No Matter How Young You Are

1. The length of the plot I don't hate Yoyo's plot, but I hate this way of insertion In other words, the author's love for Tongzi may have caused some procrastination. Although I also like Tongzi and want to see more of their interactions, I always feel that maybe the author needs to restrain the advancement of this relationship a little bit From the reader's perspective It is said that people who like Kiriko suddenly wander around after a long series of Kiriko plots, which is a state of being broken and uncomfortable. People who don't like Kiriko will not like other characters who are too short. From the author's point of view, if the harem is determined from the beginning, the plot construction of each female character must have been done well. However, the problem is that , although the plot synopsis you wrote in the outline seems to be about the same length, but when it comes to writing, because you like a character, you can't help but write the plot in detail, which will give readers a reading inertia. If this inertia is interrupted, it will be uncomfortable 2. The rhythm of the plot Comparatively conventional light novels or urban novels , especially those in the harem, generally speaking, they are used to portraying the emotional changes of male and female characters by "solving her problems", no matter how young they are, but there is a small note here That is, if the "problem" itself is not "troublesome" enough, then the "emotional changes" that this plot can rely on are often not enough For example, at the beginning The problems that Hajime Kiriko encounters are quite difficult. The so-called "sense of fragmentation" is presented very well, and the mutual attraction between the two can also create enough tension However, the problems that Yuyu encounters are relatively "light", so the changes in their emotional relationship seem very childish. Perhaps the author has not yet given the so-called "Yuyou chapter", so it looks much different. Meaning But if you are not ready to start promoting Yoyo's so-called "favorability copy", then hasty descriptions can still easily cause discomfort Emotions do need to be foreshadowed. It is true that emotional relationships cannot be sublimated as long as the female character's difficulties are solved. The problem is that readers are not able to accept the "favorability copy" of another female character without completing it. At this time, when Tongzi is actually a little anxious, let the male protagonist show an extra attention to Yuyou This will not only interrupt the flow of reading, but also arouse rebellious psychology In addition, Tongzi itself is a very charming character, readers may mistakenly think that they want to watch a single female protagonist due to the discomfort of reading, forcing the confrontation with the author It is necessary Compensating for loss Writing about daily life is indeed a happy thing, but it is not good to indulge in daily life. Whether it is business or study rhythm, concessions are made to daily life. If you want to write more about the daily life and sweetness of high school, then you must sort out the plot density and rhythm of the other two female characters who are not in school. Don't lose more than you gain Come on

All I can say is that I couldn't stand it after reading chapter 120.

I've read half of it. I really can't stand it anymore. At least it doesn't feel like my humanity. Unreasonable.

To sum up my personal feelings: Like the previous book, the beginning is very good and the plot development is very attractive. However, the introduction of other female protagonists in the later part is very blunt. Unlike the previous book, the heroines know each other and are accommodated in life. I am especially impressed by Zhou Fu. Every time later, the plot starts to collapse again. It feels like forcing multiple female protagonists. Why can the author obviously get off to a good start? I feel like I have made enough money to give up and just write randomly. Obviously the timeline can be longer. The previous book also opened the beginning of the harem and ended after graduation. Couldn't the plot of the university be developed? It feels like the author really doesn't treat the readers as human beings. I still hope to see a more complete and long-term development of the work, and don't end it hastily.

To be honest, the writing is better than the previous one, and it still has the same flavor. However, the last book collapsed at the end and I couldn't stand it anymore. Let's try not to collapse this one!

Support. I think this book is well written. I will continue to update it.

666 Since I finished preparing the pancakes, I started to let myself go, right? {"NickName":"A piece of snow cake","UserId":390378303}

I usually watch pirated websites, but after watching that one, I changed my mind and came to watch the original version.

The author's writing is really good, short and easy to understand. I recommend a novel of the same type. Please save it and take a look. It's really too busy now

Damn you, you're going to burst into tears. Write faster. You really can't do it more fluently.

What you think is a beauty trap: Find a beautiful woman with a hot body and coquettishly dressed clothes to seduce you. The real beauty trap: One night, you met a girl who looked like her, wearing a white dress, standing quietly under the bright street lights. When you were stunned for a moment, you said mischievously: "Hee hee, long time no see, hey hey hey, why are you still as stupid as you were in high school?"

