That's Not How the Machine Girl Operates!

This book is undoubtedly well written. Although there is a lot of room for improvement, the basic skills are quite solid. I heard that the author will read the comment section, so I will say more. The author is probably new, and may have written a book before, but has not finished it, or it is very short. Although the handling of many parts is not so satisfactory, there are no mistakes, or there are no mistakes that affect the perception. The overall rhythm and writing style are also above the standard. It's really good-looking, and it's worth watching. It's just that the update is too slow, so I don't recommend reading it. The only problem at the moment is that the upgrade routine is a bit too repetitive. Although the plot is different every time, the overall structure is not very different. Get new equipment, improve your bonds, break through yourself, get a higher ranking on the field, and then your opponents will be moved, and they will break through themselves together, and finally start a live broadcast, and netizens will follow suit, and then express the shock of the riders on the larger stage, or the shock of the riders present, especially some high-ranking people must also be shocked. Of course, this high-ranking person is a person with greater power or level compared to the protagonist's current stage, and it is not the kind of person who is directly pulled to the top. I like this routine very much, but I doubt if I will feel tired if I continue to write more than 500 pictures with this routine? This is a small loop that is refreshing. Although it is repetitive, it is well done in structure and structure. The overall main line seems to be relatively clear now. I am also very curious about how the author plans to unfold it, but I have to say that it is just two old men fighting for the direction of a club for the sake of ideals. There is nothing wrong with this, but it can only be said to be quite satisfactory. And the protagonist's sense of participation in it is a bit weak. It has been a bit weak so far. I don't know how it will develop in the future, but for now it seems more like a group of NPCs pushing their own plot, and the protagonist playing his own role there. There is some interaction between the two sides, but not much. Although I know this book is about a group portrait, the group portrait aspect is a bit too weak. It's more like wherever the protagonist goes, a partner appears, and then after dealing with this partner, it enters the next stage of the story. Then when we start a group with the boss in the future, everyone lends their strength to me, and the partners I called before will come out to help fight together. I know this aspect will definitely change in the future when the game starts to get more exciting, but for now this is the state. The other is whether the author writes too much about racing? This is a point of view that I personally prefer. Many times I would rather see the protagonist think and grow, and be appropriately frustrated, whether it is failure or anything else. But what I see now is a protagonist with almost no growth curve. He has been winning since the beginning and has been rising in a straight line. The thing with the growth curve is his car, not the person himself, so until now my understanding of the protagonist is actually relatively vague. He said those words and did those things, but as for his inner tendencies and inner logic, I don't know anything except that he wants to win and race cars. In other words, the protagonist is the person who feels most unfamiliar to me in this whole book. Characters should be flesh and blood, not deified and conceptualized. In addition, the recent emotional scenes have been relatively weak. The emotional scenes between the protagonist and Jackdaw gave me the feeling that the author thought there should be an emotional scene here, and then put it in. The cause and effect were clearer and clearer, more like shooting an arrow first and then drawing a target. I may have thought of other questions, but I have forgotten them now. I talked too much just now, so I'll stop here. But overall, among all the new books that I have been impressed by in recent months, this book is the one I am most optimistic about. The author does not need to rush to improve himself quickly in this book. The most important thing is to complete the story first. There is no shortcut to writing a novel. It is all accumulated over time and simmered slowly. If we only look at the writing style and plot, if the author writes two or three more books like this and continues with this momentum, judging from the appetite of this old man with 15 years of reading experience, I think it will still be platinum.

The only regret I have about reading this book is that I couldn't finish it in one sitting and had to wait for the update.

So cool! I felt so happy after reading the final battle between Zhou Ye and the Forbidden City in one go! The author has perfect control over the details and psychological description of the game. Every minute and every second, a huge flow of information washes through my cerebral cortex, making the picture of the game in my mind so solid that I am immersed in it. The reaction of the audience and the commentators during the race was also very vivid, which perfectly adjusted the tense and exciting racing process, just like ketchup is to French fries, and cream is to cakes. Although it is suspected of being watered down, it makes people feel as comfortable as pouring a sip of iced Coke between hot pots. It is no exaggeration to say that, at least for me, this decisive battle is the author's peak level in the past hundreds of chapters, and it is very enjoyable Of course, the disadvantages are also quite obvious. Because I tied it in one go, I had to raise another two hundred chapters (Great Compassion). In short, thank you for the treat. Take it, author, this is all my votes! You must update it!

