Elf Steel Master

My personal suggestion is to reduce the plot of killing Pokémon. Your book is not a dark novel, and not many people like it. Writing this part deliberately will make people feel bad. Please don't use the plot of killing Pokémon in the special comic as an excuse. What everyone wants to read is the bond between people and Pokémon, not the cold-blooded Pokémon hunters.

My opinion is that the elf's speech has been deleted, which makes it look awkward. Otherwise, the protagonist can understand it a little bit.

Steel Pokémon

It's okay. You need to reduce the Pokémon dialogue. It's too dramatic.

Steel series is only suitable for rich people, the protagonist is too poor

You have to raise Saifuhao and Dianxi to find various gold and diamond mines and other rare mineral veins to make money in order to raise a steel type.

The advantage is that the writing style is okay and the writing is quite detailed. The disadvantage is that I don't know if it is correct. The Pokémon is too anthropomorphic. It may be caused by the dialogue. I suggest describing it from the heart instead. Of course, if the data is good, there is no need to change it. It depends on how many people like it.

Steel type or hacker character, I wouldn't believe it without Metagross, not to mention there is a wild flash, and 80% of it also has a 3D dragon.

With your introduction, why don't you write a dark article? Killing Pokémon like this

Also, the Pokémon's cries have lines. If the protagonist's ability is set to be able to understand Steel Pokémon, then there is no need to change it at all.

That's it, I think the writing is okay 😅

From the current point of view, there is nothing too harmful except for the price of 800 words at the beginning. As for the possible problems in the later stage, that is the theory of qualifications. At present, the locals have said that the strength of Pokémon is ordinary elite. If the qualifications are also determined to be the king of champions at birth, it will directly determine the possibility of death for a lifetime. , Then it will be completely retro and become a completely unpleasant path Because no matter how you say it, the protagonist cannot have a Pokémon with championship qualifications from the beginning. Under that premise, Buckman caught in the early stage, no matter what happens later, it will be poisonous to abandon it or not. And it is too lineage-based, which can easily make people disgusted.

The protagonist who is a cyber hacker? Then why not travel to Digimon? It would be more advantageous.

Since it is the steel type, which has the best resistance, how about forming a team? I have read a lot of Pokémon fan fiction, but I don't think I have seen the protagonist who forms a team. And the people in the Pokémon world are not strong either