There Is Indeed Something Wrong with My Xiuxian Narration

First of all, I have read 80 to 90% of this book and paid for it in real terms. I also feel that I am qualified to say this. I want to make a harsh statement, that is, the author cannot write better! Yes, no, some people will say that this is a slow novel, but I want to say that a good novel should have a sense of relaxation and relaxation. Obviously, the author cannot balance it well. I have seen posts in the comments now saying that the protagonist is a good-for-nothing clown, and anyone can step on the protagonist. To be honest, these comments are not entirely correct, but it is true that it should be said. Then I point out that the core point of the problem is that the protagonist has almost never had a fight that makes readers feel comfortable reading. Even though the author has explained it many times before, but read the whole article Even though he has a perfect state, a variety of sword skills, and a variety of adventures, the protagonist has never fought a crushing battle. If you say that the NPC that you have talked about in a few words is not considered a trash fish, then I didn't say it. In fact, it's like what I see now. The little villain NPC named Xiao has no personality charm and no important plot factors. As a result, he fought the protagonist for several chapters in Chapter 106. Ah, yes, you would say that the protagonist won in the end and was not even injured, but did you feel comfortable with this battle? The protagonist fights back and forth with him. Does it have any impact on the subsequent plot? Author, you can think about this problem, because this problem exists in all previous chapters. Maybe someone will tell me, oh, he has something, so he can fight the protagonist back and forth, but am I saying that this kind of thing is important? It's still this character. I've read Chapter 106. I can't figure out what effect it will have on the rest of the story if he plays so many words with the protagonist? So since it has no impact, why should we strengthen him? Wouldn't it be nice to set it up as a stepping stone character that highlights the coolness? But the author didn't, and it was the same before The author has said before that he doesn't want to write a brainless and cool article, but if you keep writing like this, won't it even be inferior to a brainless and cool article? There must be a degree of relaxation, so naturally there must be dullness, troughs, and excitement. Will anyone really hate the excitement plot? I don't think so. Everyone just hates mindless cool novels. If a slow-burning novel is relaxed and relaxed, then there must be some coolness, because there is dullness and foreshadowing, and then there is a trough, and finally there will definitely be an explosive point, a burst of coolness. Otherwise, in a slow-burning novel, you slowly write so much and write so many details. Then you tell me, it's not exciting, I just wrote a lot of details, then I can only say that you deserve to die violently It's a bit far-fetched, back to the topic, condense some nonsense, to put it simply, the author did not write the interesting points in some places where it should be, for example, some small NPCs that do not have much impact on the plot are used as stepping stones. K, but I didn't do that. Secondly, almost every character who appeared was in a state where the weak protagonist is almost equal to the protagonist. If he is stronger than the protagonist, there are few protagonists who can crush him. Even in terms of settings, the protagonist can easily defeat everyone, but in terms of plot and combat performance, he did not show his due strength. You told me 10 A million times, the protagonist's trump cards are so strong, and the protagonist's adventures are so powerful, but you fight with a gas refining mirror on the roadside for eight hours, and then, what are the venue factors, skill factors, and outsider factors are described in the article, but the fight lasts for eight hours, then I can only say, well, what a waste, do you understand? There are so many adventures, and they are all shown when Saitama appears. Most of the other times are unremarkable. The whole book looks like this. It is not fun to write. Even though the author said before that he should think from the two perspectives of the author and the reader, it may be because after all he wrote the novel himself, the author obviously did not fully think about the plot from the perspective of the reader. Do you have a sense of pleasure? How do you set it up? The performance is to hit it several times, without any major damage, and you have to be criticized (this is also an important point. It doesn't matter if you hit it several times. Some of your roadside NPCs can occasionally counter-attack the protagonist a few times. Just tell me whether you can write more fun) Oh, after writing so much, in fact, a lot of what I wanted to say at the beginning was My mood changed a bit after I wrote it, but I did feel a bit unhappy. The main reason was because after reading "The Road Is Hard" and the explanation about the plot and strength, I became more and more unhappy. The writing is obviously good and the plot arrangement is good. It's all to my liking, but it just can't be written in a pleasant way. It's really a pity. I don't want to say that this book is like this. I can tolerate the protagonist's feeling of suffocation. I have been reading this book until now, really because I think this book is well written, and the flaws do not hide the flaws. I can tolerate these shortcomings, but it does not mean that I will always be able to tolerate this book and spend money on it. So I think I really want to say something, author, put aside those settings and think carefully about this character. Will he really have a big impact on the subsequent plot if he fights with the protagonist for so long? Does it play an important role? If not, just use it as a stepping stone to highlight the feeling of pleasure. Isn't this the case with many slow-burning novels nowadays? Just like a spring, it keeps pressing down, and the depressing plot, etc., Finally ushered in an explosion of high bounce, high explosion, and ushered in refreshing emotions. However, the article written by the author is like a spring that has been used for an unknown period of time. It is pressed to the bottom, but the bounce is not high. Alas, I won't go any further. There are still a lot of chapters to read later. I hope the author can leave a comment if he sees it.

