Hogwarts Begins by Pretending to Be the Savior

This book is written to my liking, so I read a few words. The plot and character interactions so far are very to my liking. It is a very light-hearted and enjoyable daily novel, which I like very much. But it is precisely because of this love that the title and introduction of this article make me feel so uncomfortable. PS: The monthly recommendation vote has been voted. I don't have any ideas for writing guidance, I just want to express my understanding.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   . The title and introduction of this book have three key words: "Hogwarts", "pretend", and "savior". Each keyword can derive three expansion tags: "HP fan fiction", "impersonation", and "important role affecting the world line". Excluding readers who find this article through the "Hogwarts" tag, what kind of story will readers who actively look for books through the last two keywords expect? Pretending to be someone - usually the protagonist disguises his identity for a series of purposes such as evading pursuit, seeking revenge, etc., And uses certain high-risk acting behaviors to obtain high rewards that his original identity does not have, including money and social status. Maybe there will be some complicated emotional entanglements during the performance. Savior - In addition to the heroism and growth of this label itself, this word is also strongly bound to Harry Potter in the HP background, representing the main line of the article. Readers who find this book through these keywords will naturally think that they will see a book like this: a coming-of-age novel or a revenge novel with a HP background. The protagonist may take Harry's place and do some big things (such as killing the noseless man in advance, seizing opportunities that belong to Harry, etc.). This is no problem. Many people are tired enough from real life. They just want to watch something cool when they go home. But this is seriously misaligned with the content of the text. Readers who want to read a refreshing article click in, but find that only the first two chapters are the content of the article title, and the rest are all daily plots of "Dirty dog ​​strays into the new world", "Daily life of father and son between dog and bat", "Disney dog ​​and his animal friends". Some people may stay because of the author's writing style, plot or other things, while others will leave directly and continue to look for target themes that suit their appetite. And readers who like to read heart-warming daily growth stories, after reading this article through various channels, the more they like the good dog in the article who gradually lets down his guard, the more unhappy he is with the title of the article. Such as me. Every time I click on the book from the bookshelf, I will be confused when I see the title. The sense of dislocation is too serious! [2. Suggestions on revising the title and introduction of the book as soon as possible] The author has written very well. If the current style continues, the book will inevitably accumulate more readers as the story develops - unless the subsequent plot takes a big turn and there is a real key plot of "playing Harry Potter" or "replacing himself as the savior", otherwise it is better to change the title of the book as soon as possible. Because no matter how well the text is written, spontaneous publicity among readers is ultimately limited. Daily introduction, Guess You Like It, End-of-Chapter Recommendations, and List Display are the first ways for Qidian readers to get in touch with a book. These sections can only display so much information. Readers' first impression of the book will always come from the title and introduction. If the title is not changed as soon as possible, more readers who like this type of daily writing will miss this book. There are also those readers who like to fatten up. After ten days and a half, they want to continue reading. They are thinking about the plot of the main text, but they can't find a book on the bookshelf that can correspond to the plot. They just put it aside and forget about it. It is very likely that they will lose such a subscription. This is such a shame, so my suggestion is to change the title of the book as soon as possible. The new book title should focus on the main line of the story, reflect the theme of the daily novel, and relate to the protagonist's "dog" character, rather than simply using the title to draw people in to read the first three chapters and then run away when they find that the article is not on point. Such as "The Wild Dogs of Hogwarts"? Just to give an example, the specific title of the book depends on the plot. After all, the book is only 400,000 words long, and it is impossible for all readers to know the follow-up better than the author. The same goes for the introduction. The form and word count are not important, but they must reflect the theme of the text. (Quietly) If the author is really not good at writing introductions, he can be lazy and just pick a paragraph from the text that has received good feedback from readers and post it, which is the paragraphs that have a lot of comments from readers. Or briefly show the interaction between the protagonist and several important supporting characters. This kind of daily interaction display is also very attractive to the target audience of daily articles.

