroes: I Learned Star Shift

The ending of each branch plot is too hasty and feels a bit anticlimactic.

If I hadn't said it out loud, the author might not have realized that although the protagonist is superb in martial arts, he doesn't have the demeanor of a top master, which is what we commonly call "powerful". Er Wu invited the protagonist to Dasheng Pass, but after pretending to shirk the protagonist, he gave up the invitation. At this time, the protagonist said in his heart, "If you invite me again, I will agree." This way of writing is actually very unpleasant. Because masters never need hero posts to enter the martial arts conference. For example, Yang Guo did not have a hero post in the original work, but he went in disguised as a disciple of the Beggar Clan. When he saw Guo Jing, he said, "My clothes are dirty, so as not to dirty Uncle Guo's clothes." This instantly established Yang Guo's aloof character and made readers fall in love with his arrogance. In this book, I propose two writing ideas for reference only. The first type is to write that the second martial artist is arrogant and thinks that the protagonist has no sect and is a nobody, so he is not worthy of getting a hero post at all. On the contrary, it arouses the protagonist's arrogance. You don't let me go, but I have to go. So how should the protagonist participate in the martial arts conference? You can refer to the three gifts Yang Guo made for Guo Xiang's birthday. The protagonist can also prepare three gifts for Guo Jing and his wife. This is a big gift, but it is actually a way of writing to increase his reputation. Of course, now that Erwu and the protagonist are friends in need and have a good relationship, this method cannot be used, so it is only for reference. Second, this has a lot to do with the fact that the protagonist, who was abbreviated by the author, practiced martial arts for three years in Yanziwu. Let me not talk about the writing ideas. Let me give you two examples. In Tianlong's original novel, Wang Yuyan said that Murong Fu's dog-beating stick skills were getting faster and faster, which was a wrong path. It can be seen that even a person like Murong Fu who has a family background will encounter martial arts obstacles by relying on self-study, and the protagonist will definitely encounter it. In Flying Fox Gaiden, Miao Renfeng pointed out that Hu Yidao's sword skills were much slower than Hu Fei's. In fact, although Xiao Wuxiang Kung Fu can imitate martial arts, you have never seen the opponent's speed. How can you imitate the speed? Therefore, when the protagonist practices martial arts alone, he will definitely encounter obstacles in martial arts, but he doesn't know it. Now, coming back to the writing method, the most taboo thing about fan fiction is to follow the plot step by step, and follow the plot without any reason. A more clever method is to set up some external events to trigger the protagonist to get involved in the original plot, and to create new ideas in the original plot. Therefore, I designed a difficulty for the protagonist with a martial arts disability. In order to get over the martial arts barrier, the protagonist wanted to go to Guo Jing and Huang Rong to solve his doubts, so he wanted to participate in the martial arts competition. It's not like what the author is writing now, just to join in the fun. I also hope Erwu invites me again, which would be a huge loss of character. Then if the protagonist wants to explain his doubts to Guo Jing, it will definitely involve advanced levels of martial arts. Even if Guo Jing magnanimously explains the advanced martial arts to you, Huang Rong will definitely be stingy and will doubt whether you are here to defraud him of martial arts, and will definitely stop him secretly. And if you want to ask for something from someone, it's best to bring some gifts. You can combine it with the first way of writing and prepare three big gifts for Guo Jing and his wife. Only after accepting the gifts can they help you . Finally, the plot of the Three Great Gifts can add some new ideas to the Dasheng Pass plot written by countless writers, and really stir up the original timeline.

I started writing a book before I even understood the martial arts novels. The Murong family's star-stirring transformation is not a great shift in the world. You need to be familiar with the powerful martial arts in the world. At least you need to have a basic understanding of deliberate targeting to be useful. The reputation is great, but it is not for rookies. Then Only someone of Murong Longcheng's level can play well. Even Murong Bo only used it when assassinating and creating panic. In real fights, Murong Bo didn't even use it. Movie and TV drama effects, in which Murong Fu fought Xiao Feng, how many moves could Xiao Feng really hold against Murong Fu? In fact, what the Murong family should really focus on training is the Shenhe Finger. That is the foundation. Dou Zhuan Xing Shift requires at least the prime of life. It requires rich experience in fighting and decades of familiarity with most of the martial arts in the world. At that time, it is really powerful to use it. Isn't a rookie playing Dou Zhuan Xing Shi just kidding? It would be better to directly shift the universe, but this also requires the support of strong internal strength. Without strong internal strength and a huge amount of martial arts secrets, it is impossible to achieve the Star Shift!

