I'm in Harry Potter with the Clow Card

What can I say about this book? It's useless! There is something wrong with the author's writing style, which makes this book a bit boring to read. There are several writing methods for Harry Potter-style novels. One is to follow the savior plot, but this writing method is not very popular now; the other is to jump out of the plot and drastically modify part of the plot, which is very labor-intensive; the third is to add Goldfinger, with systems, knowledge from other worlds, etc. The most important thing about this type of novel is how the power given by Goldfinger is integrated with the power system of the Harry Potter world, and then the plot is integrated. The idea of ​​this book is to add the Clow card system to collide with the Harry Potter system, and then drift around the edge of the plot, slowly develop and explore the true meaning of magic, expand the Harry Potter worldview, and thereby promote the development of the plot of the book. In the end, it does not matter whether it is the world of the gods or the simple world of Harry Potter. But now there are several areas that the author has not dealt with well, causing this book to become useless, roughly as follows: ① One of the characteristics of the description of the Harry Potter world is the exploration of magic. It is very important to sort out the power system of the original Harry Potter into a systematic and intuitive system. This part of the description must be proportionate in the book, but this book is basically a light description. It would be ridiculous to omit the understatement; just like a martial arts fan, the description of the protagonist's training is indispensable. Otherwise, there is a dry sentence about retreat, how many levels of skills have been gained, and what kind of martial arts he has practiced. There is no other superfluous sentence, which makes it difficult for people to imagine. This book made this big mistake! ② There are too few descriptions of the different world golden finger. As for the different world knowledge as a golden finger, the most important thing is to describe the difference in magical power between the two worlds. Use these differences to obtain knowledge, power, wealth, etc., And then promote the plot. This is what readers like to see. What I saw about the Clow card in this book is that it lights up the Clow card to increase the magic power, and then nothing else? ! What is the difference between the magic of Clow Cards and Harry Potter? What are the advantages of Clow cards? What's the special use of the Clow card? Not written at all. ③ The relationship between the characters is not well created. The author describes too little about the interactions between the characters in this book, and only describes them at key nodes. The daily interactions are not shaped at all, which makes it very abrupt; just like falling in love, the first description is about the first meeting, and then there is no description of the subsequent process. The second description jumps directly to the plot of the close relationship between the two. This is the problem in this book! ④ Let's not talk about the writing. This is something that I have practiced slowly over time. It is good for a novice to write like this. However, the pace of this book is too fast. It feels like the author finished it in two chapters if it takes three chapters. This is my personal opinion, no malicious intent, come on! I hope the more I write, the better!

I just finished reviewing Sakura's collection of Clow Cards and thinking about what it would be like when combined with Harry Potter, and it was recommended by the daily guide. Big data is so scary. (｡ì _ í｡)

So boring! What's the difference between it and others? Exactly the same. No difference.

This is not a novel, it is a running account. It feels straightforward, without wording or description.

I can't stand it, I can't stand it at all. Your layout is too long. Usually one or two sentences would make up a paragraph.

It's best to check it before posting. There are many errors in words and sentences.

Please check it a little before posting, there are a lot of typos

Can anyone tell me, is this Clow card from Magical Boy?