Traveling Through the Heavens Together, Bringing Top Talents

The self-destruction of time travel at the beginning of Dou Po is really disgusting. When we just met a fellow countryman, he really felt his heart out when he met a fellow countryman? ? Writing such a plot is completely self-indulgent. Zhu Tianwen's self-explosion of identity is inherently toxic, not to mention that the protagonist and Xiaoyan have nothing to do with each other. A stranger self-explodes his identity to get closer, just for the meager benefit, and he self-destructs completely. Is this a method that a normal protagonist would come up with? Author, why don't you read those popular time traveler novels? Apart from the funny ones about self-declaring a time traveler's identity in chat groups, which novel's protagonist is willing to self-destruct as a time traveler? And what those Zhu Tianwen who are so desperate for the street like to do most is to self-destruct as a time traveler. If the poisonous points are not removed well, there is no reason for your book not to be a hit.

Reading this book, the protagonist gives people the impression that he is just like a high school student with no experience. Whether it is getting along with people or dealing with things, he is like a high school student. He touches the back of his head at every turn and feels embarrassed and embarrassed at every turn. It is suitable for children. I don't really like high school students playing tricks and making awkward things.

It's too scattered. Suddenly jumping to another world has no sense of immersion at all. One world must be the main one and the others are supplementary. Write a little bit about each world. Can this also become a book?

Doupo is a bit stretched, please move forward faster.

I'm done with it, and I reveal my identity as a time traveler in Dou Po But I recognize all the original worlds of Dou Po, and you've already judged that it's a fan world, and you're still exposing yourself?

A plate of delicious food is simply replaced with dog food. How can such a switch look good?

I'm a bitch, can this be called a book? Cang Yuan Tu, a novel written an unknown number of years ago, You actually use him as the initial world. Are you really not afraid of rushing into the street?

Finally I've seen a manga of this type that doesn't include Japanese comics.

The plot is too big, far beyond the development of the protagonist in the early stage, and there is not much that can be written like this. Unless the progress is pressed

Everything else is fine and I can accept it. As for the clone talent of Swallowing Starry Sky, what does the author think? The reason why Luo Feng's Golden Horned Behemoth is at a higher level than humans in the original work is because he took the body, so theoretically, the Golden Horned Behemoth is the main body. You are the protagonist who has the clone talent himself. Why is the main body still at the star level, and the Qinglong clone is at the cosmic level? Anyway, take a look at the original work 😥

Wasteful protagonist, perfect scroll. See for yourself what the writing is and copy it from the original work.

This author messed up a lot of settings. The souls of the clones in Tomato's book are the same, and the laws and understandings are the same. You can cultivate different magical powers, but the laws are the same. In the previous Devouring Volume, your body has a domain. Is the strength of the Azure Dragon clone separate? Even if there is no grabbing method or secret method, the planet can be invincible in just one field.

A perfect plot is basically a copy of the original work, just adding a protagonist and completely following the plot. So what is the meaning of the protagonist's existence? Are you copying the original work and then inserting the protagonist into it?

What the hell is the plot so perfect? ​​Just copy it from the original work. You can just copy it from the original work later. You didn't write the book properly at all. What a fool.

Now, Cangyuan Tu has been successfully transformed into a battle, but the key point is not yet satisfying, and the same is true for swallowing. The key point is that you have already written three worlds in thirty chapters. The last two are not that exciting either.

The protagonist has such a bad character that just anyone can move him. This kind of person is easily taken advantage of emotionally. Moreover, if the enemy captures the protagonist's family and threatens him to commit suicide, he will either commit suicide or feel guilty and self-blame for the rest of his life, and become a waste from then on. I don't like this kind of protagonist who is easily touched by others for a little favor and wants to repay with his life. He has too many weaknesses, and all the people close to him are his weaknesses.

I've met several authors who cut off their posts without saying a word. The statement seemed like it was going to kill them.

Another book to follow is The Eunuch. 😭

Have you ever written any fan fiction about Rebirth: Urban Immortal Cultivator?

But it is true that the three golden chapters are so well written that people can wait for the rest. Some other books have such bad golden chapters that they can't read the rest no matter how exciting they are.

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The author could not be a student who wrote a novel and was discovered by his parents.