From 6 o'clock to 9:30, after reading 70 chapters in a row, my feeling is that I want to fuck Qingluan (scratched to death), no, the author's emotion management in this article is really good, he has me under control. The previous article slowly lays the groundwork, and the author occasionally gets a little nervous when it's sweet. There are basically no pitfalls in the plot and the principles of racing mentioned in the article (it only takes two or three chapters at most). The thrill of the racing chase is really strong. At this time, the advantages of excellent writing are reflected. Come out, and the writing gives me the pleasure of driving A9 and other games, the pleasure of braking with my prostate (slashing to death), and the stupidity of Jackdaw. These character descriptions are really unflattering (I have no literary talent, and the vocabulary of praise is limited.) However, the shortcoming is obvious. Compared with other cool novels, the plot is relatively slow. It would be okay if I chased continuously for one day, but it would be very uncomfortable if I chased every day. The emotional build-up is too long, and the author only updates it every day in about ten pages, but the plot is very coherent (For example, for the game I just finished updating, I went out to play a WC, and when I came back, I felt uncomfortable reading it, so I went back and read it again to connect it), which makes it feel very halting if you follow it daily. Personally, I suggest that if you write a love line and update 5,000 a day, it's okay, but if you are a high-end person, you should try to save a few, and then update it for a few days. If you follow the party every day, you should be satisfied. And... I wonder if the author can satisfy my small selfish wish? It seems that the author has played F1 and WRC a lot, so... Can you consider writing a race at the Shanghai circuit? I really want to know what it would be like if Zhou Yun ran the No. 1234 Here and then went to the big straight. (If this is really written, remember to give me a kick, at least a monthly pass (ps; the best thing I can give so far is a monthly pass) At the same time, I suggest you read the rules of WRC and F1 before reading it. After reading it, it is really fun to follow this novel. And the author is also relatively good in racing articles. I haven't seen such a cool article in the climax for a long time. Come on, author, don't stop this novel.

Like the title, is it missing or is it wrong?

Not bad, please stick to it

It's so good-looking, I've had it for so long and I finished it in one go. . .

It's too uncomfortable to look at. Yangyiyangxian

In this world view, both the driver and the driver are working hard on the field. The driver and the driver can say: "Why do you race if you are afraid of death?" The media can also promote the driver's fearless spirit. The protagonist, the driver, and the supporting driver, none of them are afraid of death, because they are working hard, and I want to focus on this point. But the race team, team manager, and technical director cannot say this, because if the rules encourage drivers to die, it is anti-human and anti-moral, and their duty is to ensure the safety and fairness of the competition. A game between old and dead people cannot be held. So the race team will have a series of invisible confrontations with the drivers. The drivers want to fight more aggressively, but the race team won't let them and use rules to limit them. Each one is a bloody lesson. The team managers are more neutral. If the results are not good, they will let it go and even force the drivers to work hard. If the results are good, they will choose to maintain points. These are some of my personal thoughts while writing, thank you for watching.

Personally, I think it's not as good as the Tomato book. Just comparing the front one, the latter Tomato book really feels worse.

I've been waiting for two days, and if it doesn't work, I'll run away. To be honest, this plot is a bit difficult. I don't think it can be avoided. People from a whole city come to catch the protagonist. How do you let the protagonist run away? There is a helicopter overhead, and there are so many racers and underground racers coming to get the protagonist. Are you going to arrange for the protagonist to use up favors to get out of trouble? I will not talk about this dilemma for the moment. Is it caused by the protagonist himself? It is difficult to end it simply by writing it like this. You are facing a state agency and a driver from a city, and after the game, the protagonist Jackdaw, the machine girl, must be the one. How do you explain that Jackdaw is the protagonist? And isn't there still a way to mess with your protagonist? It's not good and it's poisonous

What Zhou Yun got was a script for setting up his own racing team. I didn't want to write that there was a boss behind Zhou Yun. Zhou Yun himself was the boss. The plot of Linglu Club is just a warm-up, unfolding the world view and paving the way for grudges and grudges. Before entering the world championships, Zhou Yun will have his own team. Hope everyone supports it!

