
Douluo Dalu: Qian Renxue Becomes My Disciple, and Jingliu Is My Wife
斗罗:千仞雪拜师,老婆镜流
- Status
- Completed
- Length
- 178k Words
- Genre
- Light Novel
- Subgenre
- ACG Fanfiction
- Updated
- 1y ago
- Source
- Qidian
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128Chapters
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The character is OOC
Let me sum it up based on my experience of watching fandoms... First of all, Kage-ryu is set up to be summoned, but you have to know that people in Kyou-ryu have lived for almost 800 years. How can they become an old husband and wife just because they have been together day and night for twelve years? Was it forced by the system? It is recommended that you change it to your own clone, but the mirror flow template, otherwise I would be so embarrassed that I would pick my feet when watching mirror flow praising Wuhun Secondly, the protagonist is a bit waterlogged, such a waterlogged protagonist really doesn't know how to give mirror flow to sleeping clothes, and the dialogue between the characters is too pale, and sometimes there is no cause and effect The initial meeting place was too careless, so I just walked around and saw it. You must know that there are still a lot of spirit masters on the outside of the Star Forest, and even in its infancy, the Titan Giant Ape should have lived near the outside and close to the inside. It shouldn't be close to the thatched house where the protagonist is located to the west. And why is it a thatched house? It can't be a tree house? The location feels like it can be set in the mountains and valleys to the north of the forest. The mountains surrounding the protagonist's tree house are isolated from the world. There are two streams near the tree house. The tree house, the vegetable patch under the house, and various human tools make this place full of a life atmosphere that is incompatible with the forest It can be seen that no matter how active the Titans are in the west, they are more likely to be captured and kept in captivity if they are close to the Wuhun Palace. Moreover, they should not be stationed by the Lake of Life at this time. According to the strength of the Jingryu cultivator, it should start at 8 hours, and it seems that the protagonist's body is still supported by the system... It is still too much, and ha, the soul circulation? Are you serious? If you don't follow Kage-ryu's teachings, you can cut down the stars with just a flick of your finger Feeling like a little mouse in the dark, according to our understanding Kage-ryu should just freeze one head and leave it outside without saying anything, and then ask, you shouldn't talk so much Regarding accommodation, you don't have soul coins to pay for it with paintings? As for culture, Douluo Continent focuses on the backward and inferior. Do you expect an innkeeper to understand a painting? And if a painting can allow ordinary people to see that it is extraordinary, it should be infused with the existence of intention, and the intention must also have corresponding experience or strength. Although it is an invincible text, the soul ring is designed like this, alas, a small failure ? Qian Renxue is the little princess of the Wuhun Palace. Even if she doesn't say that the Titled Douluo will follow her every day, the Soul Douluo or the Fighting Saint should protect her secretly at all times, right? The probability of a genius dying young is really small, right? This part is too intellectual, I suggest you change it After that, Liu Erlong's provocation was even more brainless. If this was a Kage-ryu that already had Konjac Shuang, he should have cut it directly, and he shouldn't have slapped her hand but used her Zenpakuken instead In conclusion, if the author only works on single-player or plans to become a eunuch at any time, that's up to you. If you want to improve the results, you have to change the poisonous points. There are too many OOCs for me to count, and the same goes for lowering intelligence, alas Proposal (Going to the Zhutian Stream) - When the protagonist comes to Douluo, he should master rule-based soul skills, involving the ultimate in single elements or space rules If he takes the other side, the system should be matched with the corresponding training environment or copy. The protagonist's behind-the-scenes development stream of the system is too targeted, and to cultivate Qian Renxue, isn't it just like Yu Xiaoan, picking a genius to train? Why not pick a commoner or an auxiliary soul master and let him/her lead another path of cultivation and become famous throughout the continent? Kage flow (teacher master) - It is recommended to change to a clone with a mirror flow template, master the skills of the mirror flow but no memory or only a small part of the impressive memory. In this way, at least the OOC will not be too serious. It is just that the protagonist is affected by the memory. Instead of being used as a nanny for the protagonist, regarding how to show the protagonist's awesomeness, Jingliu has been following him to teach his disciples Wu, and the protagonist teaches his disciples the principles of life, making others think that the protagonist is a hugger. Then when Jingliu leaves and bullies the protagonist, the protagonist also opens the ice field to freeze the environment for a hundred or ten miles without hurting anyone. This shows his awesomeness even more: "If you can't listen to the words, then I also know a little bit about the fists and kicks." The apprentice can be a child with a similar background to Huo Yuhao. Why does it have to be Qian Renxue It depends on the path the protagonist takes. If you follow the soul circulation, you will master the regular soul skills. The first to fourth should be the amplification type, and then gradually master the rule type. The move type is the most useless. The moves can be learned from the mirror style. Otherwise, how can you say that the swordsmanship of the mirror style never picks people? As long as you learn from her, she will teach you! A 1518-word long review. Can the author see if there is anything to recommend it?
I want to ask why it starts in Douluo and not in the world of Iron Collapse.
Come on, brother, update more episodes.
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