My Wife Is a Magical Girl, How Can I Be a Villain?

The protagonist who turned into a virtual beast suddenly spoke, the wife who was released from the transformation did not return to her original state, and the one-year marriage suddenly turned into three years. Is this the author's indifference or the harm of the introduction? Predict what will happen next, there will be no breakdown next time

First of all, I can say clearly that I can watch it. But I hope the author will use your trenchant reverse order and narrative technique. Your character creation is not bad, and although the plot arrangement is a bit stiff, there is no big problem. What makes me most uncomfortable is your reverse order, the fantasy section. If the plot hadn't already ended, just reading that chapter would be too confusing. Just because the character is inexplicably controlled by skills does not mean that readers also need to be controlled by skills. Overall it's not bad, you can take a look for entertainment.

To be honest, what I wrote earlier is okay, there are no flaws, there are some minor flaws, but I can read it. The shortcomings mentioned in many comments are actually not a problem. For example, someone said before: The gangster was caught by the heroine but he didn't dare to kill her, didn't dare to force her, etc. This is not a problem. Just like Trevor stole the atomic bomb, he didn't dare to sell it, and finally gave it back. The same goes for the gangster. If he doesn't move the heroine, he still has hope of survival and has chips. If he kills him, he will be done with it. Similar problems pointed out by some book reviews do not exist. But around Chapter 300, first the boss Sha Rensha magical girl. The male protagonist knew about it, but he pretended not to see it and continued to go to work and continue to work hard. Well, I can understand your low moral bottom line. But I really can't understand what the two protagonists are doing. It's as if their IQ has suddenly returned to kindergarten and everything is taken for granted. After the male protagonist was exposed, the male and female protagonists had a fight and then went home to sleep? ? ? The next day, the woman hid the man and went to work, but she still hid him at home? Does she think that no one can find out that she is the best in the world? No, it was discovered immediately later. The male protagonist is even more outrageous. After everyone discovered that there was a problem in the company, they did not run away or make any preparations. They continued to go to work and threw themselves into a trap. You said that running away now proves your guilt, but you have already been exposed. There is too much evidence. Even if you go to work and your colleagues ask you to turn into a monster, you will turn into a monster. You will also turn into a monster in front of a witch in public. No brother, what are you doing? You can't run away even if you transform? The heroine just vouched for you yesterday that you are not a virtual beast, and then you stopped acting the next day. You could have beaten her, but you couldn't beat her, and you were killed. All this behavior is like losing one's mind. There is no logic at all. To be honest, I can't stand it anymore.

The creativity is good but the writing skills are worrisome. It was a bit messy in the early stage. The rest is fine to be honest, whether it is the plot arrangement or the degree of distortion, it is okay.

After reading the second half, I can only say that there is always a reason why this book is so boring. If it weren't for my interest in the subject matter, I wouldn't have been able to get through to this point. It's too outrageous. It can be said that I feel aggrieved from time to time while reading. It can be said that it is the reader's own problem, but it is too outrageous that you read it all the way and it is so bland that you don't have any mood swings or expectations at all.

If the protagonist is not the protagonist, wouldn't it mean that he is being cheated? My wife likes someone else

I don't understand why so many people criticize them. New authors also need to be more tolerant and tolerant, right? There are some flaws in the plot, but the overall plot direction is still good. It is my first time to write an online article, and it is based on a magical girl theme. It is actually quite good to achieve such results. There is no need to be too strict. In fact, you must clearly distinguish the primary and secondary conflicts in everything you do. Nowadays, many people complain that the writing style is not good. There will be flaws, but it does not affect the overall reading and understanding. So the writing style is not the main contradiction for the author. Emphasizing secondary contradictions over principal contradictions is obviously an isolated and one-sided view of the problem and a metaphysical mistake. In addition, it is recommended that there be more plots between Tang Ming and Xing Yu or Lin Ruoyu, and a little less about the others. The main plot is too slow to advance. The plot between Ye Jingjing and Tang Ming is also okay. I hope they can promote each other in the future instead of having a stomachache and causing a thunderstorm in the plot. Furthermore, no matter whether it is more or less, I hope it can be updated continuously. The world view of magical girls is difficult to set, and many of them have been cut off directly or given warnings because the plot does not comply with regulations. No matter it's more or less, whether it's a bad ending or not, I still hope it ends as a whole story, not a fragment. Of course, try not to be unfinished. It is indeed a good innovative magical girl novel. I hope that both the story itself and the development of the novel can be well explained.

