Douluo: Huo Yuhao Takes Revenge from the Beginning

Ji Li Gua La Ji Li Gua La is all true, no matter where you are forced to rely on, the plot is not much written, it is just like a fucking lecture

You should update it quickly. People who are reading it are a little confused now. Is your introduction the beginning of the novel?

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The idea is great, but it's a bit painful to read. It is best to re-touch it. You can consider polishing it with AI first and then revising it yourself.

Little Huo Niang

Little Huo Niang

Little Huo Niang

After reading more than ten chapters, I feel that the author really needs to read it and revise it after finishing it. Many of your paragraphs and writing are not fluent at all, and are completely inconsistent with the honest and elegant writing. We don't require good writing skills, the most basic fluency must be achieved. Also, the plot is a bit unclear, which may be due to the writing style. Sometimes half a chapter is written in a fog. If you want to throw away the settings, it is best to start a new paragraph, and don't squeeze everything into the content line. The other thing is dialogue, just be more verbal and just speak normally. The last step is to remove the modal particles in the narration settings and add modal particles to the dialogue. At least it looks more comfortable. This is my little opinion after reading more than ten chapters.

It's true that the soup is clear and waterless, and it's from a third-person perspective. It's really uncomfortable to watch. The writing is too weak. Maybe those who listen to the book can be a little better. It's not that there are no poisonous points, but the bland poisonous points are all bland. I can't read it after a week without reading.

Dear author, actually I think (personal suggestion) you can divide it into more paragraphs. Some paragraphs have too many words and are a bit complicated, so maybe you won't read them too carefully.

Why do you want to enter the Tang Sect? You should still be a dog, right?

There are too few dialogues. Most things can be expressed through dialogue, which can improve the sense of immersion. Now this thing is just like looking at the concept. The things are indeed there, but there is no sense of substitution. It is as bland as water and has no waves.

The heroine of the author must have Qiu'er. If you see it, please reply.

Why don't you open another one? Yours is boring.

It feels like I have been establishing three views for people

Who is Yuhao's CP? Is it the time traveler Wang Yi?

Author, you have more than 70 chapters with only 180,000 words. Can you write more in each chapter?

The author's book must be at least 800,000 words long! Please reply if you see it.