Under One Person: I, Maoshan, Fuyan Wanfa

Everyone can speak freely and leave the name of the character if you have any ideas. Name, weapon, occupation, simple appearance, and personality. Basically, it's not too outrageous and will be adopted.

I'll give you some clear directions

The protagonist's indifferent nature is suitable for Ye Maoshan. Being a Maoshan Taoist priest is really an inconvenience.

That can't come The Great Law of the Western Ban of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Five Thunder Laws of the Sheshan Mountain of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Five-Yuan Chongwei Lei Law of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Great Law of the West Linghongyuan of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Lielei Law of the Shangqing Dynasty of Wuchun, the secret method of Xinglei of the Xun Palace of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Five Thunder Methods of Shenlong Shenlong of the Shangqing Dynasty of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Five Thunder Methods of the Jade Palace of Xun Palace of the Shangqing Dynasty, the Chongming Dharma of the Yuyuan West Ban of the Shangqing Dynasty, Dusheng Zhenhuo Linglei method; Shangqing Xilingguangsheng Chongxuan inner method; Shangqing Shenlie Feijie five thunder method; Shangqing Feiyuan Taiyi shift down five thunder method; Shangqing Xinyuan Xungong Tongyun five thunder method; Yuqingshu five thunder method; Taichu five thunder method; Yuanshi fire order flying eagle and walking dog Zhengwen method; Five thunder dynasty fighting method; Taichu Hunyuan thunder internal method.

To be honest, there is no problem with the author's writing skills, and the story he wrote is not bad, but there are too many original characters, and they are too powerful. I can't accept it. If a ghost comes out randomly, it will be 50-50 against Lao Tianshi. Lao Tianshi is basically the best in the world. If you break through, you will soar. Even if you are at the same level as Lao Tianshi, But if you fail to ascend and live on by constantly seizing possessions, leaving only a ghost, then you are just a slap in the face to the Heavenly Master, which is the same as the emperor killing himself. Every time Liu Lian and Yin Shisan appear, I have the urge to abandon the book. I personally feel that the appearance of these two people is not good, no matter how you say it? Otherwise, the author thinks that his original work is very successful. Finally, the author's writing style is good. This is also the point where I am struggling to give up.

It's such an old writing method, no matter what, add a bunch of old things to it like crazy, and everywhere you go there will be a group of old immortals who don't know where they come from to cause trouble, and then let the protagonist break through it, then target the protagonist, and then let the protagonist deal with the disaster.

If the Luo Tian Dajiao is not coming out soon, how can you still meet Feng Baobao? Shouldn't you be practicing with Zhang Chulan now? Is it the same as trying to break into the world?

,,, As for the plot arrangement,,, in order to get rid of the inner demons, the protagonist takes a child whom he has grown up with, who is considered a half-disciple, down the mountain. He feels that it is really better for the child to stay on the mountain. After going down the mountain, he will go wherever there is danger. Have you never thought that you are still taking a child with you? As a result, the protagonist was bewitched at the first stop because of the protagonist, and then the protagonist took the child to dangerous places. After arriving in Tianjin, it was fine, and ended up taking the child to live in a ghost building. It was really better to leave the child in the mountain. After coming down, the protagonist was fine. The child has been suffering from old sins. If the protagonist takes the child down again, it will be a miracle that the child can survive to adulthood.

