1394: Cultivating Immortality Across Two Worlds

Except for the two circles of Wenzhaogong, which are a bit interesting, what everyone else writes is a piece of shit.

Here comes the old reader, who has read your hero's destiny. The writing is very good, but it's a pity that the outline of the later Invincible Lord was missing? Support the author now

The writing is good, but I have some suggestions for you. Write more plots about the development of different worlds. Look at the authors who write about time travel between two worlds. They are all authors who mainly write about how to develop in different worlds. As for just taking it with you where you live. In addition, although you are writing about a junior high school student, his way of dealing with others should also improve step by step. At the very least, readers should feel that he is gradually growing. Rather than intuitively, he has been living in an age of innocence.

When you read books from both worlds, you want to read wonderful stories, but the author spends a lot of pen and ink to describe some cultivation methods, techniques, and principles... Content like this, no matter how consistent your logic is, is self-enjoyment and self-pleasure. It is difficult for readers to resonate with it, because everyone knows that this is what the author is making up. The false is greater than the true, and it is tasteless and a pity to discard. That's how I feel.

What I wrote above feels a little bit toxic. It should be because the age of the protagonist is too young, which makes people feel a bit "mentally retarded" when they first enter the other world. The writing at the end is okay. What do you think of giving the protagonist a first grade in junior high school? . .

The first three chapters are set in the first grade of junior high school. They become classmates after being exported to a different world, and they even left behind the teaching aids. I can understand the character set by the author. But when it comes to Chapter 9, when facing representatives of several families in Fang City, he can be neither humble nor arrogant, generous and generous, with extraordinary bearing and dexterity. I read six chapters, not six years.

In what state of mind did the author write? Who are you writing to if you are so poisonous?

Although the protagonist is very immature at first, I feel pretty good after watching it. I look forward to the update 😁

It's not like a novel written by a human being. Don't read it.

The quality of Qidian articles is getting lower and lower now. This kind of quality is too low.