I stopped watching after seeing 28. It's too boring. I'm being held hostage all the time. The magic changes are also serious. It doesn't matter if you change anything outside the plot. You can also change things within the plot. According to your method of modification, I don't even know how the original plot happened.

Isn't the beginning well written? The interaction with Yang Guo is also very good. The two become friends and interact with each other. Later, there are plots to write about Jueqinggu, Jinlun Dharma King, Wu Jue, and Guo Jing. By the way, you can also add some plot about Tianlong. What's written next is Momojiji. How can a modern person be so stupid about things between men and women? For pure bad guys, just kill them if you can. Huo Du and his like are kept for the New Year. Sha Tongtian, Hou Ruhai and the like are kept to promote the plot. They were imprisoned for more than ten years. At first, they wanted to change their evil ways, but then they were killed by the plot. It was okay, as long as Yang Guo understood his life experience. A bunch of whining, a modern person still lets the bad guys run away every time, I can't understand

The beginning of the story is very good. Don't whitewash Li Mochou or make her the protagonist. It's impossible to change her extreme and ruthless nature.

I started skipping around Chapter 80. The author's book shouldn't be called "Learning Dou Zhuan Xing Yi", and all subsequent chapters are about practicing Xiaoyao sect martial arts. It should be called "I inherited the Xiaoyao sect and followed Murong and Dou Zhuan Xing Yi". The result is that it's all Xiaoyao sect martial arts. The text is not on topic, and there are too many miscellaneous things. A bunch of second-generation characters have no profound characteristics and are boring. I suggest you study the outline of the next book.

If you have to suppress the protagonist in terms of internal skills, even if you master the small Wuxiang Kung Fu, the protagonist will be a second-rate master at best. You still have to suppress the protagonist with eight books missing. You can't find it even after searching for dozens of chapters. It's boring.

Martial arts novels are really something from the last century and have long since faded away. I looked through the Qidian Martial Arts list and there was nothing good to read. They were all extremely boring stuff.

In the world of martial arts, if you don't learn the most complete and perfect Nine Yang Divine Skills to do internal strength, this book will really have no future.

It's so annoying to write! I can't stand it any longer. This way of writing is going to get boring sooner or later.

It's better to find a woman for the protagonist, I think Sha Gu is good

If he didn't date Little Dragon Girl, what kind of magic would Li Mochou wear?