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Away from the boss, and then play the game together. There is a boss at the beginning of the novice tutorial, then the boss leaves and fights the mobs to pass the level, and finally the boss level fights the boss. And you from Maoshan said you were playing with the talisman, but you ended up going crazy to invite the gods. There is no distinction between priority and priority. The name and introduction of your article came to see the unique skills of the talisman. Who came to see you to invite the gods? If we have this time, wouldn't it be good for us to read the five blessings and other divine mask texts? They are more specific, and some of them are the work of the author. There is also the loot that the protagonist won from the mini-boss game in the early stage [Mustard Seed Secret Technique, the author set up the secret of becoming an immortal]. It was given away as promised, and was directly given to the company as a reward for removing the poison. The value alone is not equal, not to mention that the protagonist himself comes from Maoshan, is a well-known and decent family, and has many connections. The protagonist is a direct disciple of the head of the clan, and the faction resources are at his disposal. Why not go directly to the ten Gu Masters to solve the problem, and use the talisman as a reward? Isn't it good? I have to put aside the legendary resources and find a newbie who doesn't know anything. The protagonist is a pure fool. The author's logic here can be seen as a bunch of bad ones. During the battle in the protagonist's valley, it was said that the protagonist did not join the sect in order not to cause trouble for the sect. But this is not the case. The protagonist went down the mountain to experience and participate in Luo Tianda. You will still be exposed when the time comes. Chun Renkun, this author wrote a batch of inconsistencies.

The opening introduces the thoughts of the protagonist as an ordinary person. He has always been brooding about not accepting the Dragon Tiger Mountain. The master of the protagonist passed on his secret knowledge and the whole inner demon is Zhang Lingyu. OK, ordinary people can barely accept it if they are abnormal. Later when he went down the mountain and met someone pretending to be a Maoshan Taoist priest, he didn't ask a word. As written before, he cherished Maoshan and regarded Maoshan as his home. He didn't ask anything when he encountered it. I went to a corpse-killing house and asked the main character what sect he belonged to. The main character said that he had no sect. The most annoying thing was that the author explained that he was afraid of causing trouble for the sect. You don't have to read too much. In chapter 20, you can see at least three inconsistencies and super poisonous points. I'm really too lazy to complain. Can you think more about writing novels? The characters are not fleshed out at all, and they are so stupid in their actions and words.

The original scenes conflict too much with the original work, like the Stitch Monster

Zheng Zibu sacrificed? Have you read the original work? Can thirty-six thieves be sacrificed?

Let's complain, you said you play with talismans, and you shouldn't put more Taoist talismans under the introduction, but in the end, three of the gods took up the majority. Those who didn't know thought you were playing with the gods in Maoshan.

,,, Entering the Shangqing ancestral altar, giving the name Qingfeng,,, is somewhat inappropriate

I saw the latest chapter, 130,000 words, all of which are original plots. Even the original characters are not mentioned, and those mentioned are mentioned briefly. It's okay to put it in other genres. What you wrote is a fan novel, and it doesn't involve anything in the original work?

It's really confusing to call someone Daoist at one moment and a real person at another. Do you know what a real person is?

How to say it? I respect some of the settings but not too much. I write more about my own settings. I also remember that Feng Baobao can clearly see Qi! And one person is all a function of Qi. How can one formation have that much effect on Feng Baobao? These are acceptable, after all, appropriately weakening the characters in the original plot is what fan fiction basically does, but the plot of defeating monsters and upgrading is too bland and too stiff. Also, the fortune teller thinks that Li Xiu will die, so he doesn't save him. He thinks that even if he saves him, he will die. The fortune teller also tells you this. You have raised your fortune telling ability to a level that does not belong to him. Your fortune telling ability is equivalent to the author telling the protagonist not to save him. If you save him, I will kill him, and then the protagonist believes it. You can say that saving the protagonist is not worth the impact, but if you directly say that saving the protagonist is useless, then the protagonist does not save the protagonist, it seems that the protagonist is very superstitious about fortune-telling.

Originally, the setting at the beginning was not bad, but the more I wrote later, the more nonsense it became. Second creators should also read the original work and respect the facts.

Hahahahahaha I'm laughing to death. The Maoshan sect invited gods to invite Erlang Zhenjun and Wen Zhong. Grandmaster's face is swollen from your slap!

When are you going to ask the Heavenly Lord Shangqing Lingbao to come down and plow the novel master directly?

When other people write fan fiction, they usually focus on the plot first, but this author is better. He wrote nearly 70 original chapters at the beginning, and only later did he think about the plot! Not to mention, the original plot is also a mess, and the characters are seriously divided!

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