Xiuxian, I Have a Game Board

All the effort you spent was in vain. You are now stuck on "Interesting", which seems to be a bit interesting. To be honest, just be direct. If the heart is too high, the burden will be too big and there will be too many pitfalls. No one is interested in listening to you tell a complete story in 100, 70 or 80 chapters. Whoever tells you will be interested if it is complete. You do not follow the logic of the novel, and your writing power cannot reach that level. This type of equipment is mainly used for upgrading and killing monsters. The mastermind can have that is the finale stage. Now it's a small goal step by step, with clear goals and a fast pace. I only saw the part where the traitor in the Dragon Prince's village wants to rebel. I don't know what's going on behind you, I only know that your preparation is too long. You wrote this story with great care, but it makes no sense. You didn't even make it into a facial expression. You really exaggerated the shrewdness and evil of the supporting characters and villains. What does it have to do with your protagonist? What image does your protagonist have and why does he use it? The rendering looked okay and smooth, but it was of no use at all. It is of no use to your story or your short-term and long-term goals. Short-term upgrade to defeat monsters, get lost and change maps. Achieve your goals in the long run, sublimate your heart, and find the black hand. The process of writing a novel is similar to that of a game. I can only say that you are laying the groundwork. Have you ever played games? You have no idea what type of games you play. Before you write this book, lower your mentality and be humble. Your grades are much better. I feel that you are very enthusiastic and want to describe a higher-grade novel. First you have to become famous, and then you have to clear yourself up before you can go ashore. If you want to go ashore while you are still underwater, it is impossible. You haven't done your job well yet, and you're going to have a good time. You are dreaming.

There are obviously experience points, but they don't think of ways to get them. The plot jumps quickly, and the strength does not increase. It keeps suppressing the strength. It is obvious that the player route is taken, but the traditional route is written, causing the protagonist to keep paddling, which is frustrating to watch.

1. To cultivate immortality, you must have the qualifications to cultivate immortality. The male protagonist returned to the village to do a task, and it turned out that the village was full of hidden masters, and Shisheng received an initiation, and he could practice it since he was a child 2. After opening the system, he had to have a golden finger. The effect of your golden finger is minimal 3. You have logged into the game in advance. I was expecting you to use your foresight to find some opportunities. But what did you do? 4. The introduction mentions players, how many chapters are there, and where are the players? 5. System, foresight, game players, etc. These elements gave the readers corresponding excitement, but in the end there was nothing? It's better to remove these elements and write an original fairy tale. Or pick one or two elements to highlight its cool points

The author's writing style is a bit messy, which makes my head hurt when I read it. Sometimes I write about the teacher's family, and sometimes I write about the village. There are a lot of elements, but the plot is incoherent. It looks uncomfortable.

I didn't quite understand the previous plot. Adults are not children. Bullying has to be based on interests, right? Why do those people bully the protagonist? Even if you really want to do something bad, you can't do it openly. Wouldn't it be better to do it behind the scenes?

Just jump from Chapter 6 to Chapter 65. To be honest, it's okay not to read the middle 60 chapters.

It's not a cool game article, but more like a Xianxia system article. Xianxia has a little more flavor. Except for the cliche plot, the characters are pretty good. There are still a few small poisonous points. 1. Jian Nvcang has a very unruly personality. She often plays tricks on the protagonist, but later reconciles with her. The transition in the middle is not good and the character is not likable. 2. The upgrade is too slow, and I haven't practiced Qi in Chapter 50 yet. People build a foundation in a hundred days, you... 3. I guess most people came in based on the title, but there is no sign of the player's fifty chapters yet... I hope it will be as soon as possible. I don't know if the author is trying to cater to a darker world view or what, but I feel like even that village doesn't feel like a good bird. The protagonist's sense of security actually rests on the stone Buddha. Bold prediction, waiting for the protagonist's strength to come up in the later stage, suppressing all this may be a great feeling.

The prophet, the system, and the protagonist have an unlikable personality. The author's control of the plot is almost meaningless. But if you are a novice author, it is already very good.

It seems that I have seen it, but it seems that I have not seen anything. As seen

Daily guide. Is there any Shennong?

Chapter 55, Zixia practiced that skill in her previous life, and then ignored it, first used the relatively rare enlightenment points to practice, and then practiced another skill, and then found that the other skill was good, and then abolished Zixia's skill... Where is your logic here?

Players will definitely focus on leveling up when the time comes. Your current panel level is deliberately low, the protagonist is too frustrated, and the plot is too boring. I think you would rather see the players interact with the protagonist, and then watch the protagonist act cool, so that readers can become involved. The protagonist, rather than writing novels about cultivating immortals all the time, you can say that the upgrade is very slow, but at least the level of training is improved. Chapter 63 is still Qi training level two. What if it is 100 chapters? There are no public beta players yet, and the foundation building is not yet available. By then, readers' interest will drop.

It's really well written, it's really interesting. Why are there so few people? Come on.

I didn't want to read it because of the name. I was tired of reading the fourth article. Then this comment section said that the player no longer appears? Then look at the players' readers who ran away again after a few chapters 🙂🙂🙂 This is really a fancy way of chasing people away.

Pursuing reading is really important, don't let books become a habit!

It feels like there is nothing in it, I am a little interested in it but the writing is messy and not good enough.

The scene changes later are too confusing and the plot is not coherent enough.

Liangcao, the pace is too fast, please slow down a little to cultivate the fairy tale.