Who Told Him to Get It?

I would like to advise you not to write books in the future, but to find a job. In this state, writing is just an excuse for yourself. Just write about someone who ends at the beginning. What kind of sweet dreams do you think about? Even those platinum masters have not seen it on the list even after writing the beginning.

No one is normal, up and down, bright and dark, unhappy

The subject matter is very good and novel, but the protagonist in the storyline has spent a lot of time and energy to develop a magical knack. But he only got a Bull Demon Transformation, and the abilities he displayed were very rough, and the protagonist, a reborn person, had a weak mind and weak skills. After escaping and entering the mountain village, his performance was even worse. A person who had opened the Bull Demon Aperture was caught by an old lady and was taken away. A person who had opened the Bull Demon Aperture was blown by a sinister wind and felt as if his blood coagulated. Without the means to communicate with each other, what's the point of your Bull Demon Aperture? The magic trick introduced before is so awesome and amazing, but the protagonist behaves like a weak chicken. He escapes from the magic cave and enters the tiger's den. Is the protagonist a disaster? Such strange phenomena often occur in a remote mountain village. It is very strange how such a mountain village can exist, survive, and continue?

The signing editor may have something to do today. The signing process was submitted yesterday and the signing process will not be released until 6pm this afternoon. Good things come in a long way, so come on!

What a pity for a good book. The protagonist behaves like an old idiot. He can obviously kill the enemy with 1 kilogram of force, but he uses 100 kilograms to become an idiot. And his behavior is abnormal, like a fool possessed by a demon.

You should be more decisive when killing, it's too frustrating and boring.

The subject matter is interesting and the content is okay, but the overall content is a bit messy, causing your book to plummet.

This kind of toy book can be pushed by hand

Not polished well. A lot of content is very fast, which means the plot is very sloppy. Other authors are too slow, this article is too fast, it should be slower. After the content is expanded and written, the next plot should be logical and coherent. Let readers anticipate what will happen next. The author of this article probably doesn't even know what to write next or what content to follow.

The subject matter is good, but it looks a bit messy.