Joy of Life: Beneath the Shadows

Actually, the plot of time-travel fanfiction is toxic, arguably the most toxic aspect of all fanfiction.

The protagonist is single-mindedly focused on becoming an immortal, abandoning his house, money, and beautiful women. Why then does he insist on going to Kyoto? It's inexplicable and very puzzling. There's some innovation, but not much.

The author should probably delete the first five words. In the spring of the fourth year of the Qingli era, Fan Xian had grown up; he wasn't four years old when he went to the capital.

Why do fan fiction writers always seem to revolve around the main character, copying their plots exactly?

What is your book about? What are you trying to express? It's completely disjointed.

Zhang Lingyu's junior brother, still called Zhang Lingyu

The protagonist's fawning over Haitang Duoduo in the State of Qi felt out of character and was a major flaw. After that, I didn't want to read much anymore. He's supposed to be an immortal, with a mind and spirit far beyond the mortal realm, yet he's portrayed like a sycophant meeting a goddess and falling in love at first sight. It lacks the character development of Zhang Lingyu from "Under One Person," making it feel very cliché.

Sorry, after reading it, I felt it was just a forced plot. Goodbye.

Zhang Lingyu asked Zhang Lingyu what Xia He looked like? This immediately broke the immersion.

According to the established setting of "Under One Person," Zhang Lingyu is simply not cut out for cultivation. He lacks sincerity, is dishonest with himself, and his talent is only average compared to the top-tier characters with special abilities.