One of the most disgusting people in Jin Yong's novels is Li Mochou. This person sounds very majestic and evil. He is nicknamed "Chilian Fairy". His persona has always been that of a domineering president. Anyone who stands in his way will die. He seems to dare to destroy the world at any time and be the enemy of the whole world. In fact this is a huge illusion. A She chased Lu Zhanyuan to the wedding, but was stopped by an old monk, who beat her up and forced her to promise not to do anything for ten years. Ten years later, she came back to kill the entire Lu family, including her ex-boyfriend's brother and his entire family, including the long-term worker, maid, and two underage children. He also said majestically: "Since I have printed nine bloody fingerprints on the wall of the Lu family, these two little girls must be killed!" Having said that, did you find anything wrong? Did Li Mochou forget something? What about the old monk who deserves to be killed the most? This thief ruined your great cause of revenge and even forced and humiliated you in public. Isn't it the so-called death of those who stand in my way? Why did they kill even the long-term workers but forget about this monk? The answer is very humorous. It turns out that this old monk is a senior monk from Tianlong Temple in Dali. Tianlong Temple has strong martial arts skills and a tough background. It is a meditation class exclusively for the Dali royal family. Li Mochou does not want to mess with it. Since I can't afford to offend him, I might as well forget about it selectively, kill only the poor and untouchables like long-term workers and maids, and continue to act like a domineering president. Jin Yong revealed a truth: all domineering presidents are selective domineering. Two If you look through the book, you will find that Li Mochou loves to do this kind of thing, bullying the weak and fearing the strong all day long. Her love rival is called "He Yuanjun", so others cannot use the character Yuan. "I once destroyed sixty-three warehouses and shipping companies on the Yuan River, just because they had this bad word on their signboards!" Even the surname He is a capital offense. She killed a passerby, Mr. He, and his family, more than 20 men, women and children, just because his surname was He. When the family was wiped out, the poor He family didn't know why they died. On weekdays, anyone who offends Li Mochou will be "immediately killed under the palm of Chi Lian Shen", which is awesome. However, if you read the book, you will know that these rules of hers only apply to warehouse owners, low-level old boxers, passers-by, children, and migrant workers. In Jiaxing, a lot of people offended her. Ke Zhen'e offended her, and Wu Sanniang offended her. They beat her with sticks and swords to prevent her from taking revenge. Li Mochou didn't kill anyone. Towards Ke Zhen E, she "just let him go today", "always be merciful" and "meaning to give in". She didn't dare to hurt Ke Zhen E even after beating him for a long time because his apprentice was Guo Jing and she couldn't afford to offend him. The same goes for Wu Sanniang. During the melee, Li Mochou only picked ordinary people to kill, and did not dare to attack Wu Sanniang. She said, "I have no holiday with Master Taohua Island and Yideng, so please leave." She can't mess with the Quanzhen Sect either. The Quanzhen brothers went to encircle and suppress Li Mochou, but Sun Buer was hit by a poisonous needle. Li Mochou also took the initiative to deliver the antidote to eliminate the misunderstanding. The Quanzhen sect all lamented that they came as soon as they came without bringing anything else. Later, Guo Fu led a group of friends to besiege Li Mochou, trying their best to deal damage. Li Mochou was afraid of his parents and did not dare to take action. She is the one who knows best when it comes to watching people eat and drink. She doesn't dare to mess with those who have a background and bullies amateurs to death. Three The people who offended Li Mochou the most were Huang Yaoshi and his family. Huang Yaoshi asked Xiao Cheng Ying to slap her in the face. It was a real slap, very crisp: "There was a loud slap, a clear and crisp slap in the face. Li Mochou had never been so humiliated in her life." Li Mochou quickly forgot about it. After that, she never mentioned a word about revenge for many years, completely forgetting this biggest shame in her life. To the weak, it is wrong to change their surname; to the strong, it is okay to smack their lips. When a weak person touches her red line, the weak person disappears; when a strong person touches her red line, the red line disappears. Li Mochou once stipulated that as long as someone mentions the name of his love rival in person, he will die or I will die. What would happen if Huang Yaoshi said "He Yuanjun" a hundred times in front of her? Who would die? I guess Li Mochou would only say that she has been having tinnitus recently and her hearing is not good, so don't make a fuss. She also complained that Master was partial to her, but she never dared to cause trouble when Master was around. When the master dies, he will immediately come back to bully his junior sister Xiao Longnu. Professionals choose soft persimmons. Four Because I had seen Jin Yong and met Li Mochou a long time ago, I have long been disenchanted with this so-called "domineering strongman". The so-called "strong man" is nothing more than less conscience and more shamelessness. He is nothing more than being very solemn and playing background music when trampling on the weak. Their essence is to transfer all insults to the weak by the strong and retaliate against the weak; they are just ordinary killers and common people's hammers, posing as if they are detonating Huashan, beating the weak, and grabbing the easy ones to bully them to death. Even if anyone makes me unhappy, I will beat my wife, children and apprentices, such as bullying Hong Lingbo and Lu Wushuang. It's like not killing any of the Dongxie Sect members who bullied Li Mochou the most, but in the end he only killed his own young apprentice, Hong Lingbo. The most ironic plot is that Li Mochou claims not to be offended, and anyone who looks at her one more time will die. As a result, Feng Mofeng, an abandoned disciple of Huang Yaoshi, got into a fight with her, burned all her clothes, and died in the street. It stands to reason that it is time to detonate Huashan on the spot and fight against the Dongxie clan. But Li Mochou just started to forget again. The enemy on the opposite side, Yang Guo, couldn't stand it anymore and threw some clothes over. Li Mochou actually nodded: Thank you. Looking at someone accidentally means death; burning all your clothes in public and giving them a piece of cloth means thank you. Then maybe some people still admire him: Mr. Li is such a domineering CEO!