"Even if the world falls, I will not let you down, Xintong." Chen Wang's warm hand touched Li Xintong's beautiful porcelain face and said softly. "Well..." Li Xintong smiled lightly and snuggled into Chen Wang's arms, her beautiful smile instantly disappearing. Chen Wang, I believe everything you say, but can you really let go of the people in the world you care about? "Xintong, this is the last time, please wait until I come back." Chen Wang held her hand tightly. "Okay, I'll wait for you." There was a little worry in Li Xintong's eyes, and thousands of thoughts merged into one sentence. "The city is covered with red gauze, and the white head is never separated. My Xintong must be the most beautiful in her wedding dress. Wait for me, I will marry you with a red dress from ten miles away, and I will find people in the mountains and rivers of Nanshan, and have no competition with the world..." Chen Wang's words fell on her heart. "No matter what, I will wait for you, wait for you to come back and let me grow old." Li Xintong nodded and looked into his dark eyes, which were filled with tenderness and reluctance. "Well, I will definitely come back." "Chen Wang placed a kiss on her forehead, took a deep look, picked up the long sword on the table, her white clothes were elegant, her ink hair was clear, and she disappeared into the night attic with a flash of inspiration... "I'll wait for you, as long as I can..." The red candle dimmed, the silk beads swayed, and she was speechless in the end... Li Xintong caressed her Wearing the Red Lotus in the Mirror Moon given to her by Chen Wang on her jade-white wrist, he asked her to keep it on her body. The jade bracelet that was said to be glowing with blood is still as white as a pearl, and many past events gradually emerged... She began to stay with this red lotus. When she was conscious, she was beside it. The buds were tightly wrapped, and she never had the desire to bloom. She talked to it every day, even though it never spoke. The moment her consciousness disappeared, she saw the red lotus blooming, and three thousand figures with flying ink hair and faded shadows came out... When she woke up again, she saw a graceful figure dressed in white, with sparse and handsome features, and sharp edges that looked like a person, but she could no longer remember who it was... "Did you wake me up? "Sishui made a weak voice. "Well..." He looked at her and nodded gently. "Thank you, I don't know how long I have been asleep. I am Li Xintong, what is your name? "She smiled sweetly, and the water was clear. "Chen Wang. "The corners of his lips raised slightly and he said lightly. "Chen Wang, well, you look so pretty when you smile. "For some reason, she felt very happy when she saw his smile. "You practice well here, and I will come to see you often. "Red light flashed on his fingertips, injecting the spiritual power of Sishui, "It will open up your spiritual consciousness and help you practice and cultivate into a human form as soon as possible. " "Thank you Chen Wang, why are you so nice to me? "She looked at the red light in Surabaya in surprise and asked puzzledly. "Yuan, let me meet you here, and I will help you if I can. Come back another day and practice well. "After saying that, he disappeared by the Surabaya Lake. Only for this one side, the longing for love quietly took root. He said to let her practice well. He said to cultivate human nature as soon as possible. She worked hard, hoping that one day she could stand by his side. , Even though she knew that Sishui had no spiritual essence and could rarely cultivate into human form... For thousands of years, he often came to accompany her during the long practice. Although he was taciturn, although he always said, although... But it was enough, wasn't it? Well, at least he came, and there was another happy thing. I don't know when she started practicing, but she discovered that there was a blood-colored divine marrow in her body, and she would soon be able to transform into a human form, comparable to him. That day, he came to find her. , I didn't see her in Surabaya, but when I looked back, I saw her dressed in white, with a proud look on her face, with foggy hair on her temples. She was unparalleled in beauty without applying any powder, and she was stunningly beautiful without any cinnabar... "Chen Wang, long time no see, you don't recognize me? "She smiled lightly, talking and laughing, and her grace was outstanding. "No, Xintong, you are so beautiful in human form, as gentle as a lotus..." He walked into her slowly, "I have waited for this day for hundreds of years, Xintong, would you like to come back to Zuixianju with me? "My face turned red, my eyes were firm, and I handed her a white bracelet . "Well, I am willing, is this? "A blush appeared on her cheeks, and she took the bracelet with a soft smile. "Xintong, this is the Red Lotus of the Mirror Moon, the most important thing to me. You must wear it with you..." He hugged her with unprecedented tenderness. "You know, I have been waiting for you for a long, long time..." He gently took the bracelet in his hand and put it on her On the white porcelain wrist. "Well..." She breathed the familiar lotus fragrance on his body wantonly, and this feeling seemed to go back to a long, long time ago... She never knew why the mirror moon red lotus was not blood red, just like she didn't know that the blood red essence in her body was given to her by him...