Being so resistant, I have already thought of 4 ways to increase my goodwill and synchronization rate. The question is where to get the machine girl.

This is the first time I've seen someone with the same subject matter as Tomato

Isn't this the copy from next door?

The subject matter is very attractive, racing, machines and girls, a combination of punches that men can't refuse. It clicked, and it didn't take long for me to click in. But the actual experience is not good. To be more specific, the max-level protagonist travels to a world where even though he has an organic girl, he is not good at driving. At the beginning, it feels like an invincible novel. It is not until chapter 45 that he has really run through it. The front is full of pressure, all pressure. After time travel, he is looked down upon without academic qualifications, even if he is a big boss. When applying for a job, he expresses his advanced ideas and is looked at as a fool. The car I modified was competing with the former retired champion driver's car. When I was about to win, the car blew up. Finally, the former champion was appreciated and pushed the protagonist to join the club directly. However, the owner of the club had no brains and felt that although the protagonist was appreciated by the former champion and almost won, he was just a car repairman and a noob. He could not drive a racing car, so he begged to sign a betting agreement before joining. It's useless to enter the club. The owner of the club has already gambled and lost all his money and has no resources. The two robot girls who train the protagonist are two gangsters. They don't use snacks to lure them into the car. The national football team was also sewn into the game. Rich people with connections wanted to bring money to join the game. The club owner immediately thought about how to kick the protagonist without paying the liquidated damages. It is also difficult for the protagonist to tame his own robot girl. It is impossible to buy it. He must find a robot girl who wanders on the street, suffers from mental illness and mental illness, is not mentally sound, cannot speak well, and runs away after eating and destroying food. Finally, the robot girl was recruited, and the club was founded with the money from the house and factory sold by the adoptive father. The competition was about to start, but pressure from peers came. They were not allowed to recruit employees and tried to install undercover agents. They arranged people to block the road and block the seats in the competition field, and even maliciously violated the rules to deduct points for the male protagonist. The expressiveness of the racing session is also not good, there is no sense of graphics, who uses what skills to have what impact and speed increase, the drift exceeds xx places. Why do we need skills such as acceleration and deceleration that cause negative effects? This kind of thing is only fun when the protagonist uses it. If not used, it is as disgusting as playing games and constantly disconnecting the network card. After reading more than 60 chapters, I am still not happy. Instead, this common method in reality comes one after another. We have seen too many national football teams in reality. Even the novel is not a story of pure love and racing. I can only give a first order to support it.

The smuggling episode looked really shitty, dragging out and frustrating. It looks like the male protagonist is in the limelight, but in the end, only a few people are chasing such a big smuggling matter. The power of the smuggling group is much more powerful than the mounted police.

The first thing that attracted me was the setting. I believe many people came here because of this. Some people said that it borrowed settings from other books, but I don't comment on this. When reading the free chapters, I often feel like giving up the book. My emotions are aroused, but the next chapter is disappointing. Many readers have also discussed it in the chapter reviews. There is nothing wrong with the outline and plot alone. The development of the story is quite reasonable, and there is nothing wrong with the specific description of individual chapters. The character descriptions of many characters are also okay, but the viewing experience is not very good, which is frustrating. I personally think that there are areas where the author needs to improve, but I don't necessarily have to listen 1. The free chapters need to be reduced. There are a lot of chapters that I pulled back and forth before starting the game in the early stage, and the supporting roles can be interspersed later. 2. This is the most important. The description of the protagonist's failure is a bit too much and not satisfying enough. Too many failures in the early chapters will make readers very resentful. The description of the game clearly has strong statistics, but it often seems that the protagonist needs to work hard to win, and the supporting characters improve very quickly, giving people a feeling of overwhelming power. 3. Although the distribution within the chapters is good, there is a problem with the number of chapters assigned according to the outline. The author should also be aware that his rhythm is often complained about. My suggestion is that supporting characters should not take up more space than before within a certain period of time, and supporting characters that have little effect should not be written in detail. For example, I don't care much about the love-hate relationship between parts factory owners and several team owners. I just know that they are sending equipment. If you want to write a group portrait, I can only say that it is not exciting enough because of the previous problems. Although I have mentioned so many problems, I think this book has potential. If the author can improve his rhythm and writing style, and revise the free chapters before driving people away, more people will read it. I think the book and emotional scenes written by the author are much more interesting than other parts.