I couldn't continue after Chapter 395. It was dragging and dragging, with no main line. The Boundless Sea only showed the power of water🙅🏻‍♂️

Those who write about the Divine Sculpture all learn from the Nine Yin Manual. Those who write about the Eight Parts of Heaven and Dragon all learn from the Beiming Divine Art. Those who write about Yitian only learn from the Nine Yang Divine Art. There is nothing new about it. Why can't they write about other magical arts?

The author was also an old bookworm, so he opened a book. He started to write very well, and he was also good among martial arts fans. What a pity, now I have learned bad things. He knows how to count words. He embarked on a road of no return.

The book has a strong martial arts flavor, but as I read it, I felt like it was constantly foreshadowing and had no main plot. The individual events are well written. It feels like putting pearls on the plate all the time, but without stringing them into a necklace.

I hope the heroine is Xiao Longnu. Hong Lingbo can't hold up the show

I suggest learning from Jin Yong's method of describing Wang Yuyan. In recent chapters, the protagonist competes with Yang Guo, competes with Hong Qigong, and participates in the Quanzhen Sect to fight against many villains in Huodu. Although the protagonist takes action, the author's writing style does not show that the protagonist is a person who learned to return to Shi Shui Pavilion. When Jin Yong described Murong Fu, he always wrote that he knew a lot of martial arts moves. The first move was the boxing technique of sect A, and the second move was the swordsmanship of sect B. When writing about Wang Yuyan, I always say that she can tell at a glance what other people's lessons are and what their next move will be. And she can turn defeat into victory with just a few hints. The protagonist fights by himself every time. I can't say it's not good, but I can only say it's too bad. Why can a cat and a dog fight against the protagonist? For example, when the protagonist sees two Quanzhen Taoist priests fighting against Huo Dou, he first gives some advice and points out Huo Dou's flaws, so that the two Taoist priests with low martial arts can fight to a draw with Huo Dou. At this time, Huo Du couldn't help it and cursed the protagonist. At this time, the protagonist pretends to be in front of everyone, so it looks good.

It was okay in the early stage, but why was the Sword Sect written the same as Xianxia? Founders are always the ones who kneel when they appear. Your second creation is too exaggerated and illogical!

The first part is very good, the writing style and rhythm are excellent, but coming out of the ancient tomb is a complete mess.

There was an old man in the previous chapter, but it started to get weird after more than 200 chapters. Let's not talk about Dade Temple. People watching Lan Ruo Temple are really frustrated. I feel that the protagonist's martial arts is very high, but not that high. Some plots are not that he is not a strong martial arts person. What he was able to do seemed to be done by a fledgling, who couldn't experience the feeling of having magical skills in hand and having no taboos. To deal with an unknown second- and third-rate guy, it would take seven or eight chapters, and then he would be crushed to death. I don't know what the author was thinking.

Basically, there is no bad points. Although the plot is not very attractive, the author is good at making jokes and writing characters. The writing is not strong but the author explains it clearly. You can skip to read the first dozen chapters, but it will be interesting when there are more Hong Lingbo scenes.

It only took a few days to rescue the martial arts master who was hit by Chi Lian Zhang, but it took a month for him to be poisoned by a poison not as powerful as Chi Lian Zhang? What does it mean?

The previous article was very good, but now I have started to try my best to create something original, but it is boring and I can only skip reading. It is better to open up the main story of the Divine Condor and change the world view infinitely 😰

The three views are too righteous and not suitable for people with dark psychology like me.

It's okay, the overall quality of the book is acceptable. Worth a look.

I'm really not used to the lack of updates.

It's nonsense to learn a bunch of random miscellaneous subjects here and there, but they haven't trained you to death.