I don't know how this book will fare. But it shouldn't be particularly good. There's no problem in writing a growth-oriented protagonist. The problem is that there is too much emphasis on the protagonist being a gutter rat. Growth is achieved through behavior, instead of always emphasizing that the protagonist is waiting for others to eat, pretending to be good, and so on. Also, if you keep living in the gutter, you will never achieve great things or become a protagonist. I have read about forty or fifty chapters so far, and I have been overemphasizing the shortcomings. Other than that, the writing is okay.

One chapter updated every week

RT The writing is very good. It has the flavor of a Western fantasy fairy tale. There is no system. The plug-in is just a special point of physique (the unformed Obscurus who was held back) and life experience (an orphan suspected of being an ancient bloodline). Supplement, I have now seen the end of the Chamber of Secrets plot in Chapter 170. The main plot roughly follows the original work but the plot development is different. The snake courtyard, the youthful sunshine version (not) Snape, barely has a relationship with the protagonist group as friends (although the protagonist may not necessarily admit it). There is currently no female protagonist. Looking at this development trend, it seems that there may not be one in the future. The only shortcoming: The author does not seem to be full-time and updates every week. He writes too little. I want to keep it but I am afraid that I will die. If I don't keep it, I will read one chapter a week and my emotions will be extremely incoherent.

In the character dialogue, there is no description of scenes, expressions, or actions. This makes conversations between multiple people in the same scene seem a bit messy and the reading fluency will be greatly reduced. , Also, who is the heroine?

Other book friends have said, Basically it is a good book worth looking forward to the follow-up, I hope this quality can be maintained in the future🙂🙂🙂

A very good fanfic and well written.

If you want to be consistent with the characters of the original characters, deduce reasonable and surprising changes in the original plot, and make all the original characters come alive instead of just for decoration, then this is a masterpiece not to be missed🙂🙂

I think this book is going to be a hit! This is a Harry Potter fanfic. What to write about growth, what to write about redemption. Can you beat the original? Most of the popular Harry Potter fan novels are making jokes, writing educational articles, expanding the worldview and integrating other magic systems. Everyone spends money on the novels. I'm paying to read your fanfic, which is more like the original at its core. Why don't I pay to read the original? Author cut the book!

When Kohler is cured by Hogwarts, he should be able to make up for all the regrets in the Hogwarts story. Very detailed descriptions of daily life, if you like this kind of stuff, you can check it out. It's a good idea at the moment, and I look forward to updates.

Just a reminder to newcomers, the protagonist is an indigenous person.

The title of the book is indeed a bit bad and makes people not want to read it. In addition, I personally feel that there are too many emotional descriptions of the protagonist, which seems a bit pretentious. Occasionally, there is envy, jealousy and hatred, occasionally there is rebellion with the wand, and occasionally there is stimulation from external factors. Once or twice, it is okay, but it is a bit embarrassing to watch too much. Others are pretty good. I don't know why there aren't many book reviews. There are also a lot of fujoshi Nantong Nitian reviews. Come on, author.

Goodbye, Professor Minerva McGonagall of Hogwarts

I have deeply realized that the title and introduction of the book do not match the content of the article But I am a bad namer, so I can only rely on my book friends.

Some good reader can give this author a good title for his work. It is really well written and the setting is novel.

I think the details used to depict the characters in this article are very vivid. For example, Dumbledore will slowly read the rest of the newspaper after reading the newspaper with the news about the fake savior. For example, the protagonist grew up in Spider-End Alley and was illiterate (this is one of the few articles I read that noticed the details of the protagonist being illiterate in the poor beginning). For example, the protagonist and Snape grew up in the same environment so they would not waste food. For example, the protagonist's observation of words and the characteristics of showing that he is not easy to bully are all characteristics of a grassroots protagonist. Although he is an indigenous protagonist and does not have the blessing of a systematic golden finger, I think it is not difficult to discover the secrets of each school year with the protagonist's intelligence. When I saw the protagonist before he was sorted, everyone else guessed that he would be a Gryffindor, but at that time I had a vague hunch that rather than courage, these things may be more obvious in the protagonist's contingency and judgment of the situation. In the end, it turned out to be true. In addition, I feel that this article does not stick to the original plot. The plot of the protagonist at the beginning of school has been expanded, and the plot of the first grade has also undergone major changes. Looking forward to what follows.