What can I say, the plot in Guangxian City is too abstract. Lin Ruoyu's magical girl's abilities were blocked, and she was imprisoned forcibly. (This hacker is so easy-going! He was simply locked up and used as a hostage. If the two people on the roadside got angry, they would punch, kick and kill them.) ( You are also afraid of thunder, so you can't make up a reasonable plot.) Lin Ruoyu and Tang Ming were not weak before losing their memory. They didn't have any backup skills at all. It's really outrageous. The villains are not that stupid. The Guangxian City part is just like the two. (At least, Fangzhou City still has the ability to protect itself.) (Xiao Yan's three-year period has come, and the Dragon King has returned. The couple is becoming more and more frustrated as the plot progresses.)

I have an unfamiliar xxn wife who doesn't earn any money but still has quarrels and quarrels. After I lost my job, I joined a black company and was severely punished by the police. I work with my head on my waistband and I don't know when I will die. My boss has no formal appearance every day and often messes up things and makes me wipe my own ass. Why do I feel that the protagonist is so tired?

I feel like there will be a book with the opposite title in the future: My husband is a magical girl, how can I be a villain?

Many readers think that the author has a bug in the plot. I'm baffled by everyone's understanding. I am not targeting readers of this book, but I have seen this situation in many book review areas. Whenever the clues about the author are buried a little deeper, some readers will start to complain about the author's poor writing skills. For example, Yi Wei Xia's "Asian Girl Control" is a typical dessert light novel. The plot couldn't be more straightforward. Some people are confused after watching the plot. For another example, "God Talked Trash in Your Ears" is a typical Haruhi Suzumiya-style plot. A lot of people in the book review section said they couldn't understand it. Going back to this book, "Magical Girl", whether the couple was married for one year or three years, some people expressed questions in the book review area. Is it really that difficult to understand?

It feels like the author wanted to write something profound, but couldn't quite grasp it. Why not get some industrial saccharin first and let us enjoy it. Based on the title and introduction, not many people really come here to watch magical girls fight monsters.

I feel that this book has a good plot and character creation, and the background setting is quite interesting, but there is a problem with the rhythm, and the writing style also needs to be improved. The main plot is too obscure, the protagonist seems to be dawdling, and various foreshadowings are buried like bugs. The battle scenes are also a bit unbearable, making it difficult to form a specific impression and stimulate emotions. But overall it's pretty good. I look forward to future updates and the author's progress.

Why is the pace so slow? After 200,000 words, the main plot is still not developed, and the protagonist is too dull and just follows the crowd, not understanding anything or seeking knowledge.

Well, I can't say "pure". The subject matter is still interesting, but I still couldn't stand it after reading most of it because of the subject matter. I would like to ask, does the author know what he is writing? Have you ever written an outline and detailed outline? Have you ever figured out the character logic? Have you studied the settings carefully? Have you considered pacing? The character creation is not mentioned at all. For a long time, the male and female protagonists have no character charm, and they do not say what kind of arc they show. . . Not to mention anything else The further we go, the more chaotic it becomes. Although I can understand what the author wants to do and write, it is really a mess to read. It can't be said that I don't have talent. The theme + the overall and some detailed plot design are still interesting. As a newcomer, if you really don't have talent, you may not even sign the contract. But after you finish coding, you really should read it yourself. . Can you really not be left speechless by what you wrote? You can't just move forward according to your general idea, and then fill in the unreasonable areas when you're done. This is very hard. . . . At least take the next one seriously and arrange the outline and details first. Think about the motivations, behavioral logic, etc. Of your characters, etc., And "make them become real people" instead of simply giving you a tool to advance the plot/complete your great cause of "making dumplings for this plate of jealousy", okay?

Hmm, for the protagonist to become the villain, I originally thought it was a kind of villain like a longing, but it turned out to be a murderous monster? If the author doesn't explain this clearly, it will be a bit hard to accept to be honest. In addition, just delete the comments that maliciously curse you. It will not only affect the first impression of your novel by subsequent people (you must know that some people decide whether to read the book after reading the comments), there is no need to keep it and spread a bad smell.

Still fighting, still fighting, it's just a joke to keep the tower open. The tower has no combat power. It all depends on the plot. Sometimes the body and the cocoon fight each other without breaking the defense. At the next moment, the illusion is activated to control the whole scene.

Overall, this book is very uncomfortable to read. The subject matter is okay, but the content is very dull and has no igniting or explosive points. It is like reading a running account. Many places are a bit inexplicable.

7 Pictures, this does not add any detail

The writing is too poor, the details are too crude, and the plot is bloody... Sigh.

I forgot about the front, and I forgot about the back. In short, they are really a pair of fateful mandarin ducks.

It was okay in the early stage, but in the middle stage, it started to have poisonous points one after another. Overall, it can only be rated as a mediocre work.

Eight monthly passes

Will the male protagonist turn into that powerful being in the future The one with a female body and a female voice?