I read it in one sitting while taking advantage of the limited exemption The author's character creation is pretty good, the heroine and the supporting character have obvious personalities, and the dialogues are also pretty good. But as a fantasy novel, the presentation is still too ordinary. Many times it is obvious that you have upgraded/obtained secret treasures/defeated powerful enemies, but there is no sense of satisfaction that the protagonist has done something powerful. Also, the plot is a bit messy, and it should be better if it is streamlined. How about the author try a funny light novel after finishing writing it?

I have read Chapter 37 and evaluate the emotional line. Overall, it is inexplicable. The senior sister has a crush on the protagonist for no reason, and Ming Yuebai also falls in love with the protagonist strangely. If you say that Ming Yuebai is the reason why the protagonist is hostile to Liang Shuang and is sent to farmland, forget it. Ming Yuebai feels guilty towards the protagonist. I don't understand her initial affection so high all of a sudden. Ming Yueshuang is also very clichéd. I may be able to understand the complicated emotions that the author wants to express about two people who have different paths in life, but there is too little foreshadowing, resulting in a poor viewing experience and a lack of three-dimensional characters. As for the supporting characters in the emotional line, what I want to complain about the most is that when I see the senior brother, I can guess how the plot will be written later. It is so cliche. If the author can write well, I can still accept it reluctantly, but I am afraid that the author will collapse later. ps: After seeing the comments on the combat power post, I feel that the probability of writing this is quite high. It is very easy to praise someone who deliberately suppresses the level and combat power. pps: As a digression, in more than 30 chapters, a future power travels through time and space to deliver treasures. This obviously messing with the timeline looks really bad, man, will this photo really not kill you?

But all fantasy has this kind of shaking head and a wry smile at every turn. He sighed helplessly and shrugged. He touched his nose awkwardly. I am speechless. 😰Can't you speak normally?

The narration at the beginning is quite interesting, but there are too many storylines with female characters, and the male protagonist seems to be unable to move forward without the female characters. It is better to let the male protagonist become a casual cultivator soon after the beginning. 😅 The male protagonist will not be a eunuch again, so it is better not to write so many plots with female characters.

The writing is okay, but the plot has no logic. For example, the sect's rebellion is a joke. There is no deep hatred or huge interests or certainty of victory. It's just funny that there is a sudden life-and-death internal fight. Isn't your life valuable? Also, isn't this a cultivating sect? The fighting is no different from that of a martial arts sect.

I think it's good to see that the newbies are doing it and should be encouraged, and it's good to have huge continuity without dragging it out.

I found that this was not because the male protagonist did not regard the female protagonist as a woman, but because the male protagonist did not regard himself as a male. Is the author from a female channel?

After reading the first 50 chapters, it is still quite interesting. No matter how old the routine is, as long as it is well written, there will still be people reading it (such as me). I gave a reward of 5 yuan for the Chinese New Year. I hope the author will continue to work hard 😁

After reading dozens of chapters, it seems that they are all about women, all kinds of women, sickly girls, Wu Zetian who cultivates immortality, chasing her husband through time, silly and sweet, etc.

One is that the improvement of more than a hundred meridians is too slow. How can so many opportunities be so slow (the author must have the idea of ​​overpowering the battle), which makes the section of Sheng Tongyou too abrupt (but the author is aware of the problem). In fact, since I got the semi-immortal weapon, my positioning of the protagonist's combat power has been that he is invincible under normal conditions. He can kill Tongyou through narration and low-level tactics. As a result, I was given a big NPC upgrade. Many enemies came to Tongyou. This is nothing. I just want to ask why he can't defeat others under normal conditions. Yunling realm, this is ridiculous and uncomfortable. So many chance inheritances are just like taking them for nothing, and the Taoist skills learned are useless. The enemy depends entirely on the protagonist's explosive seeds and narration. In order to help the elder sister, you can't even defeat an NPC from a small sect, right. Where is your Acacia Sword? It was really uncomfortable for me to watch this section. It doesn't matter if you want to pass through the secluded world, or if you use a 50/50 ratio for your special physique (that Ruan Wenshui?), Why can an NPC step on the protagonist? The same goes for the swordsmanship. I don't understand why the male protagonist can't also learn the Heart Sword through the narration. The male protagonist's setting is based on the narration, so his understanding is fully developed. In the end, when he was fighting for the eldest sister in the sect competition, he also used mechanical deity (I think it would be better to defeat Zhou Bai at this time). Unfortunately, the author is under pressure both in terms of realm (the improvement of a hundred meridians is extremely slow) and combat power (even NPCs in the Yunling realm have to fight for a long time). I feel that the previous male protagonist It's unfair to kill Tongyou Realm. He was killed by such a useless male protagonist. In terms of setting, he really couldn't beat Zhou Bai and could only use mechanical magic. (This Zhou Bai is just a senior brother of Yuexiu Seven Meridians. I don't think it's appropriate to take off his clothes and become a mini-boss or an elite monster.) In general, the author has opened a new chapter, and the protagonist has also been promoted to Netherland. I hope that the subsequent plot will not be so frustrating.

