Don't Go Out When It's Dark!

I have seen the latest chapter and there are some problems, but overall it is pretty good. If you are a newbie, this kind of writing is very good. I personally think it can get a score of 75. A few more suggestions for the author: 1 There is currently no problem with the plot logic, but some details need to be paid more attention to. If possible, some bad sentences should be revised 2. If the author has decided to focus on the protagonist like the super god mechanic, don't spend too much space on other players, and determine the heroine as soon as possible (if you can't write an emotional scene, don't write it) Finally, this is my personal opinion Don't stop updating, you can update less, but you must keep writing, the more you write, the better 👍

I'm used to it. It was the same in the previous books.

Advantages: The setting is very new, the growth flow of the Super God Machine Master NPC + the weird flow, and the overall logic is nothing until Chapter 35. Disadvantages: The characterization of the characters is too taken for granted. The author's character "characteristics" are too prominent and not realistic enough. For example, although readers all know that it is an NPC growth stream, players do not know it. The protagonist is very open and unabashed about using the players. OK, it makes sense in the background that the protagonist has been awakened for many years; the players also naturally accept the fact of being used, but there is an information gap between them! While the players are talking about the real world, a character pops up who does not treat them as human beings, an NPC character who is full of familiarity with the mission system and player characteristics. Don't they feel it is against the rules? Especially when other NPCs are still shocked for a long time about the player's resurrection, doesn't the protagonist's information seem suspicious? Other NPCs will also give out tasks, but in the real world, good NPCs give out tasks that are not life-threatening; the protagonist charges money to make people risk their lives as soon as they come up, and does not pretend to be shocked when they see the resurrection. Players naturally accept the setting that this person knows that we will be resurrected. According to real logic, shouldn't this person be an evil NPC? There are also the designs of Qin Honglian and Big Brother. The former saved a life and then she changed into a metamorphosis just when Wei appeared. She turned into the 2.0 Boss, who is beautiful and kind-hearted and has unlimited potential, but she is the yandere protagonist. The protagonist doesn't know anything, it's such a coincidence... As the eldest brother is a senior member of the association, his enemies all know that he has a younger brother, but the association members who come to provoke him do not know. During a conflict, clearly saying "My brother is xxx" will make the provocative person suffer even more, and it can also save energy and have to fight a feud. It's not impossible to have enemies, but the protagonist's level is that the eldest brother is the boss and the wife is the boss, but he has trouble getting along with the junior employees. It feels like the CEO's brother is in trouble with the intern. If this is a weird book about rules from the player's perspective, the protagonist is extremely evil. He knows at the beginning that the player will not die. Just like the clairvoyance game, the background is among the cool ACs, and he has to hang out in the market. He is a hermit master, and he has enemies with the younger members. All the rules are contradictory. Then the protagonist's skill design, the function of Shadow Demon's superpower is to swing the ax to kill monsters, forget it, the power of swinging the ax is still the same as the protagonist, so what is the difference from the protagonist killing monsters himself. Although it may be strengthened and upgraded later, the first impression given is that it can be used to chop monsters with an axe. It may be upgraded from ten kilograms of cutting power to one million tons of cutting power.

It's quite poisonous. The protagonist has almost no brain. He knows that the big conspirator will wake up. He doesn't run away quickly when he finds something and wastes time on the spot. He knows that the night is dangerous and he is not invincible, so he slowly closes the door.

It's quite innovative, a combination of game writing and weird flow, but generally speaking, it can't hold up well in the later stages.

I only watched half of it, which is not a lot. First of all, I followed the mechanic NPC flow. Then Weird World said that it is not good to practice both main professions, but it is possible to practice both at the same time. Weird cooperates with the all-round immortal cultivator and has a superpower. In the early stage, others were following the protagonist at the door of the house, and they still thought they would not take action in a short time. What? Is the protagonist also from the author's perspective? There are also some minor poisonous things, and other brothers have written them more clearly than me, so I won't go into details. This book belongs to the book world and can be read. If you are interested in weird NPCs and immortals, you can take a look. There are players, but the main character is still the protagonist.