I can only say that the approach is wrong. There is something really wrong with a car, not writing about the competition, and doing this kind of blunt pretense and slap in the face here. Racing theme, fantasy writing, I can only say this

You don't need to read the previous chapters, just start from Chapter 45

I would like to ask how you guys read it. There are a lot of comments. The more I read it, the more annoyed I am. To be honest, this is the first time 😰😰

The whole story is pretty good, I hope this book doesn't have a plot where it doesn't violate any rules but it gets cleared up. The female competitor in the Tomato book was late for the race and it disgusted me. The author also wrote about a bunch of flatterers who blamed others and directly whitewashed the female driver. He didn't even mention the fact that the female competitor used her background to force her into the track after being late. At the end, the female competitor said that I had made a mistake and I would make up for it. It was only a green tea table, and the machine girl watched the violation and didn't say anything. It was really disgusting.

MD, I am really convinced by the author. The rhythm is so impressive. Do you understand what the rhythm of an online article is? Do you think you are writing a world masterpiece?

There's too much nonsense. It's ten chapters and the protagonist doesn't even have a car. Why don't you start with the division of the egg cell?

Collection post for Ji Niang, please see the chapter about pursuing reading for details.

Brother, Tomato 🍅 also has a book with the same name. The world view is well written and can be used as a reference. Unfortunately, it has been eunuched. I don't know if I can still read it.

I just want to see some new tricks used by the girl in daily life and competitions to win and pretend to be awesome. What is this writing now? There are so many chapters about catching a smuggler. I came here to see this? The water would overflow the golden mountains, right?

To be honest, it's hard for me to imagine how the book friends who are following the update can get through the dozens of chapters of Nimbus Civil War. Everyone who comes here comes to see how you write about racing, and they want to see the starting point of the business war. Originally, if you were faster at this place, you would be able to have fun quickly. However, your update speed was not fast either, so everyone was stuck here and couldn't even take a breath. After going back and forth, my patience has been worn out. Do you think this pursuit of reading will make you lose a lot? Also, even if you simplify this part, will it have a big impact on your overall text? I don't understand why it took so long to write this plot. Then if we get to the World Championship later and have dozens of chapters like this, who can bear it? 😥

The pace is so slow that it makes people uncomfortable. If you want to write at a slow pace, then you don't have to foreshadow it. After you have done the foreshadowing, write slowly, write about frustrations, and write about obstacles. What is the ancient way of writing novels? If you don't know this set of templates, you won't be able to write, right? Have you played Gala Game too much? Every now and then, a little bit of poison, coupled with a slow pace, and then all kinds of foreshadowing, and the last wave of fun, isn't this the template of a post-engagement story where the protagonist is bullied in various ways, and then the Dragon King returns? Just all kinds of delays, poor rhythm control, making people uncomfortable to watch. The main plot is advanced bit by bit, but after pushing more than 30 chapters, I found that not much has been pushed at all. If you want to make up for the settings, you can, but you don't need to do it while laying the groundwork, and then add the slow turtle crawling to advance the main plot Forcibly and artificially create all kinds of difficulties. Then the heroine is set to be mentally disturbed and goes crazy from time to time to create difficulties. The way it is written is that she finally has hope, and then is rejected and reversed, reversed and reversed again. It is tiring to watch. A poisonous point is planted here, a poisonous point is buried there, and then the setting is very powerful. The protagonist of the invincible style is delayed and has to appear at the last time, right? If you want to write well and carefully, you are not a novice, but you have to break out of this template. While writing within the template, you are dragging, fixing settings, slowing down, and writing about racing girls. In the end, after reading the first 30 chapters, only girls are left, and there is no speed at all! Anyway, it was quite tiring to watch. I wanted to identify the poison for those who want to see it later. I was so angry that I recharged and posted.

319, 322 Are duplicates, 320, 321, 313 are duplicates, 310, 311, 324 are additional chapters, 6 chapters are invalid subscriptions, what is the author doing? Send as much as you want, can you be sincere?