Is There No System for Cultivating Immortals? Then Rub It Yourself!

Good looking, food and grass. It's just that there are too few updates, which makes this book's performance unsatisfactory.

[First of all, the key point is that the system is hand-made]. It is not a wild system or a fishing system. It is a relatively independent system with complete functions. Other functions of the semi-finished system can be explained by the database, but how do the rewards come from? The disciple was very confused about the Qi Gathering Pill when he was given a mission. The protagonist said that he didn't have such a low-end gadget, and he didn't have the materials for it. How did he come up with this half-finished system? Assuming that this semi-finished system can create things out of thin air, then the protagonist as the system manufacturer should also know this skill after analyzing the runes of laws, so that he can install this function in the semi-finished system. Now the bug has come, and the protagonist said that he has no materials and can't make it. So how did this system get the elixir? At present, the system positioning is purely auxiliary. It is a semi-finished product that was born purely to meet the protagonist's idea of ​​​​traveling and matching the system. How can it be something beyond the protagonist's ability?

It doesn't look good. Reading a novel is like listening to other people's ramblings. There is a problem with the writing. 😰

Quite abstract, food and grass, just to relieve boredom.

After reading more than seventy chapters, I still don't understand. What is the meaning of the protagonist's existence? There is no daily life or other content, so it's a bit empty.

It's pretty good. I'm in a good mood. After reading a few chapters, I started to feel irritable. I have to say that you, the author, really have your wits about you.

It was clearly written about a top boss, but it didn't feel like a boss at all, so no one read it.

The idea is very good, but I don't know why it's a little uncomfortable to read. I feel like I need to polish the text? 🙂

There are so many chapters and there are still less than 100 comments. Either it is really bad or it has been banned.

This introduction is really ridiculous. At first glance, it looks like a novel written by a novice.

Author, I read two chapters and I'll take your pulse. They all call me a miracle doctor. It's not a bad idea if you take a look at my suggestions. 1. The sentences on the side are not refined enough First of all, you can take two chapters and shorten the sentences yourself, and the expression should be precise and not wordy; then change the long sentences into short paragraphs, which are more suitable for Internet articles; finally, you can add some Internet language or classic sentence patterns according to your choice. Although you will scold a lot, you will also read a lot. 2. The character description is not vivid enough The water word count area is also the template area. The characters and dialogues you write are too plain. You can change them according to the character descriptions of the masters. 3. The plot does not feel exciting You have to guide readers to feel "enjoyed". Contrast, contrast, prominence, and exaggeration can all be used, but the reader must be involved. But those who change themselves always feel self-satisfied and don't know where to change and where not to change. I'm telling you, it's a quick trick. Just try to modify other articles written by Pu Gaizi. Just pull them down and try to modify them yourself. It will feel better if you modify them.

I understand that this is nonsense and a smart article

The subject matter is very good, the idea is very good, but the writing style is too ordinary, a long dialogue, repetitive and long-winded. Even if the author writes an anti-routine, but he first writes the original routine and then complains about it, it will look quite complicated and trivial. If the novel was shortened by half, it would still be about the same

Are all the titles of books nowadays so wild? ? ?

May the new book take off! ! ! To be honest, your last work was the first Yu-Gi-Oh fanfic I read. After that, I became a glorious card player... Well, I am still a cloud player 🤐. But I like Li Zheng's strategizing character. The handling of the characters in the original work is also the best among all the subsequent Yu-Gi-Oh fans I have seen. Especially the protagonist and Wang Xiang in the later chapter "Fifty Avenues, Derived from One". Although it is a pity that I gave up after reading Chapter 243 of "Farewell My Concubine". But I have watched all the parts I subscribed to over and over again. Pictures as evidence:

Already invincible, I started rubbing the system with my hands

It's so verbose, so densely packed that it's hard to read.

When will the author write a Yu-Gi-Oh fanfic again?

The protagonist seems to be invincible, but he doesn't say it clearly. The main plot seems to be to recruit apprentices to show off, but the apprentice's strength has not improved significantly The world view is not clear. There are all kinds of awesome things, but they are still not mentioned in the small broken ball.

I want to see the female imp loli eat her mouth and teeth!

The subject matter is very good, but the starting point of the protagonist is very high at the beginning, and then he can't develop further. It is all about daily life. If you want to see the system, don't enter if you are a cultivator of fairy tales.

We have almost collected the names of the twelve zodiac animals, so I will create a post to share them. The ones that have been confirmed are: The sky-stealing rat, the leveling ox, the sky-killing tiger the sky-walking rabbit, the burning dragon, the snake the sky-repairing horse, the sheep, the sky-equaling monkey the sky-calling rooster, the dog, Pig There are two titles below: Peeping the Sky and Swallowing the Sky. They are mentioned but which zodiac animal they belong to is not mentioned (Swallowing the Sky should be a dog, but I can't write it down without confirming the information) PS: The mention of Peeping the Sky is related to divination, but the first person under the cat in the Mortal Demon League is Fentian's Taoist companion Spirit Turtle Fairy, uh... I don't know if it's a bug

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It's pretty good. I'm in a good mood. After reading a few chapters, I started to feel irritable. I have to say, you, the author, really have your wits about you.

If they all have the ability to rub the hand rub system, then they're not invincible?