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The lights outside are starting to come on, and the lights inside the store are flickering. The aisle that was not crowded at first was crowded with people. When the manager of Shang K learned that someone had fallen, he immediately asked the front desk to give first aid. Then Du Jiahao and others came after hearing the news. The manager of Shang K saw Li Xintong as soon as he saw it, because Li Xintong always only accompanied people with drinks and was relatively clean. , So she was suitable to come forward, and the manager then said to her: "Tong! Go out and see if the ambulance is coming!" Hearing this, Li Xintong glanced at the manager first, and then looked at Chen Wang, who was lying there with his arms crossed. After thinking about it with a complicated look in his eyes, he ran around him and ran out. At this time, outside Shang K, after Li Xintong opened the door, he ran to the fountain and started to look at it to see if the ambulance was coming. Then she saw the sound of an ambulance coming from the west. She didn't know what she was thinking, so she rushed to the west in a hurry, trying to lead the way for the ambulance. When she walked around the fountain, picked up her phone and turned on the flashlight to shine on the ambulance, she heard a squeaking sound. A black car stopped suddenly in the aisle in front of the fountain, and the ambulance came after hearing the news. ...... In the late autumn of 2013, the Jiangchuan River was extremely hot. The lingering power of the autumn tiger was still there, and the heat energy supplied the family's courtyard. Li Xintong, who was alone at home, suddenly woke up from the heat. At this time, Li Xintong's head suddenly exploded, and she immediately closed her eyes again, absorbing a huge amount of information. After a while, Li Xintong opened her eyes leisurely, looked at the ceiling fan spinning slowly on the ceiling, and gradually accepted a fact that she originally didn't want to accept. She was reborn! I was born again in the second year of high school, not long after school started. There were still a few days before she left for Guangdong Province, and this time she suddenly felt that she might be able to change her life. After all, she had heard a bartender say before that once the protagonist of this online novel is able to go back, he will naturally have destiny, and there is no such thing as a lucky person who time travels back in vain. It was just a joke that she used to be the bartender at that time. Now that she recalls everything that has happened in the past ten years, she does not need to go south. Instead, she can go to Zhejiang Province or Shanghai to earn her first pot of gold and start a different destiny. While thinking wildly, she suddenly remembered that the reason for her rebirth was because of an old classmate named Chen Wang. I just don't know if her old classmate will meet her in the future. After all, she is the one who is planning to escape from here in advance. Early the next morning, feeling the gentle breeze of October and listening to the weather forecast played on the TV, Li Xintong, who had long become accustomed to it, picked up her schoolbag and headed towards school after getting familiar with it. Stepping into this campus once again, which may be ready to leave in a few days, I feel a little emotional, what time! Time! On the way to class, she met Huang Jing, a good partner, and then she disguised herself and chatted with Huang Jing. Everything was normal in the morning until Chen Wang came to the classroom. She looked at him a few more times and found that there was nothing unusual about him. She understood that it was impossible for the two of them to interact with each other this time. However, when she thought of Chen Wang telling her own experience, she felt that because of the fuse, she also needed to repay Chen Wang for letting her be reborn. Although it is a bit strange to think this way, it is also true. So Li Xintong, known as the school beauty of Bingshan, pursed her lips slightly and made some determination. The next morning, something happened that made Li Xintong have to recall what happened back then. Chen Wang confessed his love to An Jiani in public, which shocked the whole grade. But when Li Xintong thought about Chen Wang's story about dropping out of school, she had a different mentality. She suddenly wanted to see if Chen Wang would make the same mistake in this life and drop out of school. After causing a sensation, Chen Wang, who came back, lay down on the table and fell asleep after dinner. Until Li Xintong came back from the homeroom teacher Lao Jiang and looked at Chen Wang, who was lying there sleeping. Li Xintong, who paid attention to her expression, walked slowly to his desk, knocked on the table, and looked at Chen Wang who was slowly waking up. She cleared her throat and said, "Chen Wang, the head teacher will let you go now." Chen Wang looked at her blankly, and then shouted her name with multiple emotions: "Li Xin Tong?" At this time, his good friend and good brother Du Jiahao came over and said, "You are still sleeping at this time! Lao Jiang is so angry with you." Li Xintong looked at Du Jiahao's anxious look, and then thought about the scene of Shang K many years later, she wanted to say with emotion, is this a good brother? Men's feelings are pure. Then while she was in a trance, she heard Chen Wang putting his arms around Du Jiahao's shoulders and talking about women, money, and boring things. Until I heard Chen Wang's deskmate Zhao Tingting say: "I realized that if you don't go to the office, you will be hung up and beaten by Lao Jiang." Chen Wang casually said something fragrant, then he glanced at himself, stood up and turned into a whirlwind, running towards the door. But none of this had anything to do with her, until she was ignored by her mother and pushed further by her stepfather. She felt complicated. She skipped class and hid in a music equipment room for any reason. Recalling her mother's eyes in the morning, she once again strengthened her inner thoughts, but when she thought of the joke Chen Wang told this morning, her heart felt sweet. She suddenly found that