I saw that when I returned to the Helian faction, I didn't hold back during the battle with Lu. The stack of forces in front of me felt like a decoration. Even if you say that the protagonist's qualifications are not good, he is only a small level away from the person named Lu. What is the effect of the Five Elements fellow practitioners? Even though the enemy with skills that could be defeated by a higher level in front was a casual cultivator, he couldn't break through the defense on this person. He really didn't hold back. But Helian Yan was able to tie with Wen Shui, who was known as Yun Ling's invincible, and the male protagonist, who had already defeated most of the core disciples of Sanqing Mountain, was defeated by Helian Yan? I can't even imagine what Zhou Bai would be like that could make Helianyan even a little desperate. Compared with the Helian sect, which is at the end of the Seven Lines, the strongest Sanqingshan is really 🤡. It is a fact that the combat power is a bit low. I have the same idea as the brother in Zhang Shuo. If you don't want to write an invincible style, don't always fight across combat power. In comparison, some characters are very weak. Actually, I quite like the feeling of everyone making progress together. But it still feels outrageous. Not to mention that everyone has adventures when they grow up. There are many people who are more talented and have more adventures than the male protagonist. Then can you write a character who has an adventure in the middle of Mingyi Mirror and defeats the male protagonist? Anyway, it can be solved with the sentence "His adventures are better", but I believe that if you have the idea of ​​​​writing a good result, you will definitely not write such a plot that seeks death. Finally, I would like to complain about He Lianyan. I feel that the male protagonist likes him a bit inexplicably, as if he fell in love suddenly. But fortunately, Helian is mostly in the state of a passerby heroine, and there are not many scenes. I came here for the narration, which was no longer interesting at first. I think the rest of the writing is pretty good.

Can Chapter 37 of this book be rewritten? The perception plummeted, so will there be this kind of NT plot in the future? If a brother can tell me, I can decide whether to continue reading.

The author also knew that this part of the sect competition was a nt operation that Helian had thought up. Jiang Jue had been swimming in this nt operation for more than a hundred chapters. In the end, the ancestor was in the mud. Jiang Jue, who was swimming in the cesspit, was not happy at all. He still had to enjoy the ancestor's hum. If Zhou Bai were a normal person, that would be fine. He was not normal either. He was the one who instigated Jiang Jue's output at the beginning because he had suppressed it. Even if we take into account the issue of the combat power system, if we don't let Jiang Jue feel happy, then He Lianyan will feel good. She stood up and knocked Zhou Bai to death. Wasn't she more of a heroine than hiding behind a junior brother who was a big difference from Zhou Bai? Let Jiang Jue enlighten Helianyan, and then Helianyan breaks through and knocks Zhou Bai to death. This is better than just holding back and not getting better, and the character can still be established. As for Helianyan's operation, the author also said that it is impossible to win across a large realm in principle, so she is watching Jiang Jue risk his life in vain. Even if you, Helianyan, only regard Jiang Jue as a not-so-familiar friend, you can't roast him like this. Even Fang Youli's super heroic personality in his previous life was more organized than He Lianyan's anthropomorphic one.

To be honest, the writing is a bit awkward in some places.

Also, I feel that the protagonist is just like a casual cultivator. Whether it is skills or spells, he relies on his own chance and luck to obtain them. Few of them are given by the elders of the master, especially after he is promoted to Yunling Realm.

After reading Chapter 51, I don't think it's like a fairy tale from a male channel. I have fun but I'm wandering between happiness and unhappiness. All of the above are still acceptable. However, I don't know why, but this book always gave me the feeling of a female cultivating immortality, which was too female. And if you play too many jokes, it's not good. The fun in Chapter 51 is all about the furnace and the pornographic accent. If you read too much, you'll get bored. But if it weren't for the use of so many furnaces and pornographic accents, I really think it's a female channel's book

Even though he knew that his junior sister was interested in him, he didn't express his opinion. He neither refused nor accepted, so he remained ambiguous.

It's good to watch, but I don't want to be a eunuch 😭

It feels like the male protagonist has absolutely no need for love, he has no desires or desires. Tomorrow Bai was as unmoved as a saint even as he brought it to his mouth. I don't know who I like, the girls are all passive guides, when can I decide on one, let's do some welfare plot to make the brothers happy.

This really overwhelms the protagonist's combat power. A dog on the side of the road can even kick the protagonist twice.

After reading dozens of chapters, the author of this book is very crazy, which makes the logic of this book very poor, and the plot twists are almost non-existent and very abrupt.

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