Disaster Beast Lord, Monster Stitching Starts from Taotie

The setting is so bad, who can read it if you are not a masochist? The introduction persuades you to quit.

The writing is too poor, the characters are just like marionettes, and they often cannot distinguish the importance and spend a lot of words describing the supporting characters. Even the group portraits are not such a waste of space, and what should I say about the protagonist, it gives people an inexplicable sense of stupidity, but this is not bad. The portrayal of other characters that are stiffer than stereotypes can only be said to be at the level of AI.

Not good, not worth reading 1. There are too many descriptions of supporting characters. You have not mentioned the protagonist once in this whole chapter. There are so many supporting characters that it is easy to be dazzled 2. Chapter 4, Strangers, has no background and then starts to express emotions, which is abrupt 3. The protagonist has traveled into another world, and he still understands this otherworld, but he only remembers a natural disaster of the undead. Are there no other chance materials? 4. Is the created creature worthy of being called a glutton? At least it has a degree of growth that can be seen with the naked eye 5. The paragraphs are too long, and it is difficult to read 6. You can say that you don't care about the boundary expansion, bronze and silver, etc., But if you want a remote town to be legendary, how explosive will this combat power be in the early stage?

It's so confusing. According to the author, he is a newcomer, so a newcomer writes group portraits. I don't understand what the author is thinking. I'm stuck with something that other veteran authors can't grasp.

As soon as the monster was created, he encountered robbers.

It's too confusing, and it feels like there is no main line. I saw the detective as the Riddler, but you have to let the readers know the protagonist's purpose first. It doesn't matter how you guess riddles with him later.

The tone of the narrative has the feel of translated literature. There are too many names and they often appear suddenly along with the plot that appears out of nowhere. It feels like I want to advance the plot through multiple lines but it is not handled well enough. Let me think about how to polish it again. Come on!

The road is long and long, I will search up and down, and encourage each other😁

It's so confusing, I don't know who the protagonist is

For example, the Classic of Mountains and Seas uses the story of Journey to the West as a reference theme. If you have a game theme, it will be easier to write if data appears. Your glutton's words look a bit familiar to you, he should be one from a certain movie. I've seen this. The protagonist is a foreigner. Then when the article appears, you can take a picture to make readers feel more involved. The protagonist should never be accompanied by a picture. Monsters can. Then what? Just set a goal. Then proceed with the process. How to solve difficulties? Then solve a difficulty and then take another step. Promote. Then keep moving forward. Improvement in social status. Improvement in strength. There are more monsters. You can copy the Zerg in this way. In terms of combat power, for example, sea, land and air. Logistics. For example, food supply. You think he is a pioneering noble. Need to recruit people. Then build the castle. We still have to recruit people later, and then we have to deal with monsters. There can be some monsters that are monsters and humans spliced ​​together. Like a nine-tailed fox. Shemale. Then the city management layering appeared, and then the level of the entire book was raised a bit, so that the protagonist did not need to manage everything. Whether it's strength or enjoyment. Some monsters are also very intelligent, and there is also a macro introduction to the world. And you are reborn into the game itself, and then go into the game to learn about certain things in the world, such as artifacts, equipment, medicinal materials, characters, and so on. This shows your intentions in every direction. In reality, for example, you are struck by lightning three times, and the lightning strikes every three seconds. P someone. He doesn't need a reason. But writing novels he needed. Then you have to say that he has an innate thunder-inducing body.