Honkai: Star Rail: I Was Just an Ordinary Xianzhou Citizen

Danshu was born blind, and as a fairy boat person, she could not accept transplanted organs, whether biological or mechanical. She once had her eyes closed, but the abundant and blessed body rejected the modifications acquired. The short-term light deepened her desire, which made her sink deeper and deeper.

The protagonist is a local, but his thinking is too much like a time traveler

I remember there was a speculation that things like the Earth Marrow, which did not conform to the conservation of energy, were blessed by the Guardian. The original intention was to let the Beloberg people follow the example of the Amber King in building the city wall. The power of the Guardian would withstand the wind and snow and suppress the rift. When the city wall was built to cover the entire Yaliluo, the influence of the star core would be completely eliminated.

The plot of going alone to meet the Star Core Hunters persuaded me to quit. What's the point? On the one hand, he said that he would seek refuge in Xianzhou, but on the other hand, he immediately accepted someone who approached him privately. What do you think? Moreover, the protagonist is rejuvenated and lived to be 67 years old. You wrote it this way and it seems that this setting is different.

It's a pity that in fan fiction, the indigenous protagonists naturally lack a sense of substitution. This is a failure, enough to dissuade most people from reading the fanfic (unless the native is a popular character in the original work). Moreover, the protagonist in the book does not act like an aboriginal at all, but more like a time traveler who just doesn't know the plot. If you assume that the protagonist is an earth traveler, but you have never played Star Railroad and don't know the plot, there will be no sense of violation at all. Don't underestimate this small setting. The reader is the protagonist, which is very important. I thought it was good at first, but because the protagonist is an indigenous person, many of the actions became more and more awkward as I watched them, and in the end I lost interest in watching them.

Can I make a wish to marry the Star God of Fertility?

This is the first time I saw someone writing about Star Dome Railway at the starting point. Come on, the author.

In fact, the writing is quite good, but the first thing is that the timing is a bit messy, and the second thing is that it relies a little too much on the game plot. I could think of something different.

The author was slapped in the face by the new plot. 🤭

Very well written! Hope it stays!