I feel like the name is wrong~ Why isn't it popular? The writing is really good. The author is very gentle and respects the characters. There are no conspiracy theories or vilifying the characters. The beautiful and gentle side of everyone's humanity is revealed without seeming to force truth, goodness and beauty. The protagonist is also very cute and lovable, and it's the best Hogwarts fanfic I've seen recently. But why is it not popular? Or do readers prefer the kind of non-brained, strategizing writing that seems to have all kinds of planning and thinking, but is actually invincible?

It's a pretty good book. I didn't click on it because of the book title introduction the last few times I read it. This time I read the comment section and started reading it again. The setting of the indigenous protagonist is quite good. His birth and childhood experiences have taught him to assess the situation, and he will fight back in an appropriate way when he encounters prejudice. The plot arrangement is quite good, and it seems that the 11-year-old protagonist is more mature than some time traveler protagonists. Come on, author! Looking forward to further developments.

Good news: this book is really good. Bad news: The author updates a chapter every half month now

I stumbled upon this article by chance, and it turned out to be very interesting to me! Kohler's character design feels particularly good, and the storyline is also very smooth and does not follow the regular flow (?) I hope that the main text does not have a specific CP (it is okay to have it, it depends on whether the author can control it with a large amount of writing, haha, I have seen many other fans who are so shocked by the direct description of the CP line) I feel that I saw a good suggestion from a book friend before. If the main text is not clearly marked or even stock trading is no problem, it is also suitable to be published again:)

The number of subscriptions and comments is obviously too low. One thousand collections and fifty comments are not reasonable. It is probably too high volume and not enough exposure. The poisonous point has not yet been seen in Chapter 17. Advantages 1. The beginning is very interesting, pretending to be Harry to start writing quickly 2. Although he is a pure Muggle native, there is no sense of disobedience. The protagonist is too smart and can easily get information to play Harry. How can I put it, the protagonist is similar to Conan, he can quickly deduce with a little information, and it is almost the same as knowing the plot if you don't know the plot 3. The original character design is very restored, There are no poisonous points in the character 4. The protagonist is cunning, brave, smart, curious but not reckless, a Gryffindor and a Slytherin, very good 5. Snape is very suitable, this guy is standard, even if you admit that you are a sharp-tongued kind 6. The protagonist is silent, here you can understand why you don't know the plot, how can you know the plot? Suppressing magic is very reasonable But I would like to give a few suggestions. Obscurans are very rare and usually do not live past the age of 11. They must either finish the game by themselves or be handled by the Ministry of Magic, so it is difficult for Professor McGonagall to encounter the case of Obscurus She is a good teacher, so she knows the protagonist Obscurus and sees the protagonist's interesting personality with her own eyes, but she can't see him at all. The feeling of depression The first reaction should not be to keep him, this needs to deal with his character. It is more likely to be concerned about what kind of family would suppress such a child into an Obscurus. And living until now, you brought into the first part of Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, and brought McGonagall into Newt, instead of seeing the Ministry of Magic directly attacking the Obscurus to know where the poisonous point is. The suggestion is that it is a free chapter anyway, so change it to. . . Just write it "Merlin's beard is only that big," Mag frowned and held the newspaper. She recalled the child's behavior and seemed to realize that just now she even thought that the child was a standard Gryffindor. How could there be an Obscurus in Gryffindor! This is just as ridiculous as saying those two mischievous Weasleys are Obscurials. With worried eyes, McGonagall looked up at Dumbledore, who was waiting for her to think. "Should I be worried about that child's admission? Albus." The entry age for Hogwarts is 11 years old, and the fact that the Obscurial can live to this age is an unrepeatable miracle. "No," Dumbledore slowly ate a bunch of cockroaches that were trying to escape, and winked at McGonagall, "We have a very good Potions Professor, so we don't need to worry about this problem for the time being." "Merlin! I will keep an eye on him after school starts." After not having to worry about the child's life, McGonagall was obviously relieved, and then she tightened her upper lip, which was also a sign before she got angry. "I think you probably need to visit his guardian in person, in person, Albus!" "Of course, I will." Dumbledore's hand reaching for the pile of cockroaches stopped silently. He did not look at McGonagall, even if she was worried that Harry might be chattering with suppressed magic like the child. He just looked at Fox, and the memories of his youth penetrated his heart like fragments. His sister, Ariana, Aberforth's child, Credence. At this moment, he seemed to be no longer the peak that even Voldemort dared not face, but just an old man with nothing. "Of course, no." He murmured to himself. It is a miracle for the Obscurial to live beyond the age of 11, and he wants to copy this miracle. Yes, he won't. He would not watch helplessly as the Obscurial's life slipped from his hands for the third time. "Albus?" McGonagall stopped complaining about Aunt Harry's family and looked doubtfully at Dumbledore, who didn't listen to her at all. Dumbledore calmly grabbed a pile of cockroaches, his wise eyes as usual. "Don't worry, they will be fine. Hogwarts is the safest place." Try to connect with the author's original text as much as possible. Just delete a paragraph and it will work. Let's see if it can be used in the author's plot arrangement.

