The Dusky Maze City

This Zhuo Ying is so bad. Tens of millions of years from now, human beings will still use power for personal gain. It's terrible to think about it. In short, I also want to learn this profession

The background setting is quite interesting, and so is the writing. Small issues in emotional and character aspects can also be covered by settings. Seeing that the author seems to be double-editing? I still suggest you finish writing a book carefully first, it will be easier to read this way

Why did it stop updating? I support a monthly pass and hope the author will continue his efforts

Even after reading the first 3 chapters, I can still read it. He is also a god.

In the far future, human beings have evolved to a very outrageous situation, but several wars have also destroyed many civilizations. In this era, the protagonist as a child (100 years old, human lifespan in this era is as long as 10,000 years) triggered the ability of the exorcist and began a wonderful journey of growth. Recommended trial reading. Speaking of which, I noticed a familiar smell after watching it. The narrative style of this book is similar to that of My Age of Magic and The Extra-Dimensional Warlock, so I'm afraid it will take tens of millions of words to write.

The concept is a little new. After reading it for a while, I found that there are really few effective words. It was very uncomfortable to read. I kept turning the page and turning the page.

It is very good to start with a detailed description of the writing, then expand the world and explain the background. However, the focus of the explanation was not grasped well. We must grasp the key points and take into account other key points. Some explanations were too much, resulting in some things not being explained clearly. The other thing is the language. The language is a bit white. You can try to create a writing style, but I still recommend that the dialogue should reflect a person's personality. The protagonist is a little boy, and other people, such as Judge Xiu Ming, can be a little more old-fashioned and not too straightforward. For the narration type, it should be a little more capable. It is best to focus on the focus of the chapter. Some less frequent ones can be placed in other related chapters. Generally, new authors choose a subject they like, always have a lot of ideas to share, and cannot control the desire to express. Expression is a good habit, and ideas are the source of creation, but too many ideas will destroy the balance of the content. Another point is that a new author cannot control the number of words in a chapter. Expressing freely will make a chapter have a lot of words. If he wants to refine and shrink it on the plot, he will not be able to write a lot of words. He has to learn how to make the structure attractive. From the aspect of information density, high information density is difficult to understand, reading is slow, and reading pressure is high. Science fiction is inherently a dense genre. In addition, this kind of cyberpunk-like world view has many settings and the density is even greater. Therefore, it is very necessary to dilute this density. It is strongly recommended to spread out the introduction and follow the plot more. Then we will deal with it visually. The number of words in a paragraph can be a little less, both long and short. The original ten pages of words can be stretched to twelve or thirteen pages, which should be much better visually. In addition, it is the core of online novels, the creation of conflicts and the advancement of plots. It can also be said that the creation and development of plots are more enjoyable. There is no explanation for the conflict. The other is the advancement of the plot. The advancement of the plot must be supported by strong content, otherwise no matter how good the writing is, it will be a mess. It can be seen from this book that the protagonist is an F-level professional, so this can be used as a reason to advance - to become stronger. Many books advance like this, constantly becoming stronger, infinitely stronger, surpassing all, and then the finale. Well, it is best to add a few more groups to your cyberpunk novels, such as exploring a certain issue (such as pursuing the truth of the world, who behind the scenes shaped the world like this, protecting someone...

Damn, he's not like a novice writer at all. He's at least in the top ten.

... From a child's perspective, although the protagonist is a child, some parts are still too childish and too young.

I hope to see more interactions between the wet and weird aunt Ruan Qi and the protagonist, and more weird auntsฅ՞•ﻌ•՞ฅ