Chen Wang had changed, but she was not sure whether it was because he had also traveled through time. Thinking about it, she awkwardly picked up the guitar and started playing and singing "Meet". Until he heard a noise at the door, Li Xintong asked in surprise: "Why are you here?" Chen Wangze asked expressionlessly: "Shouldn't I be the one to ask?" Li Xintong was nervous for a moment, and then explained anxiously: "I wanted to go to the classroom and passed by here. , Seeing the door of this classroom half open, just..." In the middle of the explanation, she looked at Chen Wang, who was still waiting for her to quibble, and suddenly realized why she had to explain. She had already asked for leave, so she simply asked: "Where are you?" Chen Wang smiled. She had seen this smile before, but Chen Wang said: "The physical education teacher suspected that you were skipping class, so let me Come and catch you!" Li Xintong looked at him like this, and said dubiously: "Really... Really?" Seeing Chen Wang nod, Li Xintong said in a panic: "I... I'm really uncomfortable..." Chen Wang shook his head and said, "I can't tell." Li Xintong immediately explained: "Really, aren't we playing basketball today... My feet are a little sore." Chen Wangze sneered and retorted: "What? Stepped on a lemon?" Li Xintong groaned at first, a little unresponsive, then she suddenly understood, and immediately covered her mouth to suppress her laughter. And Chen Wang said quietly: "You just seemed to have put your left hand on your foot and touched it..." Li Xintong immediately let go of his hand and looked at him and said, "Why are you staring at someone's feet when you have nothing to do? Do you like it?" Her eyes, this action, and this tone instantly reminded Chen Wang of something, and he suddenly stopped. Li Xintong stood up and walked up to him and said softly: "I heard that some people like various parts. For example, I like hands. You have good hands and are quite chubby." After that, she picked up the guitar and started playing by herself, while Chen Wang stared at her Face asked casually: "When did you learn guitar?" Li Xintong looked up at the window and replied casually: "Learned for half a year." Chen Wang asked again: "Learned it in school?" Li Xintong then replied: "Learned it myself." Chen Wang nodded and asked again: "Is it difficult to learn?" Li Xintong looked at him at this time and said: "No, but I haven't learned it yet, let alone teach..." Before she finished speaking, Chen Wang said: "Who asked you to teach?! " Li Xintong was immediately fired up when she heard this. She immediately touched her slender neck and replied: "Then go ahead and say that I am pretending to be sick and not going to class." Chen Wang was happy when he heard this, and then he turned around with his hands and feet kicking to complain. Seeing his posture, Li Xintong immediately hesitated: "Hey! What about that, can you not tell the teacher?" Chen Wang immediately turned around and answered her: "Okay!" Li Xintong immediately asked warily: "Then... What do you want me to do..." Chen Wangze smiled instantly and said, "What are you thinking?! The teacher won't pay me a salary, so why do I need to do things for him. Do you think I'm like someone, just report it after changing hands?" Li Xintong said oh, and instantly felt relieved. She knew that Chen Wang was talking about someone An. But the next second Chen Wang chuckled and said, "You sing so well, why don't you go to the bar with me on Saturday..." Li Xintong immediately subconsciously answered: "Singing karaoke?" Chen Wang caught something instantly, then looked at Li Xintong and said, "Tell Lao Mo!" Li Xintong didn't realize the problem, and subconsciously added: "I want to eat fish." After saying this, she was instantly shocked and looked at Chen Wang. Chen Wang smiled, walked up to her and said, "Li Xintong, do you have time to chat?" Li Xintong immediately put down his guitar and ran out of the used music equipment room. Chen Wang walked towards the sports equipment room unhurriedly. Three days later, just like in the previous life, her stepfather came to the house to force her to act morally wrong. At that moment, she burst out her second-generation emotions and had a big quarrel with her stepfather, preparing to come back tonight to pack up and go to Zhejiang Province. Just when she opened the door, she saw a figure slumped on the ground. It turned out to be Chen Wang. After chatting with Chen Wang, she realized that Chen Wang was here to deliver materials to her. Originally, she didn't want him to get involved. After all, she was leaving tonight. As a result, after Chen Wang offered to let her stay at his house, he took her home to pack her clothes. Before leaving, he punched his stepfather again. At this time, Li Xintong firmly believed that Chen Wang had indeed traveled back in time, and then she could change her plan. She still remembered his kindness, even though he was as crooked as the previous life. After returning to Chen's house, she settled down and her destiny changed. Until many years later, on the top floor of a commercial building, looking at the river view below, they were celebrating the successful settlement of Xinwang Group in Zhejiang Province in the afternoon. After the two happily drank a glass of wine, Chen Wang's cell phone rang. He picked it up and took a look. The note was Shen Youyou, but he did not answer. Instead, he looked at Li Xintong and asked a question that the two of them had already agreed on. "Li Xintong, have you been reborn? Did you do business in Guangdong Province before your rebirth?" Li Xintong saw all this and couldn't help but raise the corners of his mouth. After drinking the red wine in one gulp, he asked: "What does Chairman Chen think?" After saying that, he lifted up his gauze skirt. Seeing Chen Wang looking at her feet, she winked at Chen Wang and said, "Boss, do you like it?" Then the two of them laughed, and behind the desk behind them, there was a whiteboard. Written above is a data sheet titled "Recommendations for Implementing Wuyou Media's Plan for the Next Four Years." The time 2019.11.15 Is marked in Song font in the corner, and two anti-dust and fog masks are placed on the table.

The author sticks to his principles and does not compromise for a few taels of silver. He has taught new authors a lesson. It has become a case that can be recorded and serves as a role model for our generation. I pay tribute to him. 🙏

It makes me sick. The heroine was a 🐔 before she was reborn, and the author wanted to save her after she was reborn. Readers who don't have any special hobbies, please proceed with caution! ! !

Bro, why are you still confronting readers and teaching you how to be a good person hahaha

What about the closing remarks? Just write, I just want to challenge the readers' bottom line, I want to write about Miss Shang K Mo Mo Sing as the heroine. Let's give readers an obedience test at the beginning. I'm glad I ran fast,

Host, writer, folk singer, bartender, oil painter, cobbler, silversmith, tambourine artist, old backpacker, French rider, golden left cheek, Zen disciple. I think it's great👍🏻

It's so weird. After reading the comment section of the previous book, I wanted to see what the new book was like, but I couldn't stand the first chapter. Was the heroine a club princess in her previous life? ! Is this a new hobby? Sure enough, if you read for a long time, you will encounter all kinds of weird things.

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It seems like if you like cuckolding, your results will teach you how to be a good person.

In this era, pure love is the trend, and single female protagonists are the trend.

Hahaha, who knew that when I opened the author's homepage just now, the opening line was Chen Wang felt like a failure... Hahaha, who could have failed himself and written the "I Super". I was originally the best in this field, but in the end I had to commit suicide and ended up like this.

After reading two chapters, I moved to the comment section and just started writing. So funny

The author has also suffered retribution. He was completely disgusted by the last book. Now the pure love readers despise this book and think it is a harem, and the stallion readers despise it and think it is pure love. Hahahahahahahaha

Hey, why do you look like this? Why don't you just write if you want?

I have read a lot of harem stories, and this is the only one that makes me feel sick... The imbalance in the length of the early and middle stages makes people too involved in a single heroine. In the later stage, there is almost no reason for a reasonable harem, so the more you see the chaos in the back, the more disgusting you are... There is no sense of pleasure at all, only discomfort.

Don't criticize me after reading this [👍]