In fact, from Voldemort's perspective, Kohler is a very interesting child. The same orphan had a rough life as a teenager, the same extraordinary talent, the same extraordinary bloodline (Voldemort's Parseltongue, Kohler's mermaid affinity), the same Slytherin who valued bloodline and ambition, the same favored by the headmaster of Slytherin/potions professor, the same favored by the professors, and the same emphasis on honor (Kohler's various bonus points). If Kohler's ambition was not to live a quiet life and not to speak Parselmouth, Voldemort might have looked familiar to him. Isn't this who you were when you first entered Hogwarts? ! ! ? ? ! I also have to wonder in my heart, did I have a child with that pureblood back then? They are exactly the same.

It's well written. Don't engage in Dumbledore conspiracy theories. It's too corny. At present, the male protagonist is like a hedgehog showing his thorns to all those who extend kindness to him. I hope there will be changes in the future. Growth will always make people empathize, but blind rejection will make people tired.

So far, it looks pretty good. It's a very interesting indigenous perspective. The lonely puppy is changing little by little. He is a bit like a father and son with Snape, and he won't be overly beautified, that is. . . I still don't even know who the two roommates are except Zabini. Taking into account flying class broomsticks, I don't even think boys can make up eight people in two dormitories. . . Twenty broomsticks is the amount of two colleges or men and women combined. . . . The protagonist's biological father blindly guessed that he is Tom. Firstly, the last name of the character tag is three characters (a random guess). Secondly, it seems that Tom has changed the most here. It seems that the smell is related? Then there is the title of savior. I heard what others said, and it is true. I searched specifically and couldn't find the title of savior. I could only search for the title of savior starting from the middle period. From the first chapter onwards, it was called the Boy Who Lived. . . . Also, I hope that the author will not be bound by the plot. The few paragraphs before Harry entered Quidditch still felt a bit deliberate. The conflict in Neville's crystal ball was changed and exploded due to the Mudblood incident. When I saw Quirrell, the troll and Quidditch Snape, I almost thought that the plot was going to be repeated again, but luckily it didn't happen. Finally, I'm asking for a heroine-less heroine. Emma has already tasted enough of the Hogwarts recommendations. . . . . . .

Is there a bill or a lot? If the author doesn't reply or says something he didn't think about, then I will default to stock trading.

Because I can't draw, I used picrew (a face-making website) to make the portrait of the protagonist Kohler. It felt quite cute. The original name of this avatar material is: Five Hundred Shitachiちメーカー.

Is the author going to update again? I really like this puppy. It is already a rare original character. We readers will accompany you when life is difficult. Please also give me a kick when I go to the development of external sites 😟

Why hasn't it been updated yet... Ahhh...

... Didn't I say that I didn't give up before? 😭 If I have something to say, I can't wait for you.

This book ranks among the top three HP fans in my HP fandom in terms of writing style and characterization. Don't be fooled 😢. Does the retest